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Review #1, by Ron 4 Hermione Endings

14th April 2017:
Hey there, here for CTF!

This was an interesting fic to read for two reasons, one: I donít normally read/Iím not a fan of Draco/Hermione (Hence my Penname lol) and two: it was written backwards. Although this chapter was pretty good to read since it was only one chapter and it was a break up scene so win-win haha.

I think youíve captured the relationship really well, as much as I hate to admit it. Youíve kept their personalities the same and I can see this happening. From Hermione avoiding Draco to him tricking her into thinking there was a meeting, it was all very believable and in Canon to their nature.

I like when youíve chosen this to take place too, because theyíre both old enough to be interested in each other, seeing as the yule ball and victor krum were last year, and there's a lot that would test their relationship in that year too, which youíve touched upon like the inquisitor squad Draco almost being a death eater and Dumbledore's Army.

I think this was an interesting start to what will probably be an interesting fic, I canít say Iím excited to see how they get together but Iím interested in how you write it.

-Shaza :)

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Review #2, by Dojh167 Endings

14th April 2017:
Hufflepuff CtF Review

I love unconventional narrative and your writing, so Iím excited to find this story! I wouldnít normally go poking around Dramione unless I was looking for something short like this, so the stars have aligned her ;)

This is really interesting, because weíre diving into the middle (or end) of their relationship without fully understanding the dynamic. If not for the authorís note, I wouldnít have realized this would be a breakup scene, as Dracoís eager fixation on Hermioneís body speaks to me as much earlier in a relationship, but I donít know how long theyíve been together so itís hard to judge that here.

I am not a frequent reader f Dramione, and I think in the ones Iíve read they have been post-DH or an age equivalent AU. Itís new to me to see them as fifteen year olds, and I can really see how their inherent differences plus their young ages make this relationship unstable.

I really like the paragraph beginning ďHermione gathered her thingsĒ and how much sensual imagery you use, talking about the heat and the air kissing her.

This story has a really great rhythm and pace too it - things are rapidly moving forward (even though theyíre moving backwards) and it gives the events the feel of inevitability

I like the thread of Hermioneís anger throughout the story. Itís not a trait we often see highlighted in her, and here we see lots of distinct forms of anger in different sections.

This was a really interesting story. I had a bit f a hard time following it, but I know that could be in part because I was rushing through it for CtF. I thought it was a very interesting choice to write it backwards to front. It washelful that you put the AN about that at the beginning, though it could have been interesting if you left that for the end as well. As I read it, knowing the order, some things made obvious sense to me and something didnít perfectly fit to me. My rain kept trying to interpret it in the written order, and the same thing was true there - some things made sense in that order, and some things did not fit. It would have been cool for me t get to the end and realize the clever reason for why they didnít fit.

Very interesting! Also many hugs!


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Review #3, by Infinityx Endings

20th June 2015:
House Cup 2015 Slytherin

Wow. That was so intense and filled with so many emotions. I don't even know what to think. :O I love the way you've alternated between Draco's and Hermione's PoVs, that was such an amazing and effective writing technique. It really showed the contrast between their thinking and served to completely flesh out their personalities.

While I don't like Draco's character in this, I do like the way you've written him. You haven't made him this soft person inside who falls in love with Hermione but he's still the same arrogant, cruel person we see in the books and that's so terrible but brilliant. Every section was a slow build up to the final scene and the way it ends is just so powerful.

That part where Draco lets go of Hermione when she starts crying is so interesting. It makes me wonder whether it was because he didn't like it when girls cry or because he thought she was unattractive that way. It was such a brilliant bit of detail with so many underlying questions as well.

Your writing is spectacular and I love the descriptions and the way you've distinguished between the two characters' personalities here. Great job!

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Review #4, by LastMinuteLuna Endings

31st May 2015:
Hello! Hello!

I'm LastMinuteLuna and I'm dropping by to leave you a review for the Pass It Along Challenge! I know. I know. It's awfully close to the deadline. I am cutting it quite close, but they don't call me LastMinuteLuna for nothing!

But enough about me. Let's talk about your fabulous story!

Poor Hermione! I can't imagine what Draco could'be done to trick her, but it seems that she'd grown to believe he wasn't as bad as he actually is. It's a shame that when she seems to have finally let her guard down, he betrayed her and all of her causes.

I thought your characterization of Draco was spot on. He was snarky and arrogant and detestable. The way he so easily tells her that she never meant anything to him except for a good snog just really solidifies how cruel he can be.

I did feel like Hermione was a touch OC, mainly because I have a hard time picturing her being this naive. I think it would take a lot more than a snog to make her let her guard down, although she isn't always the cleverest when it comes to affairs of the heart.

You have definitely sunk this ship with this one and my poor Dramione shipper heart along with it. Good luck in the challenge!

Uh oh! Times up. I have to run. I've got a few more reviews to leave and the deadline is approaching! Thanks for such a sad love story!


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Review #5, by ADventurous Endings

17th May 2015:
Hi, it's your Secret Santa for the Pass It Along Challenge!

I'll start by saying that I find your writing amazing. I've already read through everything I want to review, and I just absolutely adore your approach of everything. You have a strong voice.

This story is so interesting. The whole formatting of it is so unique. The whole flipping back and forth between their POVs. And on top of that, it's backwards?! That's amazing and talented in so many ways. I love it.

It's really fascinating to hear both of their thoughts going back and forth in the same moment. Admittedly, Draco creeps me out with his cold indifference and vulgar ways. He's so much like his father in this, it's unreal. You paint the perfect mask that Draco wears during the books. The only person that could ever do him more justice is the Queen JK herself! I've never read anyone write Draco quite so in character as you. Not that I read Dramiones much. In short, I just loved how you wrote him!

He seems so uncaring, so harsh toward Hermione. I feel terrible for her, for having to deal with him going on about how he doesn't care for her in any way, and yet there he goes kissing her. I'd slap him too, Hermione!

Hermione's written well also. How she got lost in thought, too busy analyzing everything to realize what was going on. That is all Hermione. And then her attacking him is her as well. She's so loyal and fierce and unforgiving, and you wrote that perfectly. I absolutely love it.

I can't wait to find out how it all started and how they got where they were. You did a wonderful job catching my attention with Draco's vulgar thoughts and Hermione's betrayed feelings. I loved it!

- ADventurous

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Review #6, by Shadowkat Endings

7th May 2015:
Well sunk them alright. Dang.

Author's Response: I did. :( But don't worry, there's still more! I'm writing this story in backwards chronological order, so the good stuff is still to come.

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