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Reading Reviews for My Oh My Hermione
  
7 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Dramoine_3 Conversing

25th December 2014:
Aaaah my heart! Write more!

Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to write a review, especially on Christmas day!
~ Bronte


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Review #2, by The Most Secret of Secret Santa's Conversing

22nd December 2014:
Hello Bronte! Santa here with the second part of the first round of gifts for Secret Santa!!

I'm really curious as to why Hermione is Mungo's! I hope it's nothing too too bad!! Are we going to find out in this chapter? Is it something sad? Can I just mention how fitting it is that this chapter is near Christmas :) What are the chances? It's so adorable that Draco visits her and sings to her and what not. I think it's definitely the cute innocent thing that children do when they become friends in general, and it's nice to see it extend to their friendship as long distance as it is!

WHAT YOU GAVE HER CANCER? That's so sad. Oh my goodness. Wow, I wonder how that's going to be an obstacle that's overcome. I hope that Draco stays her friend and doesn't distance himself because of it. Ooh is he going to end up helping? I think when he called her perfect is was absolutely adorable in every way!

Ho Ho Ho!!

-Santa ♥

Author's Response: Hello Santa!
I'm so glad you liked it! You are a fabulous reviewer, so thank you very much.
I'm very sorry! Argh! It had to be done I'm afraid D:
~Bronte


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Review #3, by The Most Secret of Secret Santas Meeting

22nd December 2014:
Hello Bronte! Santa here with your first part of the first round of gifts for Secret Santa!! :)

I really like the way you start the story off with the description and the innocence of young Hermione. It's really sweet and cute and I genuinely love that you're giving us such a pure start to their relationship. It's cute to see them reading together and laughing, and also sad that the fathers were commenting that they don't often do that.

It's interesting reading more out of character versions of the HPverse because there's a lot you can do with characterization and storybuilding that canon limits you to. Go you for breaking down those walls!

That was a very cute chapter and I think you did a great job with introducing us to the characters and setting up the story! I'm interesting in finding out what's next!

Ho Ho Ho!!

-Santa ♥

Author's Response: Hello Santa! :)
Thank you very much, whoever you may be. I have posted my suspicions on the forums, but obviously I may be wrong.
I'm over the moon that you enjoyed this chapter Santa. As it is my first story on the site, surrounded by so many amazing stories, I was a little worried about whether anybody would like it.
Thank you again, my lovely Santa.
~ Bronte


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Review #4, by Unicorn_Charm Meeting

22nd December 2014:
Hi there!! :)

Oh this was just the cutest little thing ever!! Poor Draco with his broken arm. He seemed to take it like a champ though. I wonder what was wrong with Hermione that had her in the hospital too. Hopefully it's nothing too serious.

I can't even tell you how much I loved their greeting! The "Hello, boy," and "Hello, girl," had me grinning ear to ear. It was just adorable! I loved how Hermione was hoping that Draco was someone who read. Her crossing her fingers hopefully was adorable. And I almost melted while picturing them sitting in the bed together, taking turns reading the book.

It was a little hard to read a decent Lucius, but refreshing all the same. I'm sure as the story goes on, it'll be easier to accept him this way.

The ending of this chapter, once again, was way too adorable. It was just so sweet seeing these two eight year olds, who are only children, bond so quickly and want to keep in touch. I loved her giving him her hair tie and making the comment about the thimble. :)

I'm usually not one for Dramiones, but this was just way too cute. I definitely want to continue on and see how this story develops. Excellent first chapter!! I really enjoyed reading this! ♥

xoxo Meg

Author's Response: Aah Meg!
Thank you so much for that lovely review! I logged in and just sat reading this for about ten minutes. You were very kind, and thank you so very much for being so lovely.
~ Bronte


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Review #5, by TidalDragon Meeting

14th December 2014:
Howdy! Dropping by both because I haven't read anything of yours and to further our cause in the CR game!

I will start by saying that I think the concept you've described where muggleborn families find out immediately that their child is a witch or wizard is unique as far as I've read before, but I think it's interesting. It makes me wonder what the reasons are behind NOT telling parents right away. My initial instinct was a concern that they would exile or worse the child if they didn't like their magical ability, but I find it difficult to believe that would change at 11 if they're that type of people so who knows.

At any rate, that certainly gives you a bit more license with the build-up of Draco/Hermione. I'm not sure how I feel personally about the Malfoys being so open still, but it's an AU so when I review AU I pretty much give authors unlimited license.

I enjoyed the very beginning of the chapter most probably because I thought you did a good job capturing the innocence of children and their trusting natures. I also liked that you made the two meet by chance and didn't force it to be anything particularly grandiose or contrived.

The only things I noticed to maybe be careful of going forward are: (1) the balance of dialogue vs. inner thought and description (I usually find more is better, but focusing this chapter solely on the meeting I can understand the skew a bit more), (2) missing punctuation (like the missing apostrophe in "I'm" above), and (3) word repetition. The last one didn't happen often, but it did jump out off the bat in this sentence: "The little girl felt her chest feel cozy with the thought of a friend." Felt and feel are different forms of the same word so it might read more naturally and feel more engrossing to a reader if you vary it up a bit.

Anyway, I'm glad you've joined us here at HPFF and look forward to getting to know you better in the CR and reading more of your work!

Author's Response: Hi Kevin!
I thank you for such an impressive review, and I will certainly take on board your comments. I was thinking about asking in the forums for a beta reader, and you have confirmed my obvious need for one ;) Despite the downfalls, I'm glad that you liked it.
I look forward to getting to know all of you too, thank you for being so welcoming!
~ Bronte


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Review #6, by Me Meeting

12th December 2014:
Write more please. There should defiantly be some romance! From the looks of things you're very talented and I would enjoy readin more of your books!

Author's Response: Thank you very much for your review! :) The next chapter is in the queue as I write this. There will be some romance, don't worry. I'm just waiting until they are a little older first!
Thank you again,
~ Bronte


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Review #7, by alicia and anne Meeting

11th December 2014:
This is a cute beginning, I love the idea of a young Draco and Hermione meeting and bonding over books. I can't wait to see how their friendships develop, or if they still talk to each other when they're older. I really loved how you incorporated Peter Pan into this story, I do love that book.

Can't wait for more :D

Author's Response: Hello!
Thank you very much for letting me know what you thought. I love Peter Pan too, it was my favourite book as a child.
Thank you for such a lovely review! (And for being my first reviewer!)
~ Bronte


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