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Review #1, by nott theodore Ten Minutes

2nd April 2017:
CTF Jailbreak Review

Hi Rumpel! Ah, I loved this story! You managed to capture so much in so few words, and I'm really glad that you're focusing on two characters that we don't get to read very much about. This story captured a really short and simple moment between two cousins, but somehow there was so much more in it.

I suppose it shouldn't surprise me that, as a Slytherin yourself, you write about Slytherin characters, but what fascinates me is the thought that you've put into the pureblood world and the struggles that Regulus and Narcissa, in particular, face growing up in it. We know that Sirius was able to get out, and that in the end Regulus changed his mind, which makes me think he always had misgivings and yet did what was expected of him. This highlights that really well - the doubts that he's having and his worries about how things will turn out. Neither Regulus or Narcissa really seem to have a choice in this matter. I mean, they have a choice about whether or not to do what is expected of them, like Draco did, but at the same time the choice isn't as obvious if you've been brought up believing a certain thing, is it?

I liked that you showed the more caring side to Narcissa here. She seems so cold in many stories, but in some ways I think that was partly a front that she learnt to put on in order to protect herself from betraying her real emotions. She obviously loves Draco so she has the capacity to care far more than Bellatrix does, I think. Seeing her looking out for Regulus and noticing what he's feeling when they're surrounded by different ideas is really a different side to her character.

I loved the dialogue here too - the way that they were repeating the fact that it's going to be okay as if they hope repetition will make it true. The conversation seemed really natural between them and helped to capture a lovely moment.

Sian :)

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Review #2, by melian Ten Minutes

2nd April 2017:
Hi Rumpel! Long time no speak, but I hope things are going okay for you.

I'm here to review for Capture the flag, and I'm glad I stumbled upon your page. This is lovely. You've really delved into an aspect of the Potterverse I confess I've not thought much about - the pureblood aristocracy and its machinations. I did a little bit, in HTM, I admit, but this is deeper than I went, and you only used 1000 words. I'm impressed.

Regulus is someone who alternates between fascinating me and disgusting me, for various reasons. Right now it's fascinated, probably because of how recently I read DH, and tbh I can't remember why he disgusts me occasionally, but he does, and that's why I've never really tried to write him. Or even consider him that much. But this is a really interesting way of telling his story without getting into the whole Death Eater circus - it's just a family function, and like so many of us he's feeling out of place for whatever reason, and wants to get away, and has to be brought back by what seems like the one person who gets him. And I can imagine that would have been Narcissa, to be honest. Bella was too brash, too domineering; Andromeda too mild or too sympathetic to the other side; of that generation, it has to be Cissa, doesn't it? But it took me reading this story to realise that. Very nicely done!

cheers Mel

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Review #3, by adluvshp Ten Minutes

19th November 2015:
Hello again!

This was so very sweet. I'm glad Regulus and Narcissa shared a sweet bond - well it's not exactly canon but I'm going to keep it as my head canon from now on. You definitely chose an interesting plot here and wove it very well (as you always do).

Your characterisation of Regulus was very good. His frustration, his worry, it all came through wonderfully. You used descriptions very well to enhance that and convey the theme further. Like:

"Shaking his head, he brought himself back from a world of unspoken fears and back into warm-roomed, noisy, upperclass reality."

Here, "unspoken fears" and "upperclass reality" really make an impact. They have so much underlying meaning. They give a very good picture of what's going on in Regulus' life.

And then:
"In contrast, Regulus' knew his face was slightly flush from the warmth, and he could practically feel the wrinkles in his robes. His mother would have a fit."

Again, it shows the kind of pressure Regulus is under, and what he deals with on a daily basis. His resentment seeps through and that's perfect.

It was sad that Regulus couldn't feel connected to Sirius because he'd "abandoned" him, but it was nice that Narcissa could fill that void. Their interaction was well-written and the ending brought a sweet smile to my face. It made for a lovely little read and I loved it, as I usually love all your writing =)

Great job!

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Review #4, by Felpata Lupin Ten Minutes

3rd October 2015:
Here for our swap!

This was so cute! I loved your portrayal of Regulus and Narcissa and their relationship! They perfectly fit my headcanon, and I really love that they can be so honest and find understanding in each other.

I loved the description of the engagement party and Regulus' train of thought through it. I loved his doubts about the Death Eaters' cause and the pressure he feels from his family. That's exactly what I imagine about him.

It made me a bit sad that Narcissa practically replaced Sirius in Regulus' heart. I always find it so sad to think that the two brothers never managed to get along. I wish Sirius didn't give up on Regulus so quickly... :(

Still, I'm glad that Narcissa was there for him. I loved their dialogue, so heartfelt and honest. I loved how they also teased each other a little. It so all so sweet and so natural and believable.

Lovely work with this, it's a little and simple story, but really well written and such a delight to read! :)

Much love,

Author's Response: Hey Chiara!

Thanks so much! In the original version, I was attempting to have Lucius and Regulus share a nice moment but Lucius' characterization just would *not* allow it. That quickly inspired Regulus and Narcissa having a conversation instead. It worked much more easily.

I know! :( I wish that Sirius and Regulus had a better brotherly relationship! It makes me sad too.

Thanks so much for the lovely review!


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Review #5, by The Summer Snake Ten Minutes

26th May 2015:
Greetings from The Summer Snake! I have recently slithered out of hibernation and discovered this amazing place with such amazing stories, so I want to read and review as many as I can before I go back into hibernation!

Aww, I really liked this. I've never seen a fic showing the bond between Narcissa and Regulus, so this was very unique and very interesting. I enjoyed reading it a lot.

Your characterisation of Regulus and Narcissa was very good. I liked their interaction and found it believable. The bit about having been born to uphold the beliefs made me a little sad - and it was definitely believable.

Overall, this was a great little one-shot. The descriptions and dialogue was good, it flowed smoothly and made for a nice read. If I wasn't a reptilian creature and could smile, I would have at the end. Good job!

*showers confetti and flowers* Have a nice summer!

Now I'll be off to explore more of this wonderful sun! See ya!

With love,
The Summer Snake

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Review #6, by The Hot Cross Bun Monster Ten Minutes

31st March 2015:
Muhahaha it's the Hot Cross Bun Monster, coming to terrify your story!

Hmm, I must say I appreciate your description of the Pureblood families as their traditions are an important part of how they terrify people and as Iím all for scaring people, I loved it, and I must say you were very articulate with them as well. I must say that Regulusís decision to fight with the Death Eaters should be applauded too, because anything which encourages evil in the world is a good thing, though it would be better if he was teaming up with me.

Hmm, promises and being there for one another, all you need in the world is yourself I say. However, I must say that if I was into this whole caring for others business I would find that scene almost rather touching as it is a friendship one doesnít often contemplate all that much. Bah, peace, Regulus should be laughing as there is no peace in this world, but if it makes him content to think it might last for a few minutes, I shall stay silent if that keeps him happy.

I suppose I may reveal that I did find this one-shot rather touching though it does sort of ruin my street cred for being one of the scariest people around!

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Review #7, by simplelullaby Ten Minutes

20th August 2014:
Hey! It's simplelullaby, here to do another review for the August review exchange. Another brilliant one shot, and because the other was so different it highlighted how your style can change for whatever suits. As a writer who struggles to change my "voice" when writing, I have to say I'm quite jealous!

But again you managed to create such an effective scene in so little words. Your opening lines were particularly great, I loved that line "it seemed extremely capable of hurtling an otherwise mild-mannered person into a claustrophobic fit. It did very well to establish the scene, and in just one line! Brilliant!

Regulus will always have a soft spot in my heart, poor soul got in too deep and couldn't get back out, so I'm happy to see a portrayal of him that isn't so black (*elbows you* gettit?) and actually quite human. I also liked that you chose Narcissa to be the one to come find them, and that they shared a close relationship - a new headcanon for me!

It was just so different from your other one-shot, but the change is so seamless...just oh my God can I have your writing talent? I love the way you write, the way you pop in little bits and pieces here and there, little throwaway details like the "frosted windows blurring the mass of bodies," or "wade through the sea of fortune-hunting damsels," it's just really original phrasing which creates some pretty funny images in my head (Regulus literally having to wade through a sea of screaming women!). Anyway, what I'm trying to say in a very rambly way is you're doing it right! I did notice a couple of typos on my way through, but to be honest seeing as I can't even remember them now they can't have been THAT bothersome.

So yeah, another great one-shot! Completely different from the one I reviewed before, but still great!

Keep Writing


Author's Response: Hello again!

Hm, the only bit of advice that I can offer on changing 'voice' is to really invest into your different character's mindsets (i.e. if you're writing about Regulus Black, envision what it's like to be Regulus, in his situation, and how you/he would react thusly. Erm...become the character?) The rest of the narration should follow through. Or maybe that's just what works for me...

I HAD to write a Regulus story something like this, because I kind of have a soft spot for him as well. Due to the limitations of my narration in a different story that has Regulus, because he's not playing a major role at the moment, he's fairly I had to redeem him ^.^. Regulus/Narcissa is my one of my favorite brOTPs :).

*Blush* With all the compliments! Haha, thank you, but from what I've gathered from just reading an introduction of yours, you are very talented with your writing ability.

Thanks so much!


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Review #8, by maskedmuggle Ten Minutes

10th July 2014:

I really enjoyed reading this story! I really liked the friendship you chose to portray - Narcissa and Regulus. I've never, ever thought about them as being friends, but I'm so glad you've opened my mind to it, because this was so realistic, so believable and you really showed what great friends they were. Your characterisation of both of them was fantastic, and the dialogue between them was written really well. I loved how both of them had a bit of doubt about it all, but Narcissa's "We were born to uphold these beliefs." encapsulated perfectly both of their lives. Really great idea for this story, and I also liked the setting of it as happening at Bellatrix's wedding. This was a really well written story :)

- Charlotte/maskedmuggle
House Cup 2014 Review

Author's Response: Hey there,

I'd been working with the story for a bit, and originally intended for Regulus and Lucius to be close friends. Ultimately, it turned out that Narcissa's character was much more receptive of concerns and fears than Lucius'.

Thanks so much for the lovely review!


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Review #9, by UnluckyStar57 Ten Minutes

9th July 2014:
Regulus and Narcissa. There's a pair of friends that I never thought about before!

Regulus seems very reluctant to get on board with the Death Eaters' cause, which is good. It definitely foreshadows his later betrayal of Voldemort, so it's awesome that you put that in the story.

But he's being all moody and isn't any fun, so he takes his moping outside. I'm glad he has Narcissa to save him before he drowns in his gloomy thoughts. :) But the fact that Narcissa doesn't fully agree with the cause is interesting to me. I can definitely see it--she maybe only went along with the pureblood mania because of her love for Lucius.

Another great story, with yet another intriguing perspective of characters that I don't think about a lot. :D

House Cup 2014 Review


Author's Response: And hello again.

Regulus and Narcissa. Originally, the story was meant to be a Regulus and Lucius friendship, but Narcissa's character catered more towards the tender and understanding side of the story that Lucius' character just couldn't.

This was another fun avenue to explore...HC was a time for firsts and experimentation for me, and it was all fun to explore.



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Review #10, by evil little devil Ten Minutes

9th July 2014:
You really do have a gift for diving straight into a character's perspective really convincingly. You made Regulus and Narcissa both come to life. I could feel all of his anxieties pouring off the page, and the relief he began to feel as Narcissa made him feel better.
This was a very interesting friendship to write! Regulus definitely would have needed someone when Sirius left, I can imagine that he would have taken that really hard - particularly as it's not like his fundamental beliefs differ from Sirius', it's just that he's younger and it's harder for him, and he's not willing to part from his family just yet. You really set him up very well to be the man that would end up quietly giving his own life for no sort of glory whatsoever in order to stop Voldemort. I think you also set Narcissa up very well for her position in that world, her adherence to family, and tradition, and yet her love for those closest to her meaning more than any of that.
This was really lovely, and a very enjoyable read!

- House Cup 2014 Review.

Author's Response: I had been playing with Regulus' character in a different story, so I had a preconceived perception of how I wanted him to be portrayed, though this portrayal is almost the exact opposite of how I'd been portraying him. (Which was refreshing.)

I wanted to capture exactly that with the friendship -- someone to simply be there for him, no matter what. Originally, I had planned on using Lucius, but Narcissa's character definitely caters to this role more.

Thanks for another fantastic review!


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