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Review #1, by maraudertimes I'm Not An Angel

12th September 2014:
Hi! So sorry it took so long! Had some personal things to deal with! But I'm here now!

This. Was. Awesome! I really liked this! Not exactly how I imagined someone might use the quote, but crazily close!

Okay so let's start with Dominique. I love how she isn't the typical vela who is completely and utterly gorgeous, and that the veelaness gives her something else. It sucks that it's the anger management issues, but what can you do.

The little cute quips about her parents make me so happy! Bill and Fleur are such cuties and I'm glad to see their relationship progress as such. Also, Fleur talks like my French grandmother does, so it's really cool to see you really pull in French culture and language/accent in that, especially as her children call her Maman. I call my grandmother MeMe even when I'm speaking to her in English, so it made me feel a little something personally.

The whole Jack thing is a mess and sad and awful and if only it had worked out! He was so sweet! I loved how it was Dom that really set their relationship in motion as it really captured how apprehensive Victoire is about relationships especially with her condition. But he's such a sweetie and maybe you could write a sequel of how they get back together? No? ... Okay...

Needless to say, this was absolutely amazing. I'll try to have the results up soon, and again, I'm sorry for taking so long, but I'd like to just say that I loved this. Thanks so much for participating in my challenge!
Lo :)

Author's Response: Hi! Not a problem at all, I am terrible with getting things done on time.

Oh, thank you so much! And I'm glad to hear that even if this wasn't exactly what you imagined you still enjoyed this!

Thank you! I love Bill and Fleur, they're such a cute couple and I'm so glad you liked my little mentions of them in here! I learn French and I love it with a passion, so although I don't have any French relatives I'm so glad to hear that I got the language and the culture down okay!

Yes, it really is! Jack is like the best human to ever human and I'm just sad that it didn't work out between them, which is not logical because I am the author around here...I think... :P As for sequels, don't go giving me ideas!

Thank you so much for the amazing review, and for the first place in the challenge! ♥

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Review #2, by MadiMalfoy I'm Not An Angel

21st June 2014:
Wow. Just wow. Emily, you never cease to amaze me with your writing skills! I always love your stories and how you're able to put a different twist on usually glossed-over characteristics of the characters.

You've done a fabulous job of characterizing all of the Fleur/Bill clan! The once close, now somewhat strained relationship Dominique and Victoire have is really quite realistic even without the magical elements. I'm glad you didn't have her end up with Teddy--that's a little cliche and wouldn't fit right with the tone of the story.

Your OC muggle Jack! He's so kindhearted and trusting and caring and I wish I had a guy like that!! His blind trust in Victoire to tell him her major secret (magic) in her own time speaks volumes for his character. However, Victoire's distrust in her own self ultimately leads to her decision to leave him for his own safety, and I think that displays just how much she is afraid of her power and that she still has trouble controlling it after so many years.

So really REALLY well done with this, I can't wait to see just how amazing your others are! :)
~MadiMalfoy x

Author's Response: Oh my. Oh my. You're making me blush. ♥ Thank you so much for the amazing compliments!

Yay, I'm so glad that you think so! I've been reading quite a few next-gen stories recently, and seeing Victoire and Dominique as supermodel pretty ALL THE TIME kind of made me wonder what negative effects Veela blood might have and so this story was born. And yeah, I wanted Victoire to end up with someone else for one instead of Teddy, as much as I might love the guy.

I KNOW RIGHT pls tell me where I can find such a lovely guy for myself, haha! But wah, Victoire just doesn't trust herself enough to accept herself and just let it be. I'm really glad that you picked up on her pretty much deathly fear of her own power, because I wasn't sure if that came across enough in the story.

Wah, thank you so much for the lovely review, amazing person!! ♥

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Review #3, by newgenerationlover I'm Not An Angel

8th June 2014:
Hi there! Saw you wrote this for the one quote challenge and thought I would check out my competition ;)

So, I had a mini heart attack at first because of your summary being about why you didn't want to fall in love with a veela and I thought we wrote like the same thing, but then I was pleasantly surprised on your take on the veela gene. I thought you did a great job writing from the POV of Victiore, a person who can't really control her magic. You can kinda draw a parallel with Dumbledore's sister (sorry, having a brain fart at the moment and can't remember her name), but probably with more coherent thoughts.

I liked how you showed her go through all those different methods to try to calm down, but in the end, it was Jack that was the true thing that could calm her dow. I liked how you put the little snippets of her life, like the scene with her teacher, to show us what her life has been like instead of just telling us. You did what my english teacher always tells us students to do, "Show, don't tell!" Kudos to you. I thought your writing was very good and the story lines flowed right into each other. I can tell you spent time figuring that out and it really adds to the story. All in all, great job! You should be proud of this!


Author's Response: Hey, Mary!

Oh, thank you so much, although I'm not sure that I stand a chance against you. ;)

Yes, I had a bit of a scare when you sent your oneshot to me for beta-ing! But we focus on pretty different aspects of Veela behaviour and the Veela gene, so I figured it was still okay to post this. :P I'm so glad you think so, thank you so much! I actually didn't really think of Araina Dumbledore when I was writing thins, but you're definitely right, you can draw a parallel between the two with their out of control magic and their desperate attempts to control it.

Thank you! Yes, I always tell people to show and not tell so I'm really happy that came through in my story or else I'd just kind of be a terrible hypocrite and I desperately don't want that. :P Anyway, tangents. I'm so bad at staying on topic. I'm glad that you liked the different techniques they tried on her (even if they sadly didn't work). I did spend a while worrying about the flow of the story, yes, so I'm really glad that it worked! I don't quite remember now (oops, I'm terrible) but I think that I took a break in the middle of writing it because I had a bit of a block and wasn't sure where to go, so I'm doubly glad that the whole thing still flowed okay, thank you!

Thanks for an amazing review, Mary! :D


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Review #4, by Smile_Beautiful_ I'm Not An Angel

6th June 2014:
That was beautiful! It was a side of Victoire that I have never read before! Well written, as well, great job!

Tori x

Author's Response: Hey there! Thanks so much, I wanted to show how the Veela genes had a negative side to them as well as giving her beauty. I'm glad you liked this, thank you for the sweet review!

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