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2 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Chazzie Beloved Son

11th May 2015:
Hey Vicki!

I'm here with a slightly late hot seat review! I'm sorry for it not being on time, but it is rather hectic round here at the moment because of exams.

I love this story. It is so well written, and your characterisation of Edward and Eileen was brilliant. I thought the fact that Edward was magic made the story even more bittersweet. My mind is running wild with how differently things could have turned out now.

The entire connection between Eileen and Edward was really lovely to read. Eileen is so tough and hardened by so many years living with her husband, from having to survive on her own and try to help her son to succeed. Edward was a 'classic gentleman' and I loved that he still weeds his parents graves. He doesn't try to make things any more difficult than they have to be, and instead tries to help out with whatever is in his power. You really fleshed them out, and it was so sweet to read.

I really adored your descriptions. I felt so involved in the story, and you did a really good job of painting in little bits of it at a time rather than in one big chunk. The revelation at the end was built up to superbly. I'm so full of feelings right now, it was just amazing.

Thank you for writing this
Lottie

Author's Response: Hi Lottie,

Thank you for writing a review for my story, even in this busiest of times. I'm so glad you liked it. It was my first attempt at writing a love story, but I wanted to steer clear of the teenagers, so I chose people closer to my own age, and love of sweethearts gets all tangled up with love of children and of family in general.

From time to time I see stories about Mr. and Mrs. Evans, usually in connection with their teenage daughters Lily and Petunia, but never about just them, much less the preceding generation. And I don't think we see much about Snape's parents at all. So it was gratifying to venture into little-explored territory. I understand that JKR said in an interview that all these people died before Harry was born, that in fact Eileen died shortly after Snape started school, but that always sounded like a convenient method of just getting them out of the way (they weren't that old), so I preferred to think they continued to live although it makes this story AU.

I have often wondered what happened to magical children, such as Muggleborns, whose parents chose not to send them to Hogwarts. Did the children learn to suppress the magic, or did it break forth occasionally, or did it just wither away from disuse? I chose to have Edward learn to suppress it, not ever really understanding what it was until Lily got her letter.

For the descriptions of the old houses, I used a wonderful website that had extensive information, including floor plans and descriptions, of the old millworker housing in the northern English cities. I could see that the information about Snape's house in Spinners End matched that website exactly, so the rest was easy.

Thank you so much for reviewing.

Vicki


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Review #2, by Microwaved Marshmallow Peep Beloved Son

4th April 2015:
peep peep

It is I, a fluffy pink sugary confection sitting in a microwave while reading stories on HPFF. That's right, I'm a Peep! :D

...Wow. There are many things that could be said about this story, but the first thing I want to say is that it is beautiful. I hardly noticed the length of the story because I was so absorbed in the progression of events from start to finish.

Meeting in a graveyard is a bit morbid, but flowers grow where the dead are buried. The fact that Edward and Eileen met each other and built their friendship on a mutual connection that was much more connected than either of them realized... It was so interesting to read, and I loved their friendship by the end.

It's getting a bit toasty in here because someone turned on the microwave, so I'll try to make the rest of my review get to the point.

What I admire most about this story was the beginning, when Edward was talking about his life. I had no earthly idea who it could be, even when he described his daughter's death and his other daughter's estrangement. It never occurred to me to think of the Evans parents as alive, so creating this character is a very unique and brilliant undertaking. I hope that you're so proud of this story, because it absolutely melts my marshmallowy heart.

10...9...8...

Oh no. Time is running out, so I have no more time to dwell on the various wonderful aspects of your story. Please accept my apologies and know that I will perish having remembered this shining story as my last thought.

&hearts
Microwaved Marshmallow Peep

BEEEP!
*muffled explosions*

Author's Response: Hi, Microwaved Marshmallow Peep (Love that name!),

I'm so sorry to know that you are no more, and I hope that you're not splattered all over the inside of the microwave oven, because that would be quite the mess to clean up. :S But if you had to depart this world, I'm glad that it was with happy thoughts of this story.

This story was inspired by a Hallowe'en season challenge (at another site), written to a prompt of two people meeting in a graveyard on Hallowe'en, both of them not knowing all the secrets of who the other person is. Since the story was supposed to be a romance, I decided to write it about people my own age.

After I submitted it there, my moderator advised me that it had to be AU because JKR had said, in one of those many post-publication interviews that I don't always keep up with, that Lily's parents were both dead by the time Lily and James were murdered, and I later learned that she had said, in one of those interviews, that Severus Snape's mother had died at about the time he entered school. My moderator and I both agreed that these unconvincingly convenient deaths of otherwise healthy, middle-aged citizens in modern Britain were just uninspired ways of getting rid of peripheral characters, and it was more reasonable to believe that these characters had actually survived.

A main contributor to this story was a website that I stumbled across while researching the old British mill towns. The website was a goldmine of information about the worker housing in these towns, down to the architectural details, actual floor plans, and descriptions of how they have been modernized for comfortable contemporary living, with bathrooms added (who would have thought?)

Thank you so much for this generous review. It is so nice to think of these characters as being happy rather than as being dead.

Vicki


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