4 Reviews Found

Review #1, by The Summer Snake And If It's Meant to Be, It'll Come Back to You

31st May 2015:
Greetings from The Summer Snake! I have recently slithered out of hibernation and discovered this amazing place with such amazing stories, so I want to read and review as many as I can before I go back into hibernation!

Aww, this was so sweet and so sad, and so well-written. I really liked reading this. You showed an interesting perspective of Lily here - saying how much she loves James and wanting to 'let him go' because she was a 'walking target'. I wonder who sent her that stupid note.

You did a good job showing Lily's conflict with herself. James' characterisation was also nicely done and it was cute how much he loved her. The ending bit made me happy as it ended on a positive note - yet it was also ironic in a way. After all, we all know Lily dies and so does James.

You'd think being a cold blooded little reptile, I would't feel so much but your little story gave me a lot of feels. Good work! I am glad to have slithered by to read this!

*showers confetti and flowers* Have a nice summer!

Now I'll be off to explore more of this wonderful sun! See ya!

With love,
The Summer Snake

Author's Response: Hello there!

I'm so glad to hear that you liked it! I never really thought about Lily in this light before writing this one-shot but I can see her doing something like this (also, spoiler, it was Snape who sent her the note whoops). I was actually thinking about how the two of them ended up dying in the end and I was thinking to myself "wow, are you two in for a surprise later on in your life."

Thank you so much for stopping by and leaving me a review! And enjoy the sun!

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Review #2, by LightLeviosa5443 And If It's Meant to Be, It'll Come Back to You

1st October 2014:

I'm so super late reviewing this for my challenge, I'm so sorry! So, I'm kind of absolutely 100% irrevocably in love with this story. I think that you did an amazing job with it.

The emotions in the story were raw, it flowed effortlessly. I loved the descriptions and vocabulary choice, and I LOVE the way that you incorporated the quote. I really liked the way it all tied in together. I think you did a fantastic job with this piece. I felt Lily's pain and James' desperation. And that ending? Adorable.

Thanks so much for entering such a gem! Results will be up soon!

xoxo Sarah &hearts:

Author's Response: Don't even worry about it Sarah, I completely forgot about this as well! Take your time! I'm so glad to hear that you loved this! I was a little worried about it because I admit, I can see some flaws in this but I'm so glad to hear that you enjoyed it!

I am literally smiling so big right now oh my goodness thank you so much! You just made my night so much better! The ending was one of my favourite parts of this, I felt like I needed something light-hearted to end the one-shot after something so serious!

Thank you for reviewing Sarah!

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Review #3, by kenpo And If It's Meant to Be, It'll Come Back to You

28th September 2014:
Hello! I'm here for the Story Search 1!

I really loved the way that you portrayed Lily and James. This isn't a portrayal that I see too often, and it's so nice to see fresh looks at such a commonly written ship.

It's so sad that they have to have such an adult fight. They're kids! When I read Marauders, I always forget how young they are...

I think that you did a really nice job showing how they're being forced to grow up so quickly, but also that they're still pretty childish, with this being Lily's solution. She probably should've just talked to him about it and addressed her concerns. But she's a kid, so she didn't do that.

I liked how you worked with the quote! I think it fit really nicely!

Another thing that I liked a lot about this story was how you managed to address how much James had changed, and why. I really like the James you wrote here.

Very nice job with this story!!


Author's Response: Sorry for taking so long to respond to this Georgia but I'm finally getting to this.

I feel like this is something that James and Lily probably had an argument about, I mean, Lily is someone that really cared about everyone's well-being and she would want the best for James and this is what she might view as the best thing for him.

It is sad but considering the coming war, they would've had to grow up fast and had some very serious talks. I'm also really happy to hear that you liked James because I know that he probably did some cruel things when he was younger but that he probably came to his senses and saw the error in his ways and changed.

Thanks again for reviewing and sorry for taking so long!

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Review #4, by snufflesthedog And If It's Meant to Be, It'll Come Back to You

19th August 2014:

I'm here for the Blue/Bronze Review Battle.

First of all, I have to say that I thought your story was lovely. I liked the way you portrayed Lily and James in a different light, and had them falling in love and then fighting in a very humane and realistic way. You really bring the reader into the minds of your characters, and this makes the story compelling and great to read.

You said in your A/N that you wrote the story at midnight, which is why there are some typos, so maybe in the future, unless you have a deadline, leave it until the next day and look over it? There were (very) few mistakes, and although they did not take away from the great story, or lessen the quality, it would probably good to quickly read through your work to fix it a bit.

Loved it!

xx snufflesthedog

Author's Response: Hey there snuffles (if you don't mind me calling you that).

I'm glad to hear that you enjoyed it! I wasn't all that happy with the result but it's good to hear that it wasn't totally bad!

I know I shouldn't write at midnight because of the mistakes that I would no doubt make but inspiration just struck at midnight and I had to write everything down and only then could I go to sleep.

Thank you for the review!

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