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Reading Reviews for Along the Broken
2 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Frankie05 I

9th August 2015:
Ow. My heart.

You captured Remus perfectly, in my opinion. I can't believe how spot on it is. I love the innocence at the beginning of the story, like it is the beginning of something good. I enjoyed that Sirius was into Remus, and Remus, unsure of himself, let him be snogged by Sirius.

I loved how they grew, and got to know each other so much more, they intimacy grew and I loved that for them. I do wish they told Peter, but I can see why they didn't. James and Lily were both happenstance. They walked in on them in the throws, and that is how they figured it out. Poor Peter, he never knew, but leave it to Remus to think that this was the thing that prompted Peter to betray them all.

I hate that they grew apart the way they did. I hate that there was tension and it was only ever relieved by sex and not by talking. ihate that the intimacy was gone, because you just know that is what Remus would have wanted.

I think you did a fantastic job writing this. I was sad when he started to look at Tonks and Sirius encouraged him. Like Why? No. It's just meant for you and Sirius, come on. But you made me feel. You made me see the whole thing in my eye, you made me hate the way this ended (because it had to) and you made me sad that Sirius died all over again. Well done :)

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Review #2, by Lostmyheart I

4th March 2015:

I am so sorry for being late with the February Review exchange, I've had a very busy week and I haven't had any energy to read anything.

But alas, here I am and I've finished reading your entry for the Slytherin Challenge!
I see you've picked the same prompt as I have and this is quite interesting as I've never read a Remus/Sirius before.

It's a lovely concept, the plot is nice and it's great to see the development of their relationship throughout the years.
I just wish you'd been more detailed with it, I think you could have gone really far if you explained how they truly felt about each other, how it slowly developed instead of starting it off with a quick kiss, you know?
It's so interesting with the Peter thing, where you're kind of hinting that it might be the reason to why he betrayed them, because they didn't share everything with him to being with and that could be the reason to why he switched sides. I'm sure Voldemort would've found that weak spot in his heart, the taste of betrayal and mistrust towards his friends.

I enjoyed reading this and despite the length of it, it was quite easy to read.

- Avi

Author's Response: No worries, I know how you feel! Thank you for reading, and this is my first attempt at any sort of LGTBQA fiction so I'm glad that you picked this story.

I agree with you about the description, I didn't know how to completely describe it, but then the entries were due and I wanted to get one in. So, this is definitely something that I will go back to and add some stuff to.

Totally agree about the Peter thing, and I thought it added another facet to the story, instead of just making it a sad romance fic.

Thanks for reading and reviewing and I'm glad that you enjoyed it!

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