Reading Reviews for Event 3 - Will-O'-The-Wisp
  
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Review #1, by TidalDragon The Forest

15th December 2014:
Hello again, Lo! You sure do enjoy writing stories with Dean, huh? I enjoyed this one too and how it covered a span in the life of a relatively minor character that rarely gets much coverage and for which Dean rarely seems to get much credit.

What's interesting to me is how he evolves throughout the piece, beginning with the same relative naivete Harry Potter displayed in his early experiences in the wizarding world, but progressing to be more - adapting not just the determination to go on that typified Cedric Diggory, but the careful tactics and measured movements of Fleur Delacour.

I also really enjoyed the descriptions you gave of Dean's surroundings and his physical state. They were appropriately detailed, but never so much so that they hit you over the head. And they also managed to be sprinkled in so nicely throughout that it never felt like you were heaping "setting" or "exhaustion" on us.

On my first read through, the only thing I thought might be missing from the quartet of champions was the power and athleticism of Viktor Krum, but then I realized it was there, just more oblique - I thought of your recounting of the weeks on the run and the endurance it must have demanded and the fortitude demanded to live a solitary life so successfully for so long under such circumstances.

Another well-written gem! Thanks for sharing!

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Review #2, by UnluckyStar57 The Forest

11th July 2014:
Oh my... When Dean ran into Ted, I thought for sure that he was going to be caught by Snatchers...

I should have remembered that the will-o'-the-wisp was not a dark creature who wanted to do him harm. It just wanted to play, and it helped him out by bringing him to Ted. :)

It was nice to see Dean still thinking about Seamus while he's on the run. They're definitely one of the major best friend pairs in the books, so it makes sense for Dean to be worried for the safety of his friend. Of course, Dean's own safety is questionable at the moment, so it's good that he was agile enough to make his escape quite quickly.

This was a really nice story. I like how Ted went from being gruff and scary to friendly and welcoming. :)

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~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: Hi!

Thank you so much for this absolutely wonderful review! It means a lot!

Lo :)


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Review #3, by evil little devil The Forest

11th July 2014:
I always pondered how Dean met up with Ted, and what his life was like on the run. This story did a really excellent job of explaining that.
I really love what you did with Dean's character. You made him feel incredibly real, I loved it. He's not a character we get to learn much about in the books, so it's really enjoyable to read about him. This is the kind of story that could slip straight into the books, it works in so well with canon.
You wrote the action in this so well, it felt so natural. I'm hopeless at more action-type scenes, so I'm incredibly envious!
I love that it was his DA galleon that saved him! That's a genius idea.
I love reading about minor characters, and this was really well written and really enjoyable to read :)

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Author's Response: Hi!

Thank you so much for this absolutely wonderful review!

Lo :)


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Review #4, by ohmymerlin The Forest

9th July 2014:
Hello!

You wrote Dean so well! He felt so very canon! I loved the little allusions to his family and that he was the cute big brother reading bedtime stories :') It gave me the most adorable vision of Dean and his younger sisters!

I liked that the will-o'-the-wisp or pixie was kind of teasing him! It was sweet to see, it was almost like she (or he) knew that Dean used to read all about them! And she or he led Dean to Ted and Griphook, like Snape's Patronus led Harry to Ron! :D

This was an interesting version of how they all met and grouped together but it's very interesting and believable! But props to Dean for realising that Ted and Griphook were also on the run. I know if I was in his shoes I'd probably just cry from fear and not realise anything, haha!

This was a great one-shot!

- Kayla :)

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Author's Response: Hi!

Well, I'm glad I did Dean justice! And I'm so glad you liked the mentions of his family! And yay! You got the reference! It was kind of a parallel that I was writing so I'm glad you caught that!

Oh, I'm not so sure you'd cry. Maybe be a little scared, but I'm sure you're braver than you expect. But yes, Dean is pretty astute.

Thank you so much for this wonderful review!
Lo :)


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Review #5, by maskedmuggle The Forest

8th July 2014:
Hey!

This was brilliant - I loved it so much. The plot/storyline was fantastic, and I really liked how well you tied it in with what we know from canon! I loved how well you captured Dean's situation and all the dangers during that time, and what he had to do in order to avoid being caught by the snatchers. The magical creature you used was really unique and I'm glad you made it really special in a positive way - leading Dean to fellow comrades, rather than to his doom. I'm glad it was a "happy" ending, in that Dean found others in a similar situation to him, and it was a nice touch that it was the Dumbledore's Army galleon that identified him as part of the resistance. I thought your characterisation of Dean, and Ted as well, was really spot on. Such a well-written piece, and I really enjoyed reading this!

- Charlotte/maskedmuggle
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Author's Response: Hi Charlotte!

Thank you so much for this absolutely brilliant review!

Lo :)


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Review #6, by MischiefNotQuiteMannaged The Forest

7th July 2014:
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In a time where many magical creatures were siding with Voldemort, I really enjoyed reading about the Pixie helping Dean find companionship and relative safety after being on the run alone. It was a lovely plot twist to see that the magical creature was a Pixie! I expected the magical creature that Dean would meet to be Griphook or Gornuck.

Your description of the setting sun painted a vivid picture in my mind. I feel that despite his predicament, Dean, with his artist's eye, would appreciate the "masterful painting" of the sunset.

Author's Response: Hi!

I'm glad you liked the pixies! I like the story so much, so I'm glad you enjoyed their presence in the story even if the goblins were there.

Thank you so much for the praise on my description! I'm so happy since usually that's my weakest point!

Thank you so much for this wonderful review!
Lo :)


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