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Reading Reviews for seventeen, eighteen.
6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by 800 words of heaven countdown.

13th December 2014:

I've read Nadia's story waterfall. so I was super excited to read this. And you wrote it for her! So sweet!

This story is great. I just love how repetitive it is. I think it really shows Molly's headspace well. This is her reality and she can't break free. The structure of the story is really quite restrictive as well, and I think that just underscores that point.

I seriously love the use of the rhymes! I think that was my favourite part of this, actually. Totally adored that!

You're very brave to write about such a sensitive topic as this. I feel as if you've captured one viewpoint of suicide very well, and despite this not being your viewpoint, you still have the skill as a writer to show it. That's really great, not only being able to empathise with your character, but also getting the reader to do so as well.

Lovely story, Lo :)

Author's Response: Hiya! Oh no... I hope this lives up to Nadia's story's expectations...

I'm glad you like it! And you could get inside Molly's head? That's great in only the best way possible! And the rhymes were the worst - I can't rhyme! :S But that's why I'm so happy you liked them!

I don't see myself so much as brave as willing to not let something that people view as taboo not stop me, but I'm glad you think I am. Despite my being a Gryffindor I'm actually such a 'fraidy-cat! :P

Thank you so much for the wonderful review!
Lo :)

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Review #2, by Coinin the Werewolf countdown.

26th October 2014:
I can feel the pull of the moon, my bones juddering beneath my skin. It won't be long now. No, not long at all.

Before I transform.

The pain is mounting, so I shall be brief. Your story was excellent. I was so engrossed in it that I temporarily forgot that the fool moon is tonight. That is how powerful your writing is. You have done magnificently, especially on such a controversial subject. The rhythm created is simply superb, and Molly's OCD really brings this out. She cannot control it - instead, it controls her. I know how she must feel, to have no control of your own body, even if I would not take such drastic actions.

The repetition really worked, especially the way you changed the last paragraph just slightly. Like a forewarning of what was to come. Excellent story.

I apologise my dear, for leaving you now. But you would not want me near you tonight. Not this close to Halloween.


Author's Response: Hello Coinin!

Thank you so much for this absolutely chilling review! It was amazing and it really means a lot!

Lo :)

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Review #3, by sleepingdragons countdown.

18th October 2014:
Here for the review swap!

Oh my gosh... In so little words, you've made me feel quite sad and emotional. This was so sad to read, sort of painful to read what was happening to Molly :(
And the ending well, I was not expecting that.
Overall, I think you really dealt well with this topic (I'm assuming Molly had OCD), it's really well written.

Author's Response: Hi!

Well, I'm glad I made you feel something, although I kind of feel bad for making you feel sad :S No matter! I made you feel something so I guess I achieved my goal.

Thank you so much for this wonderful review!
Lo :)

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Review #4, by 1917farmgirl countdown.

18th October 2014:

I was not expecting this. I must admit, had I known what it was about, I might not have read it. This is a tender and emotional topic that unfortunately does carry with it some very real and very sad memories.

That said, I started, and finished, and I don't like to leave something I've read without a review.

I can say with utmost confidence that you have a gift for writing and the use of language to set a scene and a particular mood. The way you wrote Molly and showed what she struggled with, on the surface it appeared slightly odd and maybe even funny, but the whole time there was this undercurrent of pain and despair and loss of control. Very poignant! And particularly well done. It would have been very easy to lose the story in the repetition and you didn't do that.

My heart did break for Molly here. You write with strong emotion.

Very good writing, especially about such a hard topic. And I really hope you can see that this review is very much meant as a compliment and aren't upset by it.

- Farmgirl

Author's Response: Hi Farmgirl.

I hope that if you ever need to you can PM me as it's a sensitive topic for me as well. Thank you so much for this stunningly beautiful review. It means so much to get that kind of praise from someone on the same side of the looking-glass as I'll put it.


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Review #5, by Roisin countdown.

17th October 2014:
Hello, here for the swap!

Man, I hardly know where to begin with this story, the ending was so intense. But throughout, it was fantastic. The way you used her OCD to create this rhythmic language was really inspired. I brought a kind of tension to the story that I thought was incredibly effective.

It also really helped the reader understand and empathize with her frustrations. It's also really impressive how you managed repetition without seeming repetitive (in a bad way). Using that device, you still found a lot of ways to describe it, and the use of the word "seventeen" always came in the most aesthetic place.

As for the last (jarring) sequence, I loved the inclusion of 'and kept it that way.' I knew what she was going to do, and even before I read your A/N, it sort of evoked that idea of a "permanent solution." It was also really decisive - the first time we see her being decisive. In the previous sections, she seems more like she's being controlled by these compulsions. There, she seems to have more agency.

And then as for the content, yes, glamorizing suicide or self harm is terrible - but I don't think this glamorized it. It is an unfortunate reality, and therefore, shouldn't be categorically excluded from fiction. Tact is, I think, the most important. Tact and empathy, and you really managed both. And this was definitely an intense story, giving the issue the gravity it deserves.

Anyway, I'm really glad I saw your status and read this story! I feel weird gushing about something so dark, but it really is quite excellent!


Author's Response: Hi Roisin!

Thank you so much for this amazing review! You have no idea how much this means to me, especially with this kind of story and my background with it! It means so much for that kind of praise.


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Review #6, by GingeredTea countdown.

17th October 2014:
I'm here for the review swap. :)

Alright this is intriguing. My first thought is OCD - let's see if I am right. ...

Oh my. I really thought something would interrupt these numbers, but I did not see that coming! I'm sitting here, still trying to process what just happened - I was almost ready to laugh a moment ago!

You did a marvelous job with this, especially the sentence structure and the story's flow. I really admire the stagnant and obsessiveness you conveyed just with the repetition of your words/sentences. It was brilliant in a very sad way. You managed to convey her difficulties quickly and while this story was short you also managed to surprise me!

Great job and just WOW...

Thanks for the review swap!

Author's Response: Hiya! Thank you so much for this review swap! :)

Well, that is an amazing guess! Thank you so much for the amazing praise, it really does mean a lot. I suppose the intent of this was to show how funny the disorder could be to everyone else but her, so I'm kind of glad it took you off guard.

Thank you so much for this wonderful review, it means so much!
Lo :)

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