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Reading Reviews for When The War Hits Home.
  
6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by princesslily_36 Chapter 1.

28th April 2017:
Here for the CTF ATTACK!

Marauders! Now if this were the flag story I would be over the moon because a) I would have found it, and b) it's the MARAUDERS!

The opening scene is just so lovely! It just has the feels of the London rains and Kings Cross Station bustle, the muggles and the wizards all at one place and how the scene is woven around the two... And the whole scent of the Marauders being somewhere around (or oh well that's just me I guess!).

Though nothing much really happened here, you have set the scene very well! We get to see Kings Cross, and then Lily (YAY Lily!) and her friends too! Oohhh Christina the rebel (are you a fan of Grey's anatomy by any chance? haha! I think I remember you said you were). We also see other OCs, who I'm guessing would be the ones Sirius or Remus or Peter might be paired with, haha! Lily's already complaining about Vernon to her friends!

Lily's prefect now so I'm guessing this is set after 5th year. I can't wait to see the boys now. James and Sirius and Remus... oh my!

Thanks for the lovely read and hope to come back for more!

Cheers
~Ysh

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Review #2, by Sinterklaas Chapter 1.

3rd December 2015:
Ho Ho Hello! I'm so glad that you've decided to give me a chance!

Oh how I love the hustle and bustle of going back to Hogwarts. When I went, we couldn't ride a train, because they weren't invented. And that Vernon, of course Miss Lily doesn't like him...*shudders* That boy was almost permanently on the naughty list, you know? Christina might want to watch her language, because that could most definitely land her on the naughty list.

Your writing is lovely, and I do love OCs, but it's a shame that there's no mention of the Sinterklaas in this chapter!

Hoping you have a magical Holiday Season!

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Review #3, by HeyMrsPotter Chapter 2

4th October 2015:
Hi, Ineke! Happy birthday :D

I read the first chapter of this story during the house cup so thought I'd come back for more :)

I enjoyed this chapter as much as the first one. You have a very easy reading style of writing that flows well. I'm liking your OC's so far and the relationships you've created between them and Lily. The banter between them at the end when they were talking about Vernon and Petunia (ew, by the way :p) really made me laugh.

Another enjoyable chapter :) I hope you've had a great birthday!

Dee

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Review #4, by Felpata Lupin Chapter 2

8th August 2015:
Ok, so I decided I'd read the second chapter now, and I'm happy I did because it was such fun!!! Christina's rant at the end was simply hilarious!!! She's so melodramatic, and I seriously love it!!!

I suppose the Marauders will have a surprise for the feast... I'm curious to know what you'll come up with... Everything has been very quiet so far, I expect it to change soon! Can't wait for some good Potter-Evans bickering!!!

Good job so far!
Much love,
Chiara

Author's Response: Haha. I am working on thinking about that! I'm sure they have something up their sleeve! But Christina is so much fun to write and I can't wait to get James in the story as well!

I'm glad you liked it!


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Review #5, by Felpata Lupin Chapter 1.

8th August 2015:
Hi Ineke!
I thought it was time for me to check out your work! And since, as you know, I LOVE the Marauders, I couldn't help but stop here (even if this means another novel-lenght story to follow... not good for me...)

Anyway, I think you set up this first chapter pretty well! Not much happened here, but it didn't need to... You give us a glimpse of your OCs and introduced us to your story in a quiet way, and I liked it! By the way, Christina seems an interesting character. I already love her rebelliousness. And Isa seems a sweet girl. I'm curious to learn more about them!

And obviously, I can't wait to meet the boys!!! I suppose I'll have to wait till the next chapter...

I particularly loved your descriptions. The Muggles running to take cover from the storm and the Hogwarts students running to Platform 9 3/4 with their improbable luggage! It was so much fun to read!

Great job on this, I will be back, hopefully soon!
Tons of love,
Chiara

Author's Response: Hi Chiara!

Thanks so much for your lovely review! I hope some action will be coming soon, but that's all to be written yet! Either way, I really, really love Christina and I absolutely love writing her, so you'll be definitely seeing more of her!

The boys will show up soon as well, don't worry! And thanks so much for the compliments on the descriptions. I do think they work well for stories, and I'm glad I'm able to get them done right!

Love, Ineke


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Review #6, by HeyMrsPotter Chapter 1.

12th June 2015:
Hello! Iím here reviewing for the House Cup again! Okay, itís official, Iím setting up camp on your author page and you canít make me leave!
I adore your description, I get such a vivid picture of the rush in the rain to the train station, owls and toads all over the place! I always find that first chapters are really difficult because you want to get the reader interested but without giving too much away. Youíve got a good balance here, and Iím looking forward to finding out where this goes from here.
There were a couple of bits that I noticed that were really minor but that could be fixed up. In the first two paragraphs you used Ďmad dashí 3 or 4 times, maybe you could change a couple of those just so the repetition isnít disrupting of the great flow you have through the rest of the story. Also where youíve meant to italicise your words the coding hasnít worked because of the square brackets, you have to use these ones < i > (assuming you used the simple uploader) Theyíre really minor things though and that didnít stop me loving this any less.
Dee
Hufflepuff House Cup 2015.

Author's Response: Hi Dee!

Thank you so much for your review! I really appreciate it! Thanks for saying it has got balance and that you're looking forward to finding out more - it really does make me happy!

I've realised that the coding isn't working and I'll fix it as soon as I get the chapter back from my beta!

Thanks again!


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