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Reading Reviews for My Best Friends Wedding
  
7 Reviews Found

Review #1, by jamessiriuspotterforever Analysis of Parties

3rd November 2015:
Everything is so rushed! I feel like the wedding is almost here. I hope Lily proves everyone wrong :')

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Review #2, by jamessiriuspotterforever The History of Sexist Bosses

3rd November 2015:
Her avoiding Albus is soo cute haha.
Again, a nice chapter. Plus, the engagement party felt a little rushed. As in, Lily got here the previous day. I wanted to ask if it was meant to be that way. Just curious :)

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Review #3, by jamessiriuspotterforever Bad Decisions 101

3rd November 2015:
I like your story. Usually, I read about James's next generation stories. This is my first Albus one and i have to say its quite good.Danya's a Muslim right? I am gonna review on every chapter after I read all of them. I am procrastinating so much these days, I swear :O
Also, plis check out my story. :)

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Review #4, by kristyhes Analysis of Parties

17th March 2015:
Hi! Still me for the HPFF Fundraiser review challenge and to review your lovely story ;)

Now onto serious things. Well, to go back to what I said about Danya regretting what she did with Albus, I'm not so sure now. The way you wrote there "interaction" if we can name whatever happened in the kitchen, I feel like maybe they like each but don't know how to go with it...?

I just knew that Lily was lying about her parents being all happy about her engagement. I mean who would be happy that there child was marrying someone they met just a feww months ago?? Also, it's not often that I've read Rose portrayed like this and I think it brings some attitude to the character and I really liked that.

No major typos in there so its really great!! So another lovely chapter :)

Toodles,
Cee xx

Author's Response: thanks, and I feel like rose is portrayed the same in every fanfic, so a little difference is always good. :)

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Review #5, by kristyhes The History of Sexist Bosses

17th March 2015:
Hello me again! For the HPFF Fundraiser review challenge. (You should sign up it's for a good cause ;) )

Well, second chapter gives you a bit more insight on how you wrote Lily which I really like. It's funny cause I've always pictured her to end up becoming an artist. Something I just noticed is that you didn't wrote this story as centered on your OC. This is really refreshing.

Also I meant to ask, how old is Danya? Cause her cousin is 19 and she said that she was an adult. Anyways, once again Danya is an interesting character and the way she talks about what happened with Albus makes you feel like she regrets it maybe?

Oh and maybe I little suggestion? On the 5th paragraph where you wrote "...in her tiny flat, that night finishing up her..." Maybe if you moved the coma after the word ”night" it might give more flow to the sentence. If you get what I mean. It's just a suggestion :)

That's it and btw, I think I'll be reviewing each chapter so get ready to read more reviews from me ;)

Toodles,
Cee xx

Author's Response: Danya is 22, which isn't really old, but she likes to think so. also thank you for the grammar correction, will work on that!
:)


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Review #6, by kristyhes Bad Decisions 101

17th March 2015:
Hello hello! HPFF Fundraiser reviewer here!

So first off welcome to the archives cause I guess it's your first story here. Now onto the story. I really like next gen stories and it's thanks to the search engine that I found your story.

I haven't seen many Lily stories like yours around so congrats for the original plot. Your intro of your OC is a good one and even from reading the first chapter, I like Danya. As for Noora, she kinds of reminds me of my sister. Anyways, I really like your characters.

There are however some things that you could change or edit that would make the flow of your story better. There are a few typos here and there and I also noticed some grammar mistakes (nothing really bad). Also, the big paragraph if you could maybe cut it in half, it will be less bulky for the reader to read.

If you ever need anything, just PM me on the forums (gryffiefan) I'll be glad to help :)

Toodles,
Cee xx

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! Yes this is my first story in this archive. Also I will try to work on the grammer and typos.
thank you for the thorough review!


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Review #7, by Roisin Bad Decisions 101

17th March 2015:
Hello! Here for the HPFF fundraiser review challenge.

The voice in this piece is really on point, and the dialog is really believable. Like, I can really see your characters. I also enjoyed that Danya has her flaws, because in reality, it's pretty realistic.

You do sort of an omniscient narrator thing (all the "you sees"), and I think becuase the character's voice is so strong, it would work better as 3rd Person Deep POV. (3rd Person Deep is when it's still "she" not "I," but the character's voice comes through.)

The reason I suggest this is because the real strength of the piece is the objectivity afforded to the reader. A lot is funny, and again, Danya's flighty behavior is a source of interest. In the beginning and during the action of the piece, you leave it up to the audience to interpret, and that works really well.

Also, I just generally am down when stories show the irresponsible behavior of young people. It's a THING.

xoxo
Roisin

Author's Response: Omg, thank you for such a detailed review. The third person is something to think about. And also yeah young people can make very bad choices. Glad to see you like my story
xx


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