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Reading Reviews for Trouble Never Comes Alone
  
5 Reviews Found

Review #1, by brandy Preparations

13th February 2015:
hi I approve this story lol im weird

Author's Response: Thanks! Weirdness is particularly acceptable when reading anything I have written.

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Review #2, by TumTum Preparations

10th December 2014:
Haha this was great fun, I'm looking forward to reading about the party.

Author's Response: Thank you! I just got back from abroad, so I'm working on the next chapter now!

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Review #3, by peachsnapple Lunch

8th December 2014:
This is a very interesting premise spearheaded by an intriguing OC. I'm eager to see how this unfolds

Author's Response: I'm eager to see how it unfolds, too. Thank you!!

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Review #4, by TumTum Shopping

5th November 2014:
These two chapters have been really fun - I like the interaction with Rose and the feeling of impending doom haha.

Author's Response: Thank you! I also wanted to let you know that I updated some things after your last review in past chapters. They were small edits, but it helped a lot.

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Review #5, by TumTum Admissions

26th October 2014:
This is really good so far. I'm surprised your story hasn't got more attention. I like that it's about elements of magic that could do with more exploring imo such as divination, and that you're using folk tales to explore these ideas.

I really love that your characters are doing a wide variety of work within the wizarding world that involves fascinating magic. There are so many fics about witches being either journalists or quidditch players and I always wonder why not an Unspeakable, someone working with magical creatures, or working in the Department of Magical Accidents and Injuries... these jibs are ones I can imagine getting really excited about.

I like Tamara and her reserved, precise, will-of-iron attitude especially when compared to Scorpius the chatterbox who seems more gregarious and in search of adventure. It would be nice to see more of their interaction in various settings; as it is their relationship and who Scorpius is remains mostly a mystery. Why did Scorpius want to be an Unspeakable? Is he good at it in Tamara's opinion?

I guess I want to say... don't skip over their interaction too much. It's the same with Albus - why does she think wandmaking is better? Is it that she admires craftsmanship more than she does peacekeeping? Because both require keen observation skills although one has far more creativity than the other. Is that what she values?

Also what does Tamara think about the rest of the department of mysteries - describe it and the people who work there. How do they restore the prophesies and how do they capture them? I'm interested in that side of things - the how, the what, the why. Tamara seems to be meticulous, hard working and disciplined and therefore a good person to explain this stuff. I'm really curious about her jib and would like to know mire.

One final point: is Tamara really not able to work out what 'bloody hell' means or is she just messing with Scorpius? Because expletives are usually self explanatory... I do see what you're doing and it's funny in its own way but not easy to believe. I find when I'm learning a language that expletives are some of the easiest things to pick up.

Author's Response: I can honestly say that this is the most detailed, awesome review I have ever received. I've been struggling with writer's block for the next chapter, so this is incredibly helpful. Thank you so much! I will be sure to try to answer all of these questions within the story.
As for the last question, I can see your point. It came from me always thinking it made no sense until I learned that bloody is actually a shortened version of Blessed Mother Mary. I'm a bit of a language nerd. I felt that as a small village Russian girl, she would have never heard that phrase and it threw her off. I'll find a way to either make that make more sense or cut it.


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