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Review #1, by Lady Asphodel Childhood

1st September 2014:
Hi Jenna!

Please forgive me for the long-awaited review! I never anticipated such a long chapter. Actually, I wasn't well-prepared for coming up with my first challenge. I am truly sorry again! I'll do better next time!

So, here I am. Finally on break from school. I am seizing the chance to give you your review!

So, you really captured my attention with your smooth and poetic description. I can actually picture this baby Hagrid you painted! It's a very adorable imagery of him! The way you wrote the transitioning of Hagrid growing up was absolutely marvelous!

There's so much to love about this story! I mean - yes, I'll keep mentioning the description because it's the sole subject of my challenge. *chuckles & winks* I mean, for me, I am afraid of description... and most of the time, I am afraid of overdoing it... and I've read stories (legitimate novels and fanfiction) where authors do overdo the details. On the other hand, you did it so fantastically. Everything flows. Nothing seems out of place. Additionally, the way you took the time to go through Hagrid's life could have been a novel all on its own. It'd be really awesome if you do!

From being lookedd-down by kids from the churchyard, people of London, and being bullied by students at Hogwarts - particularly the boys from the Gryffindor Domitory - again from the Churchyard [it's already bad enough to try to fit in as a normal person] ... to his mother leaving [ever so depressing; Hagrid's assumptions as to why she left was heartbreaking]... To his estranged grandmother's terrible thoughts of Hagrid... [Shame on her: She's missing out on getting to know an amazing soul]...


Reading Hagrid getting his Hogwarts letter was so awesome! However, it's sad that he had to leave his dad. By the way, I really got to like him. He's a subtle version of Hagrid himself. I loved how he stood up to his own mother for his son. I love how fatherly he is of Hagrid. I just wish his mother would have stayed. It's even more disheartening that he died.


I have to say, I really love how you described Hagrid and his arrival at Hogwarts. The scenery you wrote of the castle made the imagery all the more beautiful!


And the way how you wrote Hagrid meeting Riddle was absolutely on point! I can feel the eeriness and the hidden evil of Tom. Too bad Hagrid couldn't sense it right away because of his loneliness.


Futhermore, I'm gleeful for Hagrid meeting Anne! Why did she have to die?! Another arrow to my heart Jenna! She's an adorable OC! Or is she a real character I didn't know of? Either way! She's really cool! It was very kind of her to bless him and being there for him whenever she could. I love what you did there too *laughs* --- {quote:
"Why, you have a very lovely voice," Anne says solemnly. "I think your voice... your voice is lovely. It sounds like warmth, and something strong - I believe your voice is like warm thunder."/quote} Awesome!


She's definitely right in that area. His voice is like warm thunder. Loud and brave when need be and always know when to strike... yet not evil enough to harm another. (If I said this right.)




In the end, I love how you wrapped it up wit Hagrid having Aragog - even though Tom (sneaky head-self) helped him... Nonetheless, Aragog did make Hagrid happy. All that you wrote here is now my head canon for Hagrid.


In conclusion, I'll say it once more (even though I can say it a million times) - flawless details, phenomenal narration! This could have been a whole novel on its own. Amazing work Jenna!

You will hear from me soon!


- Asphodel

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Review #2, by patronus_charm Childhood

25th May 2014:
I was just about to go read the next chapter of Sevenfold and then I saw this was up, so Iím here instead! Iím going to tackle this section by section so thatís what the numbers refer to :P

1 - I honestly think this is some of your best description yet, Jenna! It was so poetic and beautiful, I felt like I was being lulled to sleep by it or something as it almost had a rhythm to it. Aw, the images of baby Hagrid were adorable too, and I love how he had such a gentle nature which defies all expectations of a baby half giant. Seeing the way Fridwulfa could be a caring mother was so sweet too, as I just sort of blot her out of mind, but she must have been a really interesting character to fall in love with a human.

2 Ė ĎNature is something which has permitted an abomination like yourself to exist within it and you are very aware of thatí omg, this entire section made me want to cry, why do your stories do this to me Jenna? :P Quick question before I go on, but is Olive, Olive Hornby? The second person POV was amazing here as it almost made Hagridís outsider status even more relatable and I could really feel how he felt and it was just sad. Iím just so glad you explored his rawer feelings here because I always imagine him to be more emotionless than anything but this proved it wrong.

Ah, when his mother left it was just too much as it really just reminded me how much Hagrid has had a hard life. His father is really lovely though, you just managed to make his good spirit shine out if that makes sense and he just sounds so warm and accepting. I didnít make much of Hagridís grandmother other than her being one of those usual horrible prejudiced people.

3 Ė I loved it when he went to Diagon Alley as it almost felt as if he belonged there and it was just so lovely. Honestly, second person POV story is amazing here because weíre following Hagridís journey with him as he went there and experienced everything so itís just so amazing and I canít imagine it in any other POV. Ok, I feel as if Iím blabbering but I never thought it would suit Hagrid as well as it does here.

Ah, when he met Tom Riddle, I honestly got the shivers and wanted Hagrid to go and punch him given what Tom does to him later but luckily he left him alone. You really wrote his character so well, and even in the short time he appeared I could feel his sinister air seeping off of him. I adored Anne though, she had lovely Luna like qualities about her and I just want to spend more time with her as sheís so nice.

Ok, I canít even deal with the ending because Hagrid has to deal with too much and itís not fair. First, his father goes and dies and that wants to make me sob in a puddle of my tears from earlier on in the chapter. Even though I knew it would happen, I just desperately wished it wouldnít. Then sweet Anne has to die too, and it was just like the final blow. It was just like, no, donít give anymore angst to Hagrid it would be too unfair. At least we had a sort of happy ending with him finding Aragog.

Ah, this was such an amazing entry, and I think possibly the best thing Iíve read of yours! ♥

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hi Kiana! :)

Wow, I've been sort of saving up this review because it's just so amazing, and thank you so much also for choosing this as one of the winners! I feel like I spent so much time writing it so it was so exciting to finally post the first chapter (this story is one of those neverending ones apparently haha), and it really taught me to love second person. So thank you! ♥

Thank you, I'm so glad you liked the description! The details and poetic language here were so crucial to the story so it's really wonderful to know they stood out in the story. This was part of my attempt to understand Fridwulfa and that whole strange family dynamic in the Hagrids.

Yes, she was meant to be Olive Hornby, though she isn't particularly important to the story she was one of the only canon characters from that era who felt natural to tie in. Aw, poor Hagrid - his own insecurity and sense of not being good enough in the eyes of others was a really crucial part of Hagrid in my opinion, and I wanted to explore how he could go from being insecure and people not liking him to becoming such a wonderful, strong man in the future. I'm glad you thought the second person helped with that as well.

I know! :( His childhood especially was so hard and is going to get harder later. Writing this in second person was such a cool experience since by this point I'd kind of forgotten it was in second person and it felt very visual instead of just me writing it, if that makes sense. Like I felt like I was uncovering a story that already existed instead of just writing it, and somehow second person helps with that. I'll definitely be trying it more in the future. :)

Ah, Tom Riddle is so creepy but Hagrid is quite trusting and since Riddle is nice to him, it makes sense he would continue to idolize him. I was going off the way Riddle approached Hagrid in the flashback scene in CoS, because it felt like there was some familiarity there. I also felt like Riddle would sort of collect people he could use to further himself in the future and Hagrid was sadly a victim of that.

I know! :( I felt so sorry for him writing this, especially his dad as he was quite a lovely character and it felt unfair they were separated so young. I didn't intend to kill Anne so early but it fit because that way Hagrid could be vulnerable for a new friend in Aragog.

Ah, thank you! :) That really means a lot since the experience of writing this was so wonderful. Thank you for the amazing challenge and this beautiful review, Kiana! :)


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