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6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Your Grinch 1

27th December 2014:
Lo,

I think you think you know me better than you actually do. ;) And I've given you quite a bit of clues, too. Did you catch them? How about this, I'll answer two questions outright (unless that question regards my name).

I am delighted to see that you've been enjoying all my presents. It makes giving them all more exciting! To answer your question, I would be more than happy to beta your one-shot. If you are willing to do it by email, I can arrange something. To clarify, the gift-giving will extend beyond the Secret Santa event should you guess my identity correctly.

Onto more important matters: this story. This incredible story. You prodigious writer, you. Let's take it one section at a time, shall we? You really have no say in this matter. :P

The first thing you do is set the scene. And what a wonderful scene. The image you paint in my mind with your words only gets clearer with each sentence. Again, I must admire the imagery. All my senses, Lo, you've captured them all. I sense such a romantic scene that I am compelled to actually sigh dreamily. Ahem. But I'd never admit doing anything so sentimental, of course. I'm, ahem, a Grinch. Ahem.

With the first section, you have captured my attention, with the second, my curiosity. You've essentially caged me, metaphorically speaking. I am thinking that doing something as menial as reading in bed is made outrageous given the horrific setting--as with the creaking floorboards, I suspect that they're in the same house--but I'm your Grinchy and I really wouldn't know about these kinds of things.

The third section has me on the edge of my seat. Okay, maybe that's necessary because the reindeers I rescued from Santa ate the middle, cushiony bits, but neverthless. WHAT IN THE WORLD HAPPENED IN THIS HOUSE?!

SANTA'S PANTS, THIS STORY!!! Are they friends? Are they enemies? Who is this woman? ARE YOU SERIOUS? I am getting a sense now that the italicised bits are the crime and the non-italicised bits are the investigation of the crime. This slow revelation has me admiring your cleverness. How clever of you to manipulate my line of thinking this way! Lo, I am very impressed. Now, I realise the significance of the title (excuse the slowness, I have mad sleeping habits).

Your characterisation of this woman, her strength, how you mentioned that she usually deals with such issues with power and force, and the way a tear falls from her eye when she sees this monster--THIS IS BEAUTIFUL WORK!! By describing her reaction to this monster and characterising her the way you have, you've said so much about this monster.

At this point I lost any pretense of patience I had in reading each section then giving you my thoughts on them as I proceeded to just read until the end. The reason being, YOUR WRITING!! Your captivating writing. I couldn't look away. I couldn't stop reading. THE THINGS YOUR WORDS DO TO ME, LO!

The entire piece is beautiful. I adore it. It's like a dream come true--and I don't get very many of those as the sadly misunderstood Grinch that I am.

Your little Grinchy

A post script, if you don't mind. An answer to the question you posed in the guessing thread: I identify with the two in equal amounts.

Author's Response: Hi Grinch!

Thank you so much for this wonderful review!

Lo ♥


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Review #2, by monstrosity 1

15th December 2014:
Hello Lo!

To portray such horror so eloquently can be a rather hard task, and most people lack the subtlety needed to pull that off. You, however, have done such an awesome job! There were several moments when goosebumps ran up and down my arms at the way the scene almost unfolds before the eyes of the reader, as though are a part of the plot as well. The words connect the readers to the sentences as opposed to making the readers just stand there and watch. They become the eyes on the walls that absorb what happens. Does that sound creepy? Perhaps that just adds to the Halloween theme of the tale.

The story flows wonderfully, a truly remarkable feat for one that's a patchwork of several moments of two separate occurrences. No one ever talks throughout the story and the sheer absence of sound adds to the horror style. You seem to be an expert on the stuff, Lo :)

Anyway, thanks for the lovely read!
Sathya

Author's Response: Hiya Sathya!

Thanks so much for this amazing review! I'm so glad I was able to properly write out a horror! Thanks for such beautiful words, everything really means a lot!

Lo :)


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Review #3, by Red_headed_juliet 1

15th December 2014:
Hello! Here for the swap!

I enjoyed how you first grabbed our attention with the mystery aspect of it. Foreknowledge is sometimes just as scary as anticipation, and you used that to your advantage. I don't think I've ever thought about Harry going through a crime scene like this before. Great idea!

I also think that switching back and forth between tenses helped to separate the two pov's, and you did it very smoothly! Everything felt like it was in the right place.

The descriptions in this were wonderfully vibrant, I felt like I could really see all the destruction. It's nice to be that included in the story, and exceptional that you managed to pull it off with such a small word limit.

All in all a great read! Thank you so much for the swap!

Author's Response: Hiya!

Thanks so much for this amazing review! I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for the swap!

Lo :)


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Review #4, by TidalDragon 1

14th November 2014:
Howdy Lo!

Usually I'm not a huge fan of short, blocked snippets, but I thought you did a really good job with them here! I think the fact that you made them SO short and switched times and POVs really helped keep me as a reader engaged and on the edge wondering what was going to happen next.

When you transitioned to the werewolf reveal, what became the biggest strengths of the story were the description in Harry's POV and the pace and impact language in Piper's POV. The former really drove home the imagery of what took place that Piper didn't have time to capture in her latter because she was faced with sheer fear and panic so when you fused them together it made for a holistic, compelling, and carnage-filled story - great for Halloween!

Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response: Hiya Kevin!

Ooh, I'm glad I was able to sway your original thinking of short blocked snippets! And yay! Praise on description! That means a lot since I find it's one of my weakest areas! I'm so glad you liked this! I think it's one of my favourites so far so coming from you that really means a lot!

Thanks so much for the amazing review Kevin!
Lo :)


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Review #5, by Roisin 1

13th November 2014:
Hello!

I really liked the way you flashed between these two points of view, it definitely worked to create a lot of tension in a short space! I also commend your level of detail on the chaos and gore. I feel like that can always be difficult, because it's just necessarily so icky to write. But you never were just like "AH, bloody mess! You know!" You wrote it in a way where I could really see it, and felt like I was there - and since it's a scary story, that was definitely the right move!

Overall, really good job, and good luck with the challenge :) (I am so regretting reading these stories before going to sleep!)

Author's Response: Hiya again Roisin!

Thanks so much for this amazing review! You write them fast don't you? I'm so glad you liked it and slightly glad you're scared! :P

Lo :)


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Review #6, by MargaretLane 1

28th October 2014:
Well, I had to read this, with Halloween coming up and all.

The first part has me intrigued as to what has just happened. If it shocks Harry, after everything HE'S lived through, it must be quite extreme.

I wasn't expecting a werewolf attack. Not sure what I WAS expecting, but that came as a surprise to me.

Oh, one thing, I assume this story takes place in England, since Harry is investigating? So why is the character talking about a Thanksgiving turkey? Is she American?

I think the amount left to our imaginations in this story is quite effective. What you do describe is terrifying and you portray the scene that greets Harry really well.

Author's Response: Hi!

I'm so glad you like it, and oops! I will change the thanksgiving part right now! Thank you for pointing that out!

The werewolf thing came as a surprise to me as well but I think it works.

Thanks for stopping by, your review was very appreciated.
Lo :)


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