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Review #1, by Beeezie Two Beginnings

12th July 2014:
Aw, I'm not sure why you don't like this! I think it had a graceful and meaningful simplicity about it.

I loved the way that you briefly summarized their initial meeting and each of their years at Hogwarts. You captured Lavender's silliness and carefree spirit beautifully, especially in their earlier years. I also thought that you did a great job at adding depth to little moments in the series - Parvati developing a crush on Harry when he plays "hero," both agreeing who of the trio they would kiss/marry/kill, skipping the third task, accidentally pulling an all-nighter... this was a really lovely picture of their time of innocence.

But you also did an amazing job at showing the harder times - Lavender's first breakup, the fear instilled by the Carrows, and ultimately the excitement of finally acting on the repressive regime. It really made their friendship come alive to me in short, small bursts, and I loved it.

This was more than okay. Way, way more than okay.

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Review #2, by UnluckyStar57 Two Beginnings

10th July 2014:
Ugh, puberty. I know that feel. :/

I really related to this because the years all seemed to come with their own descriptor. That's the way I catalogue my years in school--I think each one has a different sort of tone. The fact that Lavender and Parvati are so close is awesome, and I love seeing them this way. They're much less annoying than in the books. Also, I never thought that Ron was wrong for ignoring Lavender so much, but now I think that it was kind of an awful thing for him to do.

There were really only three Gryffindor girls in Hermione's year?! I never actually realized that... Well, maybe there were only three that Jo named... I'm not sure. That's very interesting!

This didn't give me sad feels, but that's okay. I've had enough of those! I liked the friendship feels it gave me, though. This was a very good story. :)

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Review #3, by evil little devil Two Beginnings

9th July 2014:
This was such a sweet story! And such a sweet friendship to write about. I absolutely adored the opening scene, how they met - you really nailed Lavender's characterisation, showing her as being a little airheaded, but really brave and loyal and courageous as well.
I absolutely loved the section with the periods! That is so accurate, and hilarious, I completely remember that time where everyone was so desperate to get their period and be a grown-up!
I also loved the study-party section, just the way you ended with that line in brackets, it made me laugh.
I really adored this, it was such a heartwarming story to read, and you constructed a really beautiful friendship here.

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Review #4, by ohmymerlin Two Beginnings

8th July 2014:
Heya, Emily!

HOW CAN THIS BE YOUR LEAST FAVOURITE?! I'm pretty sure I've read all three of yours now and this is definitely amazing! It made me tear up, thinking of their friendship!

I loved each of the years you described. It was written so well and it flowed so nicely, which in this type of one-shot can be difficult to achieve so kudos!

Also, Parvati I feel you girl. Cramps and other things are no fun at all and although I crinkled my nose at the vivid image, it made me laugh because oh my god it was accurate! And seeing Lavender's jealousy was funny! I remember when we were in year 7 and everyone had gotten theirs and this one girl was so jealous even though we kept telling her that "NO YOU DO NOT WANT THIS!" That little snipped just made me laugh because so many girls are like that! :P

I really loved the relationship you wrote of the two of them. Although it did make me sad that they hated Hermione so much! D': But their first meeting was so funny, haha! I couldn't stop giggling when she was like, "Are you sorry?" hahahaha :P

This was brilliant, Emily! Don't doubt yourself! ♥

- Kayla :)

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Review #5, by patronus_charm Two Beginnings

7th July 2014:
*casually continues to stalk your author page*

Omg, Emily, seriously, every story I read of yours you keep on wowing me with how much youíve improved as the quality of this is insane and your writing is a little insane and I just love it! ♥

Just everything about this was amazing, but letís start with the whole style of it which was pretty fab if I say so myself! I love the use of third person, it worked so, so, so well here giving both of their perspectives and just seeing how close they are to one another what their friendship meant to one another and it just gave the story another perspective. The use of parenthesis was another thing I loved, because, again, it added another perspective to the story making it much more complex and interesting to read.

I really loved seeing their friendship grow and develop over the years and even though each school year only got a couple of paragraphs at the most, I felt as if I just knew them so well and knew the ins and outs of their friendship too which was really impressive for such a low word count. I liked the way you started and ended with it starts like this, as it showed how their friendship had made a full circle. It was especially poignant with the last section as we knew what as coming, we knew what was going to happen and how they had made it this far together and now it was the start of something else.

I really loved the final line as it had such strong and powerful imagery too that itís still burning through my mind of them going into battle hand in hand, and Iím trying not to cry as I know what happens and itís just too sad. This was amazing! ♥

-Kiana
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Review #6, by maskedmuggle Two Beginnings

7th July 2014:
Hey!

Contrary to your A/N, I actually really enjoyed this - it's definitely more than okay, in fact it was pretty fantastic! I loved your portrayal of Parvati and Lavender's friendship! I loved how you gave us a snapshot of their friendship each year and really showed how it developed and became even stronger year by year. I particularly loved the opening scene of how they met. It was just so cute and even a bit amusing. If I was being super nitpicky I'd say I'm a bit uncertain about the fourth year section - I think I would've preferred it to be a bit more lighthearted, rather than it being about something that's perhaps a bit more awkward reading about? (especially even more so for guys?) However, it does clearly show them both growing up, which is, I guess, what you were aiming to do in that section.

I loved how you characterised both of them. I also thought the ending was really great because it showed what the two of them were about to experience together. All in all, I definitely thought this really showed their friendship really well. And oh, I also loved the repetition at the start of every section - I found it very effective. Nicely written!

- Charlotte/maskedmuggle
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