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Reading Reviews for Shadows in the Forest
  
4 Reviews Found

Review #1, by a fan Falling into the Past

7th July 2015:
I just found your story love it

Author's Response: Thank you! I am sorry I ahve been on Haitus due to family situations. I'll probably have the next chapter submitted within a day or so. :)

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Review #2, by blackdiamond A Herd of Problems

5th June 2015:
Your writing is excellent and this story is so catchy and mysterious after two chapters. Different. I really love that you put centaurs in this story. The only other story I read that had extensive characterization of centaurs was:
' The Fool, The Emperor and The Hanged Man'.
I certainly plan to commit with you and your story. Placed on my Favorite and on Current Reading. Looking forward to when Hermione meets with Draco! Hope you have next chapter in progress as I can't wait to see where you take this story. Best regards. Great story.

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I am glad you are having fun reading the story. I have always thought that it would be interesting to use magical creatures that are not often seen, and centaurs, though mentioned, are not explored in the Harry Potter universe.

I am currently writing the third chapter at this moment and will hopefully have it submitted in a few days. I hope you enjoy the meeting between the two.

-Lily


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Review #3, by Jayna Just a Normal Day

3rd June 2015:
Hello!

This seems quite interesting. One thing I noticed was that you switched between tenses a little bit, just a word here and there. I liked your characterization a lot, and I also really enjoyed how you managed to cram a lot of backstory about the time from the end of DH to the setting of this story into one chapter. Everything apart from the Ron/Hermione breakup seemed realistic and in-character to me (sorry, canon shipper). Overall, interested to see where you take this.

-Jayna

Author's Response: Thank you so much, Jayna!

I am glad you enjoyed the story thus far, and thank you for pointing out my tense issue. I know it happens, but I often don't catch it. No worries about canon shipping! JKR wrote it that way for a reason, but I do enjoy the idea of Hermione/Draco.

Hope you continue to read,
Lily


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Review #4, by TreacleTart Just a Normal Day

2nd June 2015:
Hi there!

I'm here from the forums because I saw that you had posted your very first story! Congratulations!

I thought this was a lovely first chapter. I really got a feel for who post-war Hermione was and her goals and aspirations. You did a good job of portraying her sheer determination and will to make things better for disadvantaged groups.

I have to tell you that I was over the moon to see Ernie here. He's one of my favorite characters to write about and I even have a story that focuses solely on him, but for whatever reason he doesn't seem to be a very popular choice for people to write about. Anyway, I really was happy that you included him!

The ending was sure ominous. Here everything is going fine and then a shriek breaks the idyllic scene. I wonder what's happening. It definitely was a good cliffhanger and leaves me wondering what's to come in the next chapter.

As a rule of thumb, I always try to provide a little bit of constructive criticism in my reviews, so here's what I have for you. I did notice in a couple of places throughout the chapter you bounced between present tense and past tense. It was disconcerting because it would happen in the same sentence at times. You may want to go through and fix that up a bit.

Otherwise, I think you've got a lovely start to your story here. I'll be anxious to see what happens next! Good job and congratulations again!

~Kaitlin

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your response Kaitlin! I enjoyed your review.

As for my tenses, that is something I have struggled with for a while. The problem is that when I self edit, my mind knows what I'm saying and doesn't see the problem in the text. I will try to do better in the future though!

Thank you so much for your review once more.

--Lily


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