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Review #1, by MissesWeasley123 Introduction

19th March 2015:
Hey!

It's of course really interesting what you've decided to make Lavender be like. Her character in this is very simple, and strong minded towards one opinion. To destroy Hermione and of course ultimately, seek revenge.

I think you really should watch out on your commas and grammar and punctuation in general. Getting a beta reader could maybe help you proof read. It really would take your writing to the next level. Otherwise, it flowed pretty well.

And also, this was really short so if you wanted to make your chapters longer, really focus on description, and that will enhance your writing as well! Good luck with that.

Parvati's character ♥ She really is one of my faves, and I love seeing her represented in stories, and you wrote her very well. Her decision to stay true to her values and tell ron and Harry even though she is Lavender's friend was a good one. A very Gryffindor like thing to do!

Great work, keep it up!
(For the HPFF fundraising review challenge)
-Gryffindor

Author's Response: Thanks for your review, Mrs. Weasley


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Review #2, by nott theodore Introduction

19th March 2015:
Hello there! I'm here reviewing for the HPFF Fundraiser!

This is a really unusual and original idea! I've never seen a story like this before when I've been reading fanfiction and it was really interesting to read. I wonder how you're going to continue with the rest of the story when you switch narrators to Hermione. It's certainly going to be a challenge and really intriguing at the same time to write from the perspective of someone with memory loss.

I was kind of surprised at Lavender having decided to erase Hermione's memory. In my head canon she's a very complicated character and I did like the fact that she had a lot more ambition and intelligence here than people seem to give her credit for - she could almost be in Slytherin with her behaviour like that. I was glad that Parvati didn't agree with what she'd done or her motives.

It's a bit worrying that Ron and Harry didn't take Parvati's information seriously. I think things are going to be difficult because of that and I'm interested to see what Lavender's plan is to try and get Ron back. It could be really interesting and entertaining!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Thanks for your review!

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