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Review #1, by Veritaserum27 It's over

12th June 2014:
Hi!

Tagging you from review tag!

I think you have a nice start here. I am always impressed when a writer can fill a complete chapter with a small number of words. I am not able to do that! You did a great job with setting the story, relaying the conflict, and adding little details.

The two settings were a nice way to represent the two men in Hermione's life. First she has Ron, who represents safety and warmth. He is shown in their nice, safe flat, cozying up to Hermione in their warm bed. He trusts her implicitly.

The dichotomy is Blaise - whom she meets in a storm. It is raging and passionate and there is an air of confusion about the entire scene. He seems to doubt her intentions and is almost threatening. Very well done.

I don't think I've ever read a Hermione/Blaise story and definitely not a love triangle. This proves to be a very interesting story. I hope you continue it!

Beth (Veritaserum27)

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Review #2, by Lostmyheart It's over

8th June 2014:
Hi there!

I'm so sorry it took me so long to finally review your entry. RL came in the way, and now that my project is finally written and done I can review your entry! (And your requested review for another story)

First of all, thank you so much for entering my challenge! And with a Hermione/Blaise at that! I love that pair.
I really like your plot, and it seems so bittersweet - she's engaged to Ron, but Blaise was the love of her life. Though we didn't really get to see or feel the emotions, as they seemed quite angry at each other - which makes me guess that they didn't end their relationship on very good terms.
I love your plot, it's so great and it would be alot better if maybe you added more to the story - how did their relationship start? Why did it end? Is she happy with Ron or does she still think of her past with Blaise? :)

I enjoyed reading your entry, and I hope you enjoyed writing it!

- Avi

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Review #3, by Sado It's over

2nd June 2014:
Hi!!
What is up with reviewers today? I'm the first one here, too! A great story.Simply brilliant. No other word than that. Oh, I should inform you about you grammar mistakes. I found 2 and they are in the same sentence:
As the wind whipped hr cheek she had to antcipate the moment where they would meet again.
It should be:
As the wind whipped her cheek she had to anticipate the moment where they would meet again.
I wish you success!

9/10(only for grammar)
Sado

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