Our website is made possible by displaying online advertisements to our visitors.
Please consider supporting us by disabling your ad blocker.






Reading Reviews for Love Conquers All
  
3 Reviews Found

Review #1, by HermyLuna2 a Goodbye and a Suprise

6th July 2015:
Wow, this was sooo sweet. Just adorable. The end was really badass. Ten.

 Report Review

Review #2, by Voldy Needs a Hug a Goodbye and a Suprise

17th February 2015:
Hi there! It's Voldy Needs a Hug from the forums with your requested review.

This was a cute start overall to your story, and I'm curious to see where it will lead. There are quite a few Dramione fanfics out there, but this one looks like it'll be going in its own original direction, so make sure you have an idea of where it's going.

There wasn't a great deal of plot in this chapter, so I can't easily comment on plot events or flow/transitions. It does leave readers wondering what'll happen in the next chapter, though!

One thing that I noticed while I was reading was your verb tenses switching between past and present tense. It's a good idea to try to keep it consistent, except when writing about a flashback. Most writers tend to write in past tense, and I think that would make sense in this case for your story.

I also noticed that there were quite a few spelling/grammar mistakes. I would suggest searching for a beta reader on the forums - he/she will be able to catch these mistakes for you and provide suggestions along the way. Additionally, immediately after a direct quotation, you should use a comma and a lower case letter to start the next word. For example, the first line should read like this: I wish you were coming with me Ron, said Hermione.

This story definitely looks like it has potential, so keep updating!

Author's Response: hi voldy!! (i think i will call u that its easier lol) thank u for reviewing! i have lots of ideas i no their are lots of dramiones around but this will be different i promise. the main plot in this chapter is for next chapter your right. i didnt no i had those problems my teacher said i am good at english but i dont no how to get a beta can u tell me please? also i didn't no that was how speech was meant to be written is that a rule for every country because i am in UK and i think it is different to america if that is were u are. but if it is i will try to remember next time i write something. thank u very much for youre review it was realy nice!!

 Report Review

Review #3, by HeyMrsPotter a Goodbye and a Suprise

8th February 2015:
Hello, leahandro, I'm here with your requested review. I guess since you've read my stories you know I'm a huge Dramione fan :p

I think you've got an interesting first chapter to your story here. I like all of the little descriptive details you've included, like Ron's hair sticking up because he'd been in a hurry, and the owl hooting angrily when Hermione screamed. I think you've got Hermione and Ron's personalities on point, particularly in the speech, and Hermione being so early.

I've seen a few posts from you on the forums about trying to get more reviews. I think a couple of things that would help would be looking up The Dark Arts forum and requesting a banner for your story, I know they say never judge a book by its cover but people are definitely drawn more to stories with banners. Another thing I'd suggest is getting yourself a Beta reader on the HPFF forums. There are a fair few grammatical errors in your writing, mostly with your punctuation. Having a beta reader look over your chapters before your posting can really help, sometimes a reader will be put off a story if there are grammatical errors and therfore less likely to review. Draco/Hermione Head Boy/Head Girl stories have always been popular in fanfiction (I wrote one in my early fanfic writing days) so make sure you have your story planned out and something to set it aside from the others.

I hope this review doesn't sound too critical, I think you have some really great aspects to your writing and with a little polishing your story could be popular :)

Dee :)

Author's Response: Heyy! Omg I dont realy know how u should reply to these reviews but thank u so much! i love ur stories so its amazing to get ar eview from you 2!

Ron is annoying lol but i like writing Hermione. i kind of want to just get to her and Draco being together but i no i cant just do that lol.

i see storys like urs with lots of reviews and i was just wondering how to get them? i no my story isnt as good as ur writing but i want to know what people think anyway. i didnt know there are grammar errors?? :( i was just so exited to post the story i hope it isnt too bad. i dont know how to get those banners tho.

thank u for ur review Dee your awesome!


 Report Review
If this is your story and you wish to respond to reviews, please login