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Reading Reviews for The Ultimatum
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Review #1, by XOdannieXO It's an ailment not a joy

4th May 2015:
What a great start, truly.

There isn't much I can tell to improve on because I really like your style of writing. But please do check the spacing in the following chapters. It was rather difficult to read because of the large blocks of text.

I love that your OC. Cassia, sees her crush on James as an ailment. Can't wait to see how she will deal with it.

Also; how coincidental! I also have a character named Richard Davies, who is a Ravenclaw and his house's Quidditch Captain!

Author's Response: haha that is rather coincedental!
Thanks for the advice, i've tried to ammend that in my lastest chapter... hope it works and is easier for you to read.
Thanks for the review, it's nice to hear someone (other than my biased self) is enjoying it so far, and hopefully the way Cass deals with her ailment keeps you reading :)

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