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Review #1, by HarryGinnyLove88 I Wasn't Born for the Rose and Pearl

11th August 2017:
Different story from the other but great anyway :) write soon ok?

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Review #2, by dumbledore_wannabe He Loves Her So

19th July 2017:
I sure do miss Alba! I've re-read this story a few times in the past year to get my fix. I hope that this wonderful story will continue. :)

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Review #3, by alias999 I Wasn't Born for the Rose and Pearl

20th June 2017:
please please update. its done really well

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Review #4, by Mia I Wasn't Born for the Rose and Pearl

7th September 2016:
Omg, this story is amazing!!! I love everything about it but what I love most is that you catch the Hogwarts-atmosphere (I don't have a better word) so well, it is like reading a "real" Harry Potter book.
I hope you will post the next chapter soon... :)

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Review #5, by DeVito I Wasn't Born for the Rose and Pearl

30th July 2016:
I can't tell you how much I love this story. I can tell you that I am impatiently waiting for your next chapter! Your writing flows so well and is more like reading a book than some of the stories I have read on here. You know how some people write what comes out of their head and don't think about how it comes across to other people who aren't able to read their thoughts? You aren't one of those people. Also, I absolutely love your first challenge. The chess pieces - brilliant. I cannot wait to see what the next two are and find out who put Alba's name in the goblet. GIVE ME MORE ALBA + BEN!! BALBA! ALBEN! WHATEVER YOU CALL IT, I SHIP IT.

In summary: your writing is lovely, fantastic, and I am impatient for your next chapter.

P.S. There was no reason for you to be scared of the Yule Ball, you did beautifully. We didn't need minute details about the entire time. This was the perfect amount. Keep up the good work!!

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Review #6, by Brittany I Wasn't Born for the Rose and Pearl

31st May 2016:
Excellent chapter! I really like how we're getting to know more about Alba! I look forward to the next chapter!

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Review #7, by dumbledore_wannabe I Wasn't Born for the Rose and Pearl

17th April 2016:
Now this is exactly why I prefer to read stories that are already completed. It just kills me to really get into an enjoyable story, but get to read only little tantalizing bits at a time. I really love this story and can't wait to see what happens next!! :)

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Review #8, by Waer I Wasn't Born for the Rose and Pearl

13th April 2016:
I would have liked a peek into the practice sessions. More detail in general. Guess that was because of your fears about the Ball. Enjoying the story and that is why I would like More more more..lol.

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Review #9, by sourgrapesnape He Loves Her So

14th March 2016:
Please update! It's been way too long and I want to see how the Yule ball goes and of course, how Alba deals with having her new hair!:) thanks so much

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Review #10, by AS He Loves Her So

20th December 2015:
Love how you chose I'm not that Girl lyrics as the chapter titles! One of my favorite musicals! You're a very good author and I hope you update soon:)

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm going through and editing, so it may take a bit. Sorry

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Review #11, by Zoie He Loves Her So

16th November 2015:
OK. This is FANTASTIC for so many reasons. How many young girls are out there who have CP or other conditions and we open all these books and they're all "BODY NORMAL" or "GENDER NORMAL" etc etc. This is great because it presents a really remarkable young girl and it's great to show character diversity but not default to perfectly healthy. Ya get what I mean? I would love it if you could take the magic out of this too and write Alba as a real girl in the real world or something and publish it too!

Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it so much! Alba is certainly an 'out of the box' character.

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Review #12, by Secret Santa Hands Touch

12th November 2015:
Ho ho ho! I know that I am a little early for sending Christmas greetings but next month I'll be busy putting the finishing touches on toys and finalizing my route for Christmas Eve. While I have some down time, I thought I would drop in and leave some reviews for deserving authors as an early Christmas present. Now on to your present.

I can tell you've done your research on Cerebral Palsy...either that or you or someone you know has it. I want to commend you on using this platform for spreading awareness. Well Done! Anyone that has special needs be they Wizard or Muggle hold a special place in my heart and you have done an amazing job of showing the everyday struggles that anyone with any form of a mental or physical condition faces.

I also like how you chose not to have James on the team, it is a different take on his character, most of the next-gen fics I've read have him following in his famous parents footsteps and I know if I were a teenager with famous parents, I would want to be able to find my own path and break away from that image.

James' girlfriend sounds like quite a (4 letter word for a female dog) and I personally would like to see James put her in her place and dump her but I love happy endings.

Overall I thought this was an excellent chapter and well worth losing a Cookies & Milk break.

Merry Christmas

Your Secret Santa

Author's Response: Thank you for such a lovely review!

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Review #13, by Sam He Loves Her So

25th October 2015:
I just started reading this story recently and it's really good - I can't stop reading it. I really love Alba and her relationships with her friends/people around her; you're so sensitive to the little details of them and the subtleties to the social boundaries. At first, admittedly, I was worried that they might become cliched or perhaps melodramatic, but they're really well balanced. Overall, I really love it, and I'm excited to see how it plays out.

Author's Response: I'm glad that you are enjoying it! Thank you so much for the feedback!

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Review #14, by Scars and Broken Hearts He Loves Her So

18th October 2015:
It's really rare to read about a disabled heroine. I really like the way you write and the turns the story is taking. I do hope you will continue to update it though. I will definitely keep reading it. :)

Author's Response: I'm going back through and editing, so it may take a bit for me to update. I'm so glad that you're enjoying the story!

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Review #15, by LadyLikable He Loves Her So

17th October 2015:
By Merlin's saggiest y-fronts, you are such an engaging author! Your characterization of Alba is amazing. At this point I'm shipping Dimitri/Alba and James/Chandra, which suprised me because I usually love the James/Original Main Character stories (I guess it's speaks to my inner fairytale-fangirl hehe). I think you characterise James' and Chandra's complicated relationship perfectly, and while I really like Ben/Alba I just find Dimitri a very mysterious and interesting character. Whatever way you decide to go with this story, however, I'm sure I will love it!

Author's Response: Bahaha! Thank you! I'm so glad that you enjoyed it.

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Review #16, by cocopops He Loves Her So

13th October 2015:
This story is amazing. I'm so glad to have found it. You really do deserve winning that Dobby Award.
The way you made Alba is fascinating. I like the fact that she isn't just another pretty and perfect girl for James to love, but someone with actual problems and obstacles. I hope she'll warm up to Ben, he really is a nice guy! James is still a bit of a mystery to me. And then there is the whole storyline with Vesela and Ivanovic.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for a lovely review! I'm so glad that you've liked it so far.

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Review #17, by RoseFromGryffindor He Loves Her So

9th October 2015:
Ugh, why must she go with Ben? I really don't like him...

Author's Response: Haha! I don't think that she's all that happy about it either.

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Review #18, by dumbledore_wannabe Don't Wish, Don't Start

9th October 2015:
I'm really enjoying this story! Great to see a story with a main character who lives with daily struggles that most people just don't talk or think about. And even a second handicapped character too, although in a different way. Reminds me of some of the Farrelly Brothers movie in that way - having numerous hsndicapped folks in the story and acknowledging the handicap, but simply showing them living their lives, rather than making the story about the handicap. It's how life should be.

I love the character development you've done; these characters are really fleshing out. Like an earlier reviewer, I've also noticed and enjoyed you giving her such a relationship with the portraits in the hallways where she spends more time than probably any other student! Unlike most other reviewers, I am absolutely convinced that James did NOT put her name in the Goblet. I'm betting on Chandra or Ben - each of whom would have had totally different motivations. (Maude? maybe. She's the only other person I can think of at this point, and once I know her better I can guess better!)

So glad I've found this story and can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Haha! I love to hear people's guesses. I can only encourage you to read on! And it will be revealed +]

Thank you for such a lovely review!

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Review #19, by Slightly odd kat Sudden Silence

7th October 2015:
You can get extra time to do things if you have a disability. I get 25% extra time in exams.

Schools are obliged to provide reasonable adjustments for disabled students. I get a laptop in class because I find writing painful and the result is illegible and produced very slowly.

Failure to provide reasonable adjustments is discrimination and against the law.

I love the story. A very positive message. There are very few disabled people portrayed in fiction.

Author's Response: I wasn't sure what accommodations Hogwarts would have, so I went with this was a new issue for everyone. And with a proud character like Alba, I think any adjustments they offered to make would be rejected.

I'm so glad that you enjoy it!

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Review #20, by Penelope Inkwell There's a Girl I Know

22nd September 2015:
YEEESSS!! She did it! I am so proud of Alba!!! She was a superstar!

James was an excellent Companion, too. It was a good thought, to make the plan sabotage, and it was good of him to ask about the terrain, even if they didn't give the answer.

Oh, and I really loved the wand weighing. I always like hearing about different characters and how their wands fit them, but I particularly enjoyed the way you described it all, as well as the character of Mrs. Zauberstabe. She really popped in a short amount of time. I wonder where it is that Alba had heard her surname before.

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Apparently he hadn’t told them about the blank paper to save his reputation.
--this is said like it's common knowledge, but I don't think it's been previously mentioned that James' paper was blank? It might be good to check on that, because I could be wrong. But if I'm not, it seems a little strange for us not to see that mentioned beforehand.

Ben shook his head, beaming at her. “Whatever you say, dear.”
--This seemed an odd thing for Ben to do, right after she had told James that she loved him. Wouldn't he be jealous? He's seemed jealous of James in the past. I was wondering if that was meant to be James' line, maybe?
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“Then you’re still the best this school has to offer. The Goblet knew that. Don’t forget it."
--Nurse Wainscott is absolutely right! She is very good at giving honest inspiration. I was just so glad that she said that, because she hit the nail on the head. Whatever Alba things--whatever anyone thinks, she is good enough. The Goblet wouldn't have chosen her otherwise.

For shame on the Hogwarts kids, for not supporting their own Champion. But I was very glad to see that the Ravenclaws were on board. I laughed when Ben said that the boys had been working on face paint options. :D Now that's the support I like to see.

And Alba was absolutely brilliant in the challenge! I am just so proud of her! She did an excellent job and used her brains and she rocked it! So excited to see the rest of what will happen. This plot is so interesting and fun to follow! Great job!


Author's Response: I'm glad that you're enjoying this so much! Nurse Wainscott is a saint, I love her! I'll look over that CC with my beta, make sure I didn't forget anything, thanks for pointing it out!

I'm going through and editing, then I'll be able to post more.

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Review #21, by Penelope Inkwell She's Who's Winsome

22nd September 2015:
I am SO RELIEVED that James didn't put her name in. I was so angry with him. Like, whew. I cannot even tell you.

You know, in some ways it might be the best case scenario that Alba is in Ravenclaw. They're less likely to be swayed by emotion, and by how things look than by the facts. Alba can make a logical argument, and they'll listen. I mean, Gryffindor pretty much just tuned Harry out when it happened to him, at least at the start.

I can't help but wonder if Chandra did it. She was terrified to put her own name in.

I'm really glad that she chose Nurse Wainscott as her Guide. She has the strongest connection to her, and Nurse Wainscott knows her best.

Speaking of, what was wrong with Ben? It still does seem a bit odd.

Hmph. Durmstrang. I never had a problem with Viktor, of course, and at least Dimitri seems nice enough, but I'm keeping my eye on him. The Slytherin in me isn't all that trusting. I'd be really glad if he turned out to be a good guy, but it's too soon for me to bank on that.

And Ben is so cute with his little owl!


Author's Response: Haha. 'The Slytherin in me isn't all that trusting' I guess you'll have to wait and see!

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Review #22, by Penelope Inkwell Don't Wish, Don't Start

22nd September 2015:
YES! Alba got it! I'm so excited! I mean, I'm sure she's terrified and infuriated, but I believe that she can do it. However, James better RUN! I mean, honestly, risk someone's life, why don't you? Without their consent? Not cool.

I loved that Alba was working on crossword puzzles through the whole thing. Very Ravenclaw of her. And I was so proud of the way that she didn't falter, despite everything. She stood tall and handled herself beautifully, even though the student body was no doubt shocked.

CC: Just a few little spelling things.

The deep red and pale blue of there robes
--there = their

The site took her off guard for a moment.
--I think that "site" here ought to be "sight"

Alba stood in shocked reverence of it’s beauty; answers to it’s little riddles.; Her head swiveled to the side on it’s own accord.
--In all these cases, the it's should be its, since they're possessive rather than contractions of "it has". And in the last one, I think the phrase is usually written "of its own accord" rather than "on its".

I'm just so, so happy that Alba is the Champion. For a while, I was worried that she'd just be James' Companion, and I really wanted her to be it! I'm delighted!!! Also, I really like the addition of Guides and Companions being added in, officially, to reduce cheating. That's definitely a step I could see the Ministries taking. And it's great characterization that Alba has already looked into the entire history of the competition. She clearly likes to be prepared and was ready to help James if she needed to. I wonder if she'll forgive him in time for him to be her Companion. And which teacher will she choose as her Guide?!

I have to say, that was just so not cool of James. I mean, I'm sure he believed that Alba could never be picked (which isn't really flattering in the first place, though I suppose I can understand it, since Alba didn't think she could be picked, either. Still, it's one thing to say that yourself, and another to have a friend bank on it). But then, also, he tricked Chandra into entering her name – really bravely, I might add, since she's terrified of water – and he took no risk at all. Not cool, James.

And where is Ben? It does seem odd that he wasn't there. Oh my gosh, he is going to FLIP!

I bet Maude will actually be a great support for Alba in all this. But I'm looking forward to see. I'm really enjoying reading this story. Your plot is addictive! I'm so glad that this was nominated for a Dobby, because it deserves it, and because it set me on the path to reading this great story! Great, great work!


P.S. Loving the Wicked references in the chapter titles!

Author's Response: Loving these long reviews! Thank you so much for the CC, I'm going back and editing now.

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Review #23, by Penelope Inkwell Sudden Heat

13th September 2015:
“I don’t like things I have to ‘get used to’ in order to like. That’s Stockholm Syndrome.”
--BAhahahaha, ohmygosh. Best line so far!

I LOVE the way you describe the Durmstrang ship's arrival. That whole section just really caught me.

And what is going on with Viktor being there instead of the Headmaster? There has to be a story there. I find the whole thing vaguely suspicious. I can see why they'd want him there – he has experience with the Triwizard Tournament, and all – but why couldn't the headmaster come, too? Veeerrry mysterious.

I think you've written Alba's relationship with Nurse Wainscott really well. The nurse is strict enough to be realistic, and she has enough starch to hold her indulgent side at bay and do what's best for the patient, but that side seems to exist, all the same. She's very encouraging to Alba without letting her work herself too far. Overall, I just found this particular exchange to be really heartwarming. It's so great that she can have that kind of relationship with her health specialist. Often they're so...sort of distant? And I get it; it's probably often necessary for the job. But I think it's realistic that a Hogwarts matron could afford to be a little more, well, matronly, and given the amount of time and effort that Alba puts into these sessions, I'm glad she can have such a warm, encouraging person to help her through it.

So, at first I was a little concerned, when I saw the word OCD, because I have OCD and Chandra's reaction didn't seem quite that, exactly--I mean, I'm not the authority on it, and it's absolutely different for every person, so it certainly wasn't outside of the realm of possibility, but I was a little unsure about it for a minute. Well, more I was unsure about the idea of OCD as an excuse for Chandra's behavior in chapter one. I was glad that you had it explained by Albus to be more of a panic attack-type thing, because that definitely makes sense to me, and I think it adds depth to her character. I wonder what it is about water that freaks her out so much, and whether it's rooted in some sort of negative experience. I'm really interested to see how that comes back in the future. Poor thing. That's a really hard thing to struggle with. Alba is right--it's no wonder she didn't want to put her name in. In Harry's day, a third of the competition was in the lake! How on earth would she do that?

I really liked the bit where she tried to warn Alba about the bouillabaisse. Okay, I've officially forgiven Chandra. She's in my good books. I feel bad for her, though, because I can relate. OCD or panic attacks, it's still similar in that you're really troubled by something that other people think is kind of ridiculous. And you can know it's ridiculous, but it doesn't change what you feel. I think James was really sweet about it, on the whole, but she'll have known he was frustrated, and that's just an awful feeling. I appreciate how much he tried, though. It was a short exchange, but it gave me a much better window into those characters. Good job!

Aw, her friends are really good about being considerate without babying her. Well, Ben might baby her a little--much more than she wants--with the carrying, but that seems to be as much about flirting as anything else.

Is there going to be an Alba-Albus name joke eventually? I'm holding out hope.


hoping up on to the vacated cot.
--hoping = hopping

She laughed, leaving her crutches behind for the first time in weeks as he took her hand, half dragging her over to the desert dish at the Gryffindor table.
--desert = dessert; also, why are they headed to the dessert dish, since bouillabaisse isn't a dessert?

“I thought Stockholm really smart and cool.” James answered defiantly.
--seems like there should be a "was" after Stockholm.

“Oh yeah!” Jam exclaimed
--Jam = James

'the chill worming it’s way through her collar'; 'made it’s way down'
--in both these cases, the "it's" should be "its"

“Vell, I vas chosen to be Guide unanimously by our, our -eh prospective enterants,” she caught him say before walking away.
--it seems like this should be either "she caught him saying" or "she heard him say". Also, "enterants" = entrants

stuble = stubble

forfieted = forfeited

The extra spacing between the paragraphs in this chapter make it a little bit harder to read than previous chapters

This is such excellent work! I definitely plan to be back for more of this. It's a wonderful story, and you've got me well and truly hooked! Loving your writing style and your characterization--it's all really lovely. I'm so glad that I finally made my way over to this story! I've seen it mentioned around the forums--always so positively--but I just hadn't got round to starting it before now and man, have I been missing out! I'm so glad that it got nominated for a Dobby to motivate me to finally get over here! Congratulations again on your nomination. You deserve it. This is an awesome story.


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Review #24, by Penelope Inkwell Sudden Silence

13th September 2015:
Well, Maude seems like a considerate person, and useful to have around if she's so keen on studying. Maybe a friendship will blossom there? I know lots of girls have mostly guy friends, and that's fine, but I do think it's good to have at least one girl friend, too.

Professor Pimbly doesn't seem so bad. I'm getting sort of mixed signals from her, but I get the vibe that she cares about her students' wellbeing. I was glad to see her encourage Alba. It seems like she could use some encouragement just about now. Being set back with her potions and therapy like that really was a blow.

I like how much consideration you've given to what it would be like to have cerebral palsy in the magical world. The potions regimen and the different Healing options are very well thought-out. And I loved that you addressed the classes that would cause her more trouble, as well. It was all clearly explained, and I just think you've done a great job thinking through all these angles!

James, don't be a hypocrite. If you're allowed to worry about Alba when she bleeds, she's allowed to worry about your entering a life-threatening tournament in which you could absolutely die. I'm just saying.

I love how realistically you've painted these characters. They make mistakes and they are hypocritical and they're also understandable and lovable. You're doing a great job with that!


“A single thread in a tapestry cannot know it’s worth,
--in this case, since it isn't a contraction, but rather an indication of possession, "it's" should be "its".

Astrology was her one indulgence. It had nothing to do with her preferred career, but she absolutely loved the stars. At first, it had been an attempt to have an excuse for wandering about at night, but she’d found the systematic charting of the sky to be rather relaxing and inspiring at the same time.
--From the way that you're describing the class, it sounds like it was meant to be Astronomy, rather than Astrology. Astrology is the whole "what's your sign" thing, and I think they cover that in Divination. Astronomy is a Hogwarts subject, though, where you study the stars.

--should be spelled "exercise"

“That’s the deal take it or leave it, missy.”
--it seems like the first and second parts of these sentences should be split somehow. Like, "That's the deal. Take it or leave it, missy," ; "That's the deal – take it or leave it, missy," ; or "That's the deal; take it or leave it, missy."

So what if your sisters already tried.”
--it seems like this sentence should end with a question mark.

Another great chapter! Sooo, James is gonna enter the Triwizard Tournament, huh? I can't say I'm surprised, but it'll be interesting to see what's to come of it! Really enjoying this! :D


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Review #25, by Penelope Inkwell Eyes Meet

12th September 2015:
Oh, I feel so bad for Alba. To be set back like that after all the hard work she's put in! And to be in pain--it must be so miserable and disheartening.

I feel bad for James, too. It's not fair of her to blame him or to take her frustrations out on him. After all, he was right--if she had just healed herself, it would have been a problem, or else Nurse Wainscott would have healed her up the easy way. He was just trying to be a good friend. Poor James :(

But then, I do think it's a realistic reaction for Alba to have. Most of us aren't fair when we're discouraged and in pain, and it's easiest to take out our frustrations on the people that we know will still love us.

I was glad to see that Alba does have at least one other friend, and someone who perhaps considers her to be a romantic interest? I can't tell yet if he flirts for fun or if he really means it, but I'm really excited that the character with a disability isn't just being relegated to a romantic backseat, as if you couldn't possibly have a love life and a handicap (a patently ridiculous idea, because of course you can). It seems like a lot of stories, if they feature a disabled person at all, rarely show them as potential romantic interests, and I'm just excited that it's there as a possibility, at least.

Also, I was really glad to see Chandra have a little more depth to her than just being a typical mean girl. She's still not my favorite, but I'm very glad she apologized, and I'm interested to see what you're planning to do with her character.


waiting for the Eagle to pose it’s question.
--in this case, "it's" ought to be "its".

but if James’s expression had been the clue to a crossword, jealously would’ve been her best guess at the answer.
--I think this is probably meant to be "jealousy" rather than "jealously".

The only other thing I noticed was that you had the woman in charge of the hospital wing listed as Nurse Wainscott, rather than Madame Wainscott, which is the typical title for a Hogwarts matron, based on Madame Pomfrey. I didn't even notice it at first--it didn't draw me out of the story or anything--so I don't think there's necessarily a problem with it. It's not a CC so much as my own curiosity. What made you choose to change her title? Does she have different credentials, or a background in Muggle medicine? Is there a backstory there, or did you simply prefer that term?

Another very well-written chapter. Looking forward to more!


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