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Review #1, by maraudertimes My Purpose is to Attract

9th September 2014:
Hi! I am so terribly sorry for taking so long! Real life got, well... real. But I'm here now!

Okay, so first things first, I love James! How could you do this! But immediately after that: I really love this, so don't read on thinking I didn't!

Okay, so I loved how you put a spin on the quote. I always imagined it being someone who would leave, maybe not so willingly, but who knew that people would fall in love with them more easily than she/he/ze would fall in love with others. I have never envisioned someone purposefully breaking others' hearts, but that was one of the reasons this story struck me.

I loved how she went by steps, almost cataloguing responses and (to me at least), very calculating in how she approached situations. It lent a very methodical and almost machine-esque presence to the girl, further exaggerating her absolute disdain for love.

I also really liked how she was a veela, because I don't see all that many stories with veela that are like this. It seems as though she has had her heart broken and is determined to do the same to all men, so maybe a prequel could be awesome (hopes fervently).

The fact that she left him at the alter breaks my heart but really lends to the story so I commend you on doing something so brash and giving your story that much volume. I could never do that to my James (*cuddles character aggressively*)

Anyways, this was a really good story and I liked how you drew inspiration from the quote, especially in this manner. Again, I am so sorry for the terribly long wait!

Lo :)

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Review #2, by Red_headed_juliet My Purpose is to Attract

14th June 2014:
Hello! Here for the BvB. I really wanted to do this challenge, but didn't end up finding the time, so I was really excited to read it!

The narcissism in this piece is just rampant! The whole calculated relationship, like a chess game, reminds me of those secret agents you see on television with fake families. Gah.

And how far she let it go! Picking out a dress, inviting everyone, bridesmaids, best men. Holy cow. That's awful. Talk about bridezilla.

The only question I have is, why didn't they see her, if she could see them? Maybe I just missed it, I don't know.

Overall, very well done. I quite enjoyed your heartbreaker.

Until next time!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I haven't even thought of that connection but you are totally right! Yeaaahhh, she isn't the nicest person to put it nicely. Oh, maybe I didn't describe it well enough but picture an old church with a balcony that usually holds either choirs or ogans or whatever. I pictured her hiding up in one of those, maybe peaking out from behind something or maybe just in the shadows. Eh, its really whatever you imagine :P. Thanks again!
Mary


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Review #3, by Infinityx My Purpose is to Attract

10th June 2014:
Hey Mary! Here for the BvB!

This was an incredibly interesting premise to the story. When I read the first two lines, I kind of guessed that it would end in heartbreak. I thought that either the girl would fall in love but be afraid of commitment that she'd break things off, or she's the type to just go through guys, one per week. I was in for a great surprise when I got to know she was a veela. And not just that! A veela who had her heart broken. Wow.

I love how you've conveyed so much about her character with such few words. It's obvious that she's cold and unfeeling, but the small detail that her heart was broken, put the whole thing in perspective for me. Obviously, she was hurt so much to make her this way. And although what she did was cruel, I can't help but feel sorry for her. She's probably the type to give her all whether she's loving or hurting.

I love the voice for this narrative. It's matter-of-fact, without anything being dragged on. She made herself have a purpose, and she was just carrying it out.

Poor James. That one line about him not being a player conveyed so much about his character. He was a nice guy and didn't deserve to have his heart broken that way. :( I knew it was going to happen, but when it actually did, I was so shocked.

This was such a powerfully sad, yet thrilling one-shot. Great job using the quote to base it on, and good luck with the challenge!

~Erin

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Yes, we don't typically see Veela's with their heart broken, so this was my take on a very disgruntled, revenge seeking, broken hearted, veela. I'm glad you liked it. It was kind of hard writing this, because she is so cold and emotionless. I tried to give a underlying feeling that she maybe feels, but feels to much and it has made her end up here. I'm glad you caught on! You're not the first to comment about that being a good line (it is my favorite as well ;) ). I was so proud of myself when I came up with it. Thanks again!
Mary


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Review #4, by StellaRose My Purpose is to Attract

5th June 2014:
Wow, this is not at all what I was expecting...but in a good way! The choppy narrative works well for this piece and I like how you organized the story within the heartbreaking 'steps'.

I love this different type of villian you portray and how this woman using her beauty as a weapon. I do think the story went well with the quote.

Not one single regret!! Yikes. I would love to know the back story of why she's this way. Did she get her heart broken? Or did she just get sick of men judging her based on just her looks?

GREAT one-shot! I really enjoyed reading it!

--Emmy

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! The choppy narrative went hand in hand with the emotionless protagonist so I am glad you liked it :) Yeah, I'm pretty sure the quote was not supposed to be meant that way but as I read it the idea for this popped into my head and I knew I just had to do it. Yeah, I tried to hint at the reason why she is so cold is because she got her heart broken once and now wants everyone else to feel the same way as she does. I may have to go back and make that more clear... :/ Thanks again!
Mary


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Review #5, by water_lily43175 My Purpose is to Attract

5th June 2014:
Hello! Here with your requested review. :)

I really like the premise of this. A Veela who's been heartbroken? That sounds like an almost impossible concept. But, of course, it's not - just because they're beautiful doesn't mean they're flawless. And from what we've seen in the books, a scorned or angry Veela is not someone to get on the wrong side of.

I like how she goes through her steps on how to break a man's heart. Also, I liked this line in particular: "Men always wanted to be the hero so I would be the damsel in distress." But it's all very well written, I could quote half of this if not for fear of regurgitating your fic back to you.

I really like how you made this work with the quote you were given, it fits superbly. And I'm off to find James and unbreak his heart. :) Good stuff!

Author's Response: Thanks for the lovely review! Yes, they are perfect on the outside but not so much on the inside and they are definitely not people to cross ;) I'm glad you like the story. And I know poor James :'(
Thanks again!
Mary


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Review #6, by toomanycurls My Purpose is to Attract

2nd June 2014:
Hi!! I'm here for the BvB

I really like this line: "Men always wanted to be the hero so I would be the damsel in distress." it shows how the character is just a touch manipulative but understands the dymanics around her very well.

I love how she talks through her man-trapping/attracting like it's a process she's done many times over. It presents her as a powerful woman.

this line is also very brilliant: "Though a professional quidditch player, he is not a player with women." it's very succint and informative.

I'm usually cold and hard to get at with this, but i can't believe she's waiting until their wedding day to break his heart. Did he wrong her in some grevious way? I mean, I love heartbreak but I felt she carried it on too long for it to still be a nice heartbreak (if there is such a thing).

Bravo for making me think there's a line to be crossed when crushing someone's heart. :P

You have a remarkable narrative voice in this story. It's crisp and evocative.

-Rose

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the great review! I really liked writing a this story because the protagonist was so different. She is a strong woman, but not typically the kind you see, or want ;) The professional quidditch player line is my favorite so I am glad you liked it too :) I know, the ending was so cold. When I first wrote it, I thought about giving this ending but then I was like "Oh, no, that would be way too harsh," so I gave it a slightly nicer ending (not nice per se but not so devastatingly crushing) but then my beta said that I should make it more soul crushing so I did the wedding thing. So I know how you feel but she did want to break his heart so badly that he would stop believing in love just like she had. Thanks you again so much!
Mary


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