Reading Reviews for The Last Snowy Feather
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Review #1, by HPFF Secret Santa 2014 Biding Her A Silent Farewell

17th December 2014:
So this is your best story yet! The description was absolutely wonderful and pulled me in from the beginning! I liked that this story didn't have a romance but was about Hermione being his friend and helping him remember hedwig and honor hedwigs memory. I think had you added romance it would have toned down the actual meaning behind the story and it wouldnt have felt right to me. I love how Hermione reminds harry that hedwig is still flying and how she is able to help harry move on as well. The bit at the end where they release hedwigs last feather into the sky is a really sweet ending that helps the reader realize that harry is finally coming to terms with hedwigs death and is going to begin moving on from it. I couldn't spot any errors in this or had any thoughts to improve this piece as it was just really well done. You definitely deserved the first place win on this one shot and you should be really proud of it! I look forward to reading more of your work as you post it! Great job!

HPFF Secret Santa

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Review #2, by Slide Biding Her A Silent Farewell

29th September 2014:
Here for the review exchange! And just from the summary I suspect this is going to upset me.

Not much in the book was made of Hedwig's death, which is sad because it was the first, shocking gut-punch of the story. It's good to see an analysis of Harry's feelings on the subject, as they were skimmed over very much in the books.

So I like that this is picking it up after it's all over, after Harry can stop and reflect on what's been, and realises that he misses her. I like the idea he found the feather after going through his stuff, or the like, and was just hit with this grief. It's natural, because Hedwig was all the things this story addresses - his tether to the world, as well as his first friend, even on top of being a beloved pet (which is still important!). So, the story handles Harry's grief very effectively and believably.

Hermione's role in the story works. I took a canon-reading of this by default, viewing this as them being just friends, and it didn't jar at all. It's entirely believable that Hermione would be the one to get why Harry's upset, and to be able to come up with something magical which would make him feel better. It's a nice way to say goodbye, and with all the two have been through, it's apt for them to say goodbye to Hedwig together.

So, I really enjoyed this! Short but sweet and tackled something I hadn't consciously realised was lacking in canon, which I always like to see in a story. From a technical perspective, my only comment would be that your prose can get a bit wordy, describing every little physical movement or tone of voice more than is strictly necessary. Have faith in your dialogue! It does a good job communicating what it needs to; don't worry too much about every tiny detail. This is something I've struggled with in my writing, too; trust your simple descriptions to convey what you want. The pieces you need are in place, just take a hatchet to excess words, is my advice (see, even this review section gets wordy, I can't judge).

Nevertheless, this was a very sweet piece, and one I enjoyed a lot. Both as a reflection of Harry's feelings on losing Hedwig, and what she meant to him, and as a snapshot of the understanding relationship between Harry and Hermione. Good work!

- Slide

Author's Response: Hi!

Yeah, it is sad that in the books, Harry didn't really had the opportunity to mourn over really those who've died. It was something I wanted to see... at least at the ending of the book - after Harry defeated Voldemort. I think it'd have made a better epilogue had Rowling wrote about maybe Harry reminiscing the past... what he lost... then a straight-forward 19 year happy-ever after. Not that I hated the ending. I just expected different that's all.

Aw, yeah... I don't know why I can't write what I imagine properly. I know when I be sounding confusing in my writing, and just at those times, I can't think of anything that would sound better when I want to replace it. I will try to be careful of how I word things.

I am glad too that you enjoyed this overall, and I want to thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

- Asphodel

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Review #3, by potterfan310 Biding Her A Silent Farewell

26th August 2014:

Here for the August Gryffie review swap.

I rarely read The Trio whether it be before or after the war but this is perfect. I thought it was going to be darker but it's not, it's delicate and beautiful.

Harry definitely didn't have enough time to mourn Hedwig at all, like he said she was his first friend. Which I think as well, since she was the one spending all the time with Harry and having to endure being locked in too. *Hugs to Harry*

The quote when Harry said it was his connection to Ron, Hermione and the wizarding world made me tear up slightly.

Teeny tiny thing, "Hermione kneel next to him." - This sentence sounded a little off, knelt would work better than kneel.

That last line is perfect, Harry has finally said his goodbye and in a way it's like he's seeing her fly again. This is a beautiful little one-shot!


Author's Response: Hi! Hehe, someone else said that as well... Maybe it's because of the banner I made. Maybe, I'll change it sooner or later.

I am glad you that you like this. I really wish Rowling had at least have Harry mourning of her like around the ending of the book... or exactly when he made it to safety after being chased by the DEs.

Thanks for the catch! I'll fix that!

Ah! Thanks! ♥ Thank you for reading and reviewing, and I will get to reading your story as well!

- Asphodel

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Review #4, by lightthecandle Biding Her A Silent Farewell

22nd July 2014:
Hey there! I'm finally getting round to reviewing your story for the challenge! :)

Can I just say that I wholeheartedly agree that Hedwig was Harry's first friend when he discovered that he was a wizard because I always got the vibe that the bond between Hagrid and Harry only occurred later on in the Philosopher's Stone! And I thoroughly enjoyed this one-shot from beginning to end!

Hedwig was the only thing that reminded Harry of his magical side during the horrendous summers at the Dursley's and obviously that's so important to him that it seems a bit disappointing that this wasn't actually in the story. Because it deserves to be! It captures the relationship between Harry/Hedwig perfectly and it's a brilliant variation on Philia. Rather it being between two humans, a man and his pet. It's brilliantly genius!

Another thing is that description of him finally letting the feather go was just so beautiful to read and I completely understand that he would be unwilling at first to let go of the one thing he had left of his best friend. And the portrayal of Hermione/Harry's relationship is really good too! I like how Harry assumed she'd be irritated or exasperated like she usually would be because that's just how their relationship is when it's not serious, like this.

Such a lovely and sentimental ending to this one-shot! I genuinely and honestly enjoyed this story so much, and it describes Philia so aptly! Well done!

Good luck in the challenge!
~Aimee xxx

Author's Response: Hi!

Yay! I'm happy to know that! Yeah, you're right! Hagrid and Harry's friendship occurred later. :D I'm also glad to know that you really enjoyed this as I really put my all into that fic!

I fear of going out of character and that I'm weak in the description area, but it's great to hear from you saying otherwise!

Thank you so much for the challenge, for reading this, and for reviewing! And thank you!

- Asphodel

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Review #5, by jessicalorewrites Biding Her A Silent Farewell

19th July 2014:
Hey! Here for our review swap :D

When I first clicked on, I expected this to be a lot more morbid than what it is. Instead, it's beautiful. The delicacy with which your writing in this oneshot flows is astounding and it just makes me so, so sad.

I definitely understand your point about Harry grieving for Hedwig! It was something that always bothered me in the books... I understand he had other things going on, but Hedwig was a dear friend to him and, as you say in this, his connection to the wizarding world whilst back with the Dursleys. What I'm trying to say here is that your idea of displaying this bond between them is very original and (also) incredibly well written.

The last line makes me feel a lot better. I'm not sure if you intended to write it this way but pollen always reminds me of nice sunny days, so it's like the little ray of sunshine finally peeking out at Harry and Hermione. It's a warm touch and intentional or not I really love it :D

Overall an excellent, in-character, heart-wrenching oneshot! Keep up the awesome work!!


Author's Response: Hey Jessica!

Oh, I had a feeling readers (like you) would get that impression [I believe especially looking at the banner. :P]

I'm glad to know that I'm not the only one bothered by that. In fact, I was hoping to see Harry and the others in the book grieve, though the epilogue wasn't bad... just I expected different.

You're right though, towards the end, I purposely made where all hope is not lost. The pollen is a sign of the dawn breaking, so I'm happy you caught that. ^_^

So glad that you enjoyed reading this! I enjoyed reading your brief story as well! It was great!

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! And I will!

- Asphodel

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