3 Reviews Found

Review #1, by LightLeviosa5443 And If It's Meant to Be, It'll Come Back to You

1st October 2014:

I'm so super late reviewing this for my challenge, I'm so sorry! So, I'm kind of absolutely 100% irrevocably in love with this story. I think that you did an amazing job with it.

The emotions in the story were raw, it flowed effortlessly. I loved the descriptions and vocabulary choice, and I LOVE the way that you incorporated the quote. I really liked the way it all tied in together. I think you did a fantastic job with this piece. I felt Lily's pain and James' desperation. And that ending? Adorable.

Thanks so much for entering such a gem! Results will be up soon!

xoxo Sarah &hearts:

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Review #2, by kenpo And If It's Meant to Be, It'll Come Back to You

28th September 2014:
Hello! I'm here for the Story Search 1!

I really loved the way that you portrayed Lily and James. This isn't a portrayal that I see too often, and it's so nice to see fresh looks at such a commonly written ship.

It's so sad that they have to have such an adult fight. They're kids! When I read Marauders, I always forget how young they are...

I think that you did a really nice job showing how they're being forced to grow up so quickly, but also that they're still pretty childish, with this being Lily's solution. She probably should've just talked to him about it and addressed her concerns. But she's a kid, so she didn't do that.

I liked how you worked with the quote! I think it fit really nicely!

Another thing that I liked a lot about this story was how you managed to address how much James had changed, and why. I really like the James you wrote here.

Very nice job with this story!!


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Review #3, by snufflesthedog And If It's Meant to Be, It'll Come Back to You

19th August 2014:

I'm here for the Blue/Bronze Review Battle.

First of all, I have to say that I thought your story was lovely. I liked the way you portrayed Lily and James in a different light, and had them falling in love and then fighting in a very humane and realistic way. You really bring the reader into the minds of your characters, and this makes the story compelling and great to read.

You said in your A/N that you wrote the story at midnight, which is why there are some typos, so maybe in the future, unless you have a deadline, leave it until the next day and look over it? There were (very) few mistakes, and although they did not take away from the great story, or lessen the quality, it would probably good to quickly read through your work to fix it a bit.

Loved it!

xx snufflesthedog

Author's Response: Hey there snuffles (if you don't mind me calling you that).

I'm glad to hear that you enjoyed it! I wasn't all that happy with the result but it's good to hear that it wasn't totally bad!

I know I shouldn't write at midnight because of the mistakes that I would no doubt make but inspiration just struck at midnight and I had to write everything down and only then could I go to sleep.

Thank you for the review!

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