Reading Reviews for Event Three - Dependable
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Review #1, by Beeezie Two Beginnings

12th July 2014:
Aw, I'm not sure why you don't like this! I think it had a graceful and meaningful simplicity about it.

I loved the way that you briefly summarized their initial meeting and each of their years at Hogwarts. You captured Lavender's silliness and carefree spirit beautifully, especially in their earlier years. I also thought that you did a great job at adding depth to little moments in the series - Parvati developing a crush on Harry when he plays "hero," both agreeing who of the trio they would kiss/marry/kill, skipping the third task, accidentally pulling an all-nighter... this was a really lovely picture of their time of innocence.

But you also did an amazing job at showing the harder times - Lavender's first breakup, the fear instilled by the Carrows, and ultimately the excitement of finally acting on the repressive regime. It really made their friendship come alive to me in short, small bursts, and I loved it.

This was more than okay. Way, way more than okay.

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Author's Response: Oh, thank you! I'm so glad that you liked it, Branwen. ♥

I was actually pretty nervous about using this style of jumping around and using only one snippet from each year to tell their story - I wasn't sure whether it would work so I'm so glad that you think it did!

Oh, you know, I think that before Seventh Year everything must have been really calm and pleasant for the rest of Hogwarts - the worst that would happen to them might be nasty rumours and articles in the Daily Prophet, so I think that the Carrows must have actually been a really terrible wakeup call. I'm so glad that you think I managed to show that contrast well!

Thank you so much for an amazing review, Branwen. ♥

(Also, go Ravenclaw!)

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Review #2, by UnluckyStar57 Two Beginnings

10th July 2014:
Ugh, puberty. I know that feel. :/

I really related to this because the years all seemed to come with their own descriptor. That's the way I catalogue my years in school--I think each one has a different sort of tone. The fact that Lavender and Parvati are so close is awesome, and I love seeing them this way. They're much less annoying than in the books. Also, I never thought that Ron was wrong for ignoring Lavender so much, but now I think that it was kind of an awful thing for him to do.

There were really only three Gryffindor girls in Hermione's year?! I never actually realized that... Well, maybe there were only three that Jo named... I'm not sure. That's very interesting!

This didn't give me sad feels, but that's okay. I've had enough of those! I liked the friendship feels it gave me, though. This was a very good story. :)

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Author's Response: Puberty, man. :P

I'm so glad that you found it realistic! I was a little afraid that making each year so separate, so to speak, would end up making it unrealistic but I'm happy you could relate to it! I love Lavender and Parvati, and their friendship is so lovely. And yeah - I mean, obviously Ron's going through a lot, and Lavender wasn't really the girl he wanted to be with at the time, but I still feel that it was kind of terrible f him to treat her so badly, especially since I do think she cared for him in her own way - maybe not a way he could understand, but still.

Yeah, I looked up the Lexicon and HP wiki and both said that there were no other Gryffindor girls named, and I thought that it was more likely there were only the three of them because Hermione probably would have mentioned something about a fourth girl. But anyway, I digress.

Yay for not giving you sad feels, as I know that a lot of my more recent stuff does, sorry. D: I'm super glad this gave you friendship feels - thank you so much!

(Go Ravenclaw!)

Thank you for a lovely review, Mallory!


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Review #3, by evil little devil Two Beginnings

9th July 2014:
This was such a sweet story! And such a sweet friendship to write about. I absolutely adored the opening scene, how they met - you really nailed Lavender's characterisation, showing her as being a little airheaded, but really brave and loyal and courageous as well.
I absolutely loved the section with the periods! That is so accurate, and hilarious, I completely remember that time where everyone was so desperate to get their period and be a grown-up!
I also loved the study-party section, just the way you ended with that line in brackets, it made me laugh.
I really adored this, it was such a heartwarming story to read, and you constructed a really beautiful friendship here.

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Author's Response: Hello there! :D

I'm so glad you think so, honestly! Parvati and Lavender's friendship is always something I'm interested in writing about, because female friendships aren't glorified enough in literature or pop culture. And I'm so glad that you think I managed to get her characterisation right!

Bahaha, yes, I remember that time as well. Why on earth anyone would ever want their periods is beyond me, honestly. :P I'm so glad you found it both accurate and funny, hah.

I'm so glad that you liked this! Thank you so much for the amazing review, it really did make my day.


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Review #4, by patronus_charm Two Beginnings

7th July 2014:
*casually continues to stalk your author page*

Omg, Emily, seriously, every story I read of yours you keep on wowing me with how much youíve improved as the quality of this is insane and your writing is a little insane and I just love it! ♥

Just everything about this was amazing, but letís start with the whole style of it which was pretty fab if I say so myself! I love the use of third person, it worked so, so, so well here giving both of their perspectives and just seeing how close they are to one another what their friendship meant to one another and it just gave the story another perspective. The use of parenthesis was another thing I loved, because, again, it added another perspective to the story making it much more complex and interesting to read.

I really loved seeing their friendship grow and develop over the years and even though each school year only got a couple of paragraphs at the most, I felt as if I just knew them so well and knew the ins and outs of their friendship too which was really impressive for such a low word count. I liked the way you started and ended with it starts like this, as it showed how their friendship had made a full circle. It was especially poignant with the last section as we knew what as coming, we knew what was going to happen and how they had made it this far together and now it was the start of something else.

I really loved the final line as it had such strong and powerful imagery too that itís still burning through my mind of them going into battle hand in hand, and Iím trying not to cry as I know what happens and itís just too sad. This was amazing! ♥

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Author's Response: *casually continues to LOVE IT* :D

Oh my word, Kiana, you're so lovely, thank you so much! I know I've said this to you before but hearing that I've actually improved coming from someone who knows what they're talking about means so much!

Ughh, thank you! I'm really glad you liked the third person perspective as I did wonder whether to go with first or third but in the end I thought that being able to see both their thoughts was important to the story and I'm so glad that you agree! I gave myself so many Lavender/Parvati friendship feels while I was writing this - friendship feels are the best kind of feels, man. :D Ooh, I'm really happy that you liked the use of brackets as well, thank you so much!

It was really important, I think, to get the interactions and chemistry between the two of them right as they are best friends and they were that way for seven years, which is a pretty long time, and yeah I'm so glad that you found the growth of their relationship realistic! I'm also really happy that the way I divided it up seemed to work as a narrative structure as well as I was a bit scared that it would just make the whole thing really choppy. And yes, I'm glad that you liked that touch as well because they really have come full circle and now my babies are going to fight in a Battle in a war that shouldn't be happening and they're so young and it just makes me so sad. :'(

Oh, I'm so glad you liked the last line! I was terrified that it was falling just flat, you know, but I wanted to get this in the queue by the deadline so I let it be. :P And yes, I'm sorry for following it up with such a depressing sequel!

Thank you so much for the amazing review, Kiana, and go Ravenclaw (you reviewing machine, you)!


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Review #5, by maskedmuggle Two Beginnings

7th July 2014:

Contrary to your A/N, I actually really enjoyed this - it's definitely more than okay, in fact it was pretty fantastic! I loved your portrayal of Parvati and Lavender's friendship! I loved how you gave us a snapshot of their friendship each year and really showed how it developed and became even stronger year by year. I particularly loved the opening scene of how they met. It was just so cute and even a bit amusing. If I was being super nitpicky I'd say I'm a bit uncertain about the fourth year section - I think I would've preferred it to be a bit more lighthearted, rather than it being about something that's perhaps a bit more awkward reading about? (especially even more so for guys?) However, it does clearly show them both growing up, which is, I guess, what you were aiming to do in that section.

I loved how you characterised both of them. I also thought the ending was really great because it showed what the two of them were about to experience together. All in all, I definitely thought this really showed their friendship really well. And oh, I also loved the repetition at the start of every section - I found it very effective. Nicely written!

- Charlotte/maskedmuggle
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Author's Response: Hey there, Charlotte! :)

Oh my, thank you so much! You flatter me, honestly. I do love writing about friendships, though, as I think that they often take a backseat to romantic relationships - and female friendships in particular just aren't glorified enough in popular culture or fanfiction. I'm so glad that you liked this though, that you found their interactions believable and the way their relationship grew to be realistic. Funny story: that actual thing happened to one of my friends, and I thought of it while writing this and thought, I have to add that in somewhere. It's so Lavender. ;) And yeah, I know the fourth year section might make for a little awkward reading, but periods are something that every girl goes through and personally, I don't really feel comfortable with erasing that just so that a group of people who don't know what it's like can feel comfortable, you know? It's a part of life for almost all girls. But yeah, growing up was what I was aiming for, and I'm glad I got that across!

Thank you so much! I was slightly afraid that the narrative style of breaking it down into years would be too stiff or stop it from flowing, but I'm glad you liked that and the same thing being said at the start of the beginning and the start of the end.

Thanks so much for an amazing review, and go Ravenclaw!


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