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Review #1, by TheGirlOnFire 1

8th July 2014:
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Hello,
This very intriguing, I am very interested in finding out what happens next. I am dying to know what happened to her at the beginning of summer. I want to know what happened that resulted in her becoming psychologically damaged. I do not like her father, he hates magic yet he married a witch. I donít understand the logic. But then again maybe he feels inferior because his wife has magic. Also, I didnít like Gretchen. She seems too sell-involved and selfish. She doesnít care about what happened to her sister only about her budding relationship with Albus. I like how you have already started showing the relationship dynamics between her and her family members. I do hope she ends up being allowed to go to Hogwarts. A little CC, I would have liked to have read a little more description, I small amount could really make the scene seem more real to the reader. I do however understand that this is the first chapter and starting a story is incredibly hard to do. I wish you good luck on the rest of the story and hope that itís as good as this chapter.

TheGirlOnFire :D

Author's Response: Their dad just doesn't understand magic. And he is a bit jealous and feels left out. It really was hard writing the first chapter but thank you and I hope that too :)

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Review #2, by Veritaserum27 1

7th July 2014:
Hello!

I saw this on the recently added stories list and I thought I would give it a go. You have a very interesting first chapter here. You have introduced the main characters and added in some conflict. I feel bad for both Charlotte and Gretchen and I hope that they can see that if they bond together, they will be stronger than two sisters who seem to be at odds most of the time. I feel like you've portrayed their father well. He doesn't hate magic, he just doesn't understand it and he is living wrapped up in a world that is so different than everything he believes. I'm curious as to what happened to Charlotte and I want to know more. Great job with keeping the reader interested! And you've also included the hint of a love story! So... Gretchen likes Albus, huh? Nice start!

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Author's Response: Thank you. Gretchen has a little crush on Albus. And I think he only likes him because Albus is Harry Potter's son. He doesn't really even know him that well.

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Review #3, by Unicorn_Charm 1

7th July 2014:
Hi there!

Well you definitely have me intrigued. I'm now dying to know what happened in the beginning of the summer. You have a pretty decent start here. :) I do not like the father. At all. But I'm sure that was the point. ;) I would imagine though that it would be hard marrying a witch and having magical children. You would always feel just a little bit jealous and inadequate. I'm sure he loves his wife and children. I know you said that English isn't your first language, but it really wasn't that noticeable at all.

I think you have a good beginning here, and I would really like to read on and see what happened, and what happens. :) I remember how scared I was when I posted my first story. I still get nervous with every new chapter! Good luck and I hope to see an update soon!

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xoxo Meg

Author's Response: Thank you so much :) You don't have to wait too long to find out what happened in the beginning of the summer.

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