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Review #1, by Dojh167 Bad Dreams

28th June 2015:
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I donít know what it is, but I just love Dominque stories! People always put very different interesting twists on her, and she is never dull! And she is more often than not queer, which I also enjoy.

I also havenít seen the name Nicky used for her. I like it, though I think itís a shame that it kind of erases her French background.

You have a very eloquent writing style, although I think sometimes you can verge on being too wordy. Try only using the words you absolutely need, and it will give your writing a lot more powerful drive. Especially in dialogue. When characters speak with two long of sentences and include lots of expositional details, like in Maxxieís first speech, it makes the dialogue feel less natural.

I found the lines about Maxxie seeming boring were very cute and helped establish the dynamic between the couple.

This was a great start! I havenít read a multi-chaptered fanfiction psychological thriller before (so many adjectives!) but youíve definitely got a good start here and have set the tone really well.


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Review #2, by alicia and anne Bad Dreams

14th February 2015:
Okay, this is a heartbreaking beginning :( (How weird is it to see a female Nicky? :O)

Oooo it was a dream! Thank god! Or at least I hope it is. Although it's not a nice dream at all :(

Who is this Maxxie? She's not Kieron ... or Nik. :P

YAY!!! KIERON!! *hugs him tightly* Now Nicky and Kieron should have an affair! :D NO!No, I need to calm down, this is a different Nicky.

:O SCANDALOUS! - Sorry, sorry. I got too excited about that word that only me, you and Isobel understand the true meaning of.

I want to know what happens!! Who is she dreaming about? I hope it's not Kieron. Please, don't be Kieron!

Another great chapter from you my wonderful and amazing twin! LOVE IT!!

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