6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Pheonix Potioneer Prologue

26th January 2015:
Hello! Hufflepuff Hot Seat Review.

Well... this is a bit ominous. Of course, I kind of know what happens. Salazar and Godric duel and then Salazar leaves. I don't know the circumstances though, so I'll be eager to know that! Since there's so few people who write about the founders, I basically just accept whatever you write about them as canon.

Yup, of course Rowena would be skeptical. She is a Ravenclaw- THE Ravenclaw, so I suppose she's as Ravenclaw-ish as possible! Of course a person who values their brains more than anything would be skeptical by a seer.

"A ship gliding over the sea". Interesting. Why would they be on a ship? Hmmm. I must admit, this is intriguing!

Is Salazar already building the Chamber of Secrets? I really don't like how you've described how he looks. I would not like to meet Salazar in this state. And I think he knows exactly what the seer is talking about.

Update soon! This has certainly built up tension.

Author's Response: Hello there! Thank you so much for coming by, and I'm so sorry to respond so late :/ I'm not sure if I'll pick this story back up, but there's always a chance! I'm really happy that you enjoyed this prologue and found it intriguing. Thanks again for the review, I so appreciate it!

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Review #2, by marauderfan Prologue

6th January 2015:
Here for your Review Hot Seat Day! I'm so excited to be starting on the sequel to DCTN. I love the way you write the Founders!

From the beginning this already has a much different tone than DCTN, and I think it will make a huge difference in how events unfold in the future, not seen through Helga's lens.

I could so see Rowena being distrustful of Seers. Because she is all logic and fact, and the Seer is talking about looming shadows and ships at sea and lurking. I can understand Rowena's perspective here but at the same time I just want to tell her to LISTEN TO THE SEER! Because the Four just have no idea what awaits them. Agh!

And I think you nailed Godric's personality as well in those few lines he has, about how it's not noble to insult a guest and is all kindness to her. Of course Helga comes across as so hospitable and good-hearted, and Salazar says nothing throughout the entire exchange, as expected. With Salazar though, I think he's the only one who really has an idea of what the Seer's warning means. That stare said a lot, even if not out loud. You've firmly re-established your characters in this first chapter and I'm really looking forward to reading more about them.

This is a great beginning to what is sure to be a fantastic story! I only have one critique and that is that I want more of this story! *sends motivation/cupcakes/coffee/whatever works to inspire you* ;)

Keep up the awesome work, Maggie!

Author's Response: Hi Kristin, and thank you for the awesomeness of this review! I'm not sure if I'm going to be able to do anything else with this story anytime soon...the muse for it has curled up and died, unfortunately :/ But I'm not giving up hope yet! Your reviews are always inspiring!!

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Review #3, by HeyMrsPotter Prologue

29th December 2014:
Hi, Maggie! I'm here (VERY late!) for your review hot seat!

It's been so long since I've visited your author page, I'd forgotten how amazing your Founders' stories are. You truly are the Queen of this era! I love how easily and effortlessly you seem to write the four founders, their personalities that are typical of the houses are so obvious and yet you do it so subtly. Like the way you describe Helga as speaking gently, and how Rowena is so skeptical of the Seer's concerns, presumably because there is no logical explanations for what she is telling them. I like how Salazar remains silent throughout the whole thing, I assume that at this point there are already some tensions among the group and he knows that is what the Seer is referring to.

Godric is my favourite in this, I like how kind he is to the Seer, even if he does doubt what she is telling him. I also really like that he is the clear leader of the group, or at least he is in this situation, and that you plant the seed of the seer being right in the fact that he shudders at her words despide his bravery.

Basically, I loved this! Great job, Maggie :D


Author's Response: DEE HI I AM SO SORRY. It is 2015 and I'm just now responding to this! Thank you so much for coming by to review this. I'm feeling a little discouraged about it at the moment, and seeing this does make me feel more inspired to work on it! I'm glad you enjoyed the little glimpses of everyone's personality. And I agree, Godric was definitely my favorite to write for this chapter too :)

Thank you for this, dear! You are a gem!


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Review #4, by Diogenissa Prologue

21st December 2014:
Hallo Maggie! Happy Hufflepuff Hotseat Day (even though a few days late--sorry about that :( ).

Well I have to start by saying this is only my 2nd Founders fic and my first really dealing with Godric and Rowena.

Great opening! Absolutely LOVE 'The Four' theme and the ways in which it goes into just how appropriate it is!

Great characterization of Godric--LOVE how protective he is of strangers, guests and visitors and is willing to stand up to even his companions in order to do so. Overall I enjoyed all four of their personalities and you fleshed each of them out quite thoroughly (including the seer).

Salazar and the seer's interaction, no matter how indirect, speaks volumes and there were chills felt as well as a hard and terrible sense of foreboding, almost as if he knew that she was perhaps talking about him *shudder*.

My two favorite parts is the one with Salazar and the end with Godric shivering--that in of itself comes across to me as something that does not happen very often (if at all).

Overall a wonderful story and strong characterization, description and setting (although admittedly, the more I read of Salazar the more I'm thinking 'I so do NOT want to meet this man!' :-O ). Thank you so much this was great!

Karen xoxo

Author's Response: Hi Karen! Thank you so much for the lovely review! I've been feeling a little stuck on this story lately, and this review inspires me to keep working at it :)

I'm so glad you enjoyed the characters and how they came to life in this prologue. I have written a lot (a LOT) of Founders, so I have gotten well acquainted with all four of them over the years. Godric is one of my favorites because of that very protectiveness you mentioned, and I have big plans for him with this story! I hope you continue to enjoy him (when I finally get around to updating again, that is.)

Salazar is definitely a shady character, that's for sure. I'm glad that came through in his interaction with the seer. He is always a challenge to write, but it's great to hear I'm off to a good start so far.

Thank you so much for your time, Karen! I'm so glad you came to visit my page for the Hot Seat, and I hope to see you here again soon! :)


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Review #5, by teh tarik Prologue

7th September 2014:
Hey Maggie!

I'm here with your requested review! Ah, I can't say how pleased I am to read a Founders, especially one that's written by you! :) You write this era so, so well: the language, the details of setting, the atmosphere, everything.

I love this opening chapter of yours; I know it's short, and that's possibly why you feel a bit insecure about this, as per your post in my review thread, but I can assure you that this was written brilliantly, and that you've created a wonderful atmosphere of tension and mystery and drama. Using the seer was an excellent choice of opening, and it really set this whole foreboding mood to the story. I love the contrasts between the Founders, from Godric's open belief in the seer's words, to Rowena's open scepticism, which seems to be spreading to Helga, and finally, Salazar's unreadability. Somehow, I feel the seer might know more than what she lets on, and she might possibly know something about Salazar, about the rift that grows between him and the other three founders?

I love your prose. It's clean and clear and direct, there's a sparseness that's refreshing, as Founders fic are usually more elaborate in their prose and descriptive detail. But still, at times there are some beautifully poetic moments in this chapter, e.g. when the Seer speaks: A garden snake. A ship gliding over the sea. A young boy weeping. And wand combat, particularly by you, Lord Gryffindor. These are such striking images.

And to answer your question, this definitely draws me in! I'd love to read more. Despite this very brief chapter, you've provided enough detail to make the characters intriguing and fascinating, and I can't wait to see how you develop them over the course of the story!

Lovely beginning, Maggie! Thanks for requesting and I do hope you'll update this soon. :)


Author's Response: Hi teh! This response is not going to be up to snuff, I can tell you that right now, but I just want to say thank you so much for taking the time to review! I was so looking forward to your feedback on this, and your reviews never disappoint. I'm glad you enjoyed, and I hope to have the next chapter up sometime during this lifetime. Thanks again teh, you're a gem!


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Review #6, by Aphoride Prologue

25th August 2014:
Hi Maggie! :D Spotted you in review tag and just had to pop by - so happy to see this up! I adored Down Comes the Night, as you know, so this looks super cool and exciting, even if there's (maybe?) a lack of Helgazar.

So really, chances were I was going to love this, and I do! It's just such a brilliant beginning! I love how you set the fall of the Founders up from the beginning - with what sounds like something of a final battle-type thing, with Godric, and the hints that Salazar is going to betray them. Of course, we know he does, but what else will happen? Is he just going to put a snake in the castle, because it sounds like he's going to do more... and all the little things about Godric should protect his family... Gareth! His wife! :( So foreboding - I love it :P

The characters are back and so wonderfully written, again. I loved how Salazar was so impassive, and Rowena just so uninterested in what the Seer had to say - which seems so in character for her, being so logical and so intelligent. It's not something which is particularly logical... Helga was lovely, as always - and Godric was so sweet, too, if even he seemed a little sceptical at the beginning. But then, I suppose none of them want to think about betrayal, you know? They're supposed to be friends and all...

The seer herself was great, too. I liked how she came from Ireland, there was a council of Seers (which is such a cool idea!) and how she'd come to give them a warning because the school - and they themselves - is important. It's very reminiscent of King Arthur, you know, in the sense that the quest/warning/magical guest comes to them, and so on...

Your writing, as always, is lovely! :) Everything flows so beautifully, and you just manage the more old-fashioned language so, so well!

So yes, I think it's safe to say this is something I'll be following without a doubt, and that you've done it again :)

Favourited! :D

Aph xx

Author's Response: Aph, hi! Thank you so much for checking this out, it means the world to me!

Although there may be a lack of Helgazar in this, I hope you will like the dynamic between them in this story. It's set several years after DCtN, so they have had considerable time to process things. I wanted to keep going with these characters, and I felt that it was time for them to face a real test. The stakes are definitely higher, and you're on the right track with some of your thoughts about what the prophecy means (if you can really even call it a prophecy. Haha, it's a little too cryptic to be truly informative.)

Yay, I'm so glad you like the characters so far! Even with this first little glimpse of them I tried to show the personalities I'd established with Down Comes the Night. Rowena was particularly fun to write here, with her snark, and I'm looking forward to giving her center stage at times throughout this story. I'm so happy you found all four of them to be distinct and likable :)

You'll be seeing more of the seer very soon! I wanted to widen the scope of this story to challenge myself a bit. Since DCtN is set almost entirely within the walls of Hogwarts, it was time for some outside influence to come in. I imagined that Hogwarts would be a source of hope for the magical community, a way to reassure people that the future of magic is bright :)

Alsdfdslfka thank you! I love this style and it's a joy to get back into it. I'm so happy that you came by, and I hope to have the next chapter ready to post very soon :)


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