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36 Reviews Found

Review #1, by CassiePotter Moaning Myrtle

16th January 2016:
Hello! It's been a while, but I'm back for more of your wonderful story!
I really enjoyed this chapter. Rose, Albus, and Kenway really reminded me of Harry, Ron, and Hermione in their early years of Hogwarts, and this whole chapter just made me feel very nostalgic.
I thought it was really interesting that Albus doesn't know much about the Battle of Hogwarts. I can definitely see Harry focusing on the good times he had at school and not talking much about the actual war. It's not something he'd want to relive, and Albus is also only 11, so I'd imagine that Harry is waiting to tell him everything since he's so young.
I wasn't expecting Myrtle to make an appearance! Her characterization was really great. I wonder if her bathroom will be big enough to practice spells in?
I hope that Rose, Albus, and Kenway can learn to protect themselves! And that they get Molly's book without things going too crazy!
Just so you know, there's a new chapter of A Spoonful of Sugar up!
This was a great chapter!
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Hello again! It's great to see you again.

Yes, this chapter was very much like the books. We wanted to add some family conflict to Albus' life because he has a good family; but we imagine Harry wouldn't tell his children the amazing things he did, which we could see as frustrating, especially for Albus since he looks most like Harry. Oh, and Albus is 13 by the way, he's in his third year.

Thank you! Myrtle was difficult to write because she's this odd combination of up-in-your-face and staying-in-background, so it is a relief to hear you liked her. And her bathroom will have to do.

Thanks for keeping up with this! It means a lot!

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Review #2, by CassiePotter The Intruders

3rd September 2015:
Oh my gosh! We got such a nice chapter for Easter and then you jumped right back into the intense stuff! I loved that this started out a little more slowly, with Albus, Rose, and Kenway getting back into the rhythm of classes and things like that. I loved that Albus's toy dragon wanted to go with him to class.
I can't believe that when they went outside to get the dragon there were Dark Knights waiting for them! How did they get onto the Hogwarts grounds undetected? I'm really impressed that Albus, Rose, and Kenway were able to get away relatively unharmed! But it's not good that they escaped. At least Neville got one of their names so they have something to go on!
This was a great chapter, and I'm really glad we got some more progress with the Dark Knights and what they're after! Also, there's a chapter of A Spoonful of Sugar up that I don't know if you've read, so I thought I'd let you know. Great job on this!
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Hi again!

Yup those Potters/Weasleys can sure find trouble, can't they? ;) The thing with the Forbidden Forrest, is it's big and there's lots of crazy stuff in there.

Those kids were fortunate they caught the intruders unprepared. (If I had a nickel for every time Harry managed to get lucky...)

That's your novel that Georgina reviewed, right? We left it on our reading list. :)

Thanks for faithfully reviewing this! :D It really means a lot to us when un-reviewed chapters (or even full stories) finally get reviews!


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Review #3, by CassiePotter The Easter Holidays

22nd August 2015:
This was such a lovely chapter. It was nice to have a chapter of everything being so calm and happy. Albus got to go home and spend time with his family, and they weren't worried about exams or the Dark Knights or anything like that.
I thought the bit with Dom and Dylan was such a good addition to the chapter! I think they had such an interesting dynamic, because Dylan obviously really likes Dom, but Dom is almost afraid to like him back, because she's worried he's only attracted to her veela side. I saw in your Author's Note that you have a story about them, so I might have to check that out after I finish this story!
Great job on this chapter!
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Hello again!

Thank you so much! This was kind of a fluff chapter because we couldn't ignore Easter. So instead we added the Dominique/Dylan to add some more color. Yeah, definitely check that out. Judging by the way you've written A Spoonful of Sugar, I think you'll really like it.

Hope to see you again!

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Review #4, by CassiePotter The Werewolf in the Desk

20th August 2015:
Hello! I'm back for some more of your lovely story!
Before I talk about anything else, I have to say that I love the way you started this chapter. The phrase "winter melted into spring" is just so lovely. It immediately made me picture the seasons changing, and I just thought it was a gorgeous opening to this chapter.
I really enjoyed the DADA lesson! I could definitely see the parallels to Lupin's boggart lesson in POA, but I thought you also did a really nice job making it your own. My heart went out to poor Rose when she saw Bellatrix, but I'm glad Professor Macmillan was able to make her feel better when he talked to her.
We have more developments with the dark wizards! The Dark Mark appearing isn't a good sign, so I hope everyone in Hogsmeade is okay, and that the Dark Knights of Gaunt aren't getting too close to Hogwarts!
This was a great chapter!
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Thanks! :) We're pretty sure Ernie had a similar lesson from Lupin, and admired him as well. The best part about Rose is; she didn't expect it, and neither did the prof. I imagine not everyone knows their true boggart form, or are creative enough to make it funny, especially in a pinch. Poor Rose.

Casting the dark mark in a place full of wizards who remember it is a quick way to cause fear and panic.

We must admit, having so many of these unreviewed chapters get reviewed by you has been absolutely lovely. :) thank you so much!!


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Review #5, by CassiePotter Quidditch Against Hufflepuff

11th August 2015:
I'm sorry it's taken me so long to get back to this story! I missed it!
The Quidditch match was great. I felt bad that they had to play in such awful weather, though. Thankfully Albus caught the snitch pretty quickly. But then he got hit by a bludger! That seems like it would be so, so painful!
I thought it was hilarious that Lucy disguised herself to get Albus out of the hospital wing and then used him to get into the Gryffindor party. It's interesting that professors are keeping an eye on Lily, too. Maybe the dark wizards are closer than Albus and the others know, and the teachers want to keep Lily safe since she has the necklace?
Great job with this chapter!
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Hey, thank you so much for coming back and reviewing it. Yeah, we love writing about Lucy; that scene especially was fun. You'll see about the dark wizards... Just keep reading!

Thanks again for the wonderful review!

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Review #6, by CassiePotter Valentine's Day

24th June 2015:
Hello again!
This was such a great chapter! I loved all the craziness of Valentine's Day. Louis is such a ladies' man! That really made me laugh. Especially when he accidentally asked Lucy to Hogsmeade!
I loved that Ella's mother made cookies for the Potters/Weasleys. Also, Ella just seems really sweet and kind.
Oh my goodness! Destruction in France, an arrest, and a mysterious Dark wizard leading the group behind the attacks! This is getting more intriguing by the minute! I can't wait to find out more about all these new developments.
It was great to get back to this story for a bit! Nice job on this chapter.
Cassie :)

Author's Response: We had the idea to have Louis always be with some girl and when we started writing this we had an idea to have him accidentally ask Lucy so Molly could attack him.

I (Georgina) loved using Ella and I believe I was enjoying some cookies while writing this chapter so--that's how the cookies made it in there.

And the mystery continues on!

Thank you! We look forward to seeing you again!

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Review #7, by CassiePotter The Return to Hogwarts

12th June 2015:
Surprise! I'm back to review more of this story! I was really enjoying it while we were doing the review exchange, so I wanted to keep reading!
I loved getting some more background for Scorpius. I think it's really interesting that the Sorting Hat wanted to place him in Gryffindor first and then Hufflepuff, but he asked to be a Slytherin to appease his family. I think that tells a lot about who he is as a person. I think he and Albus could be good friends, and I loved that he apologized to Rose on behalf of his family, even without knowing what they did to Hermione. He really seems like a nice guy.
I loved the Scamander twins' little cameo! You can really tell that they're Luna's kids. It was also really interesting to read Lysander here since he's so different from my version of the character!
I'll try and get back to this story again soon, but with the house cup going on, it might be a little while before I get back here again. This was a really great chapter!
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Why, hello again!

Yes, that was always our view on Scorpius. We saw him as a kid who was pretty much on his own and instead of thinking the world revolved around him like his father did, he wanted to make friends and to make friends he had to teach himself how to be nice. He's one of those people who wants to make things right.

I know, our view of Lysander was so much different from your story. But we really wanted them to be as airy as Luna so we threw them in here.

That's fine. We accept reviews any time! (who wouldn't?) ;)

Thank you so much for continuing!

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Review #8, by CassiePotter The Deathly Hallows

30th May 2015:
Teddy's back! I love that Albus tried to spy on them with the Invisibility Cloak, but that Harry caught him, because he had tried it so many times himself. I thought it was really sweet that Teddy was asking about his parents, and I loved the way Harry described them to him.
I thought the exploding eclair was hilarious! I can't believe Lily and Roxanne were behind all those pranks! I never would have guessed!
And they know what they Deathly Hallows are now! I wonder if they'll find the wand since they know where two of the three are... It also makes me really nervous for the kids since having the hallows could put them in real danger.
Overall, this was a really nice chapter.
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Yup! Harry really ought to be a pro at that by now; besides being head auror. Harry can really relate to Teddy.

That was a fun scene! I Freda wrote that originally; but it was on Christmas Eve and Lily just conveniently dropped her fork. So it was less obvious. In our Jus Another Picnic we see Lily and Roxanne teaming up to prank their brothers when they were younger, but I suppose they had chosen to forget that. ;) thanks for reviewing!

Yes it's dangerous, which is nothing new, but Hogwarts is safer at least.

Thanks for so many awesome reviews!


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Review #9, by CassiePotter Unexpected Surprises

30th May 2015:
This chapter is definitely my favorite! I feel like I've been saying that a lot, but each one gets better than the last! I really do love a good Christmas chapter, though, and this one was absolutely lovely.
The descriptions of all the presents and the cousins waking each other up at the beginning of the chapter was really great. I loved that Harry and Ginny decided to give Albus the invisibility cloak.
I thought it was great that Harry was doing all the cooking and putting on a show at breakfast!
Then Charlie came! That was a really great surprise! I don't read many stories that include him, so it was great to see him! And he gave Albus a tiny toy dragon! That was great. Again, Albus is being trusted to take care of something more than the other kids. I think it says a lot about his character.
Aw Victoire and Teddy! That's so cute! And I loved the snowball fight and big feast.
The end of this chapter was so intriguing! I want to know what happened at Azkaban! Albus is right, though. It's not a great ending to Christmas day! At least they got in plenty of fun and family time before the bad news!
This was such a great chapter! I'll be back as soon as I can for more!
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Heehee. That's the measure of a good author, always making the story line better as you move along.

Half of those things were Freda's ideas, the other half of them was mine. We're glad we were able to bring them all together into something you enjoyed.

Sorry, the mystery can't slow down just because the school work did for Albus. Don't worry, it'll come to a good enough conclusion.

We look forward to seeing you and your beautiful reviews again!

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Review #10, by CassiePotter Christmas Break

30th May 2015:
This chapter was so fun. I loved the beginning when Rose came into the boys dormitory and told them off for not packing. It was very much like something her mother would do! I also really liked how the boys were all complaining about their sisters. I have a younger brother, so that's definitely something that all boys do, and it felt very realistic to me. The line about Hugo not wanting to wear clothes until he was four really made me laugh!
That was one intense train ride! I feel really bad for Rose, since she's been having bad dreams about Bellatrix. I would be really upset if I found out something so horrible had happened to my mother. But I really liked that Albus and Kenway told her to give Scorpius a chance. From what we've seen of him so far, he seems different from his family, and like Kenway said, I wouldn't be surprised if he had no idea what with his family happened in the past.
Yay Christmas! I'm excited to find out what the surprise is!
This was a great chapter! Definitely one of my favorites!
Cassie :)

Author's Response: That was one of my favorite scenes to write, especially them talking about girls. Since all Freda and I have is our Ginny, we had to use a bit of imagination to create the boys' attitudes.

Yes, this isn't the last you hear of Rose's nightmares.

Thank you again! We really appreciate your kind reviews.

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Review #11, by CassiePotter Tricks and Treats

30th May 2015:
This chapter was brilliant! I loved the Hair-Dye Mints! I think that even though Albus was tricked into eating one, that people could really have fun with those if they chose to eat them. I know I would!
We have an arrest! I'm a bit nervous for Albus since Dunstan is so angry with him. I hope he doesn't do anything to try and get revenge for his dad or something... And if Harry thinks there are multiple people behind the attacks, that means there will be more arrests at some point. Hopefully they find out who's behind this soon!
I'm also wondering why everyone immediately pinned Albus for the prank on James. To me it seems out of character for him. But I also have no clue who actually pulled the prank! I guess only time will tell!
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Hey Freda here again! This chapter was one of my biggest contributions to the novella. (We called it Chapter P for prank since we weren't sure where it would fall because it was written before many of the middle chapters.) It started when I was trying to think of more ways for Dunstan to tease Albus (James and Lily would fight back more) and when I listed tease material ideas, Fred and James came up and from there it nearly wrote itself. Anyways, as you can see everyone else had fun with them; Albus is just easy to prank with that family of his, plus him not being feisty.

Yup theoretically Dunstan gets nastier, but I can't remember if and how much of that we actually showed. :/ I think you can guess that there will be more developments; after all this only the tenth chapter or so.

On Albus; if you know him, you know he's not a prankster. But if you don't, you can assume wrong. But here everything else points to him, and all I'll say now is it wasn't Albus! ;) But also like Rose says James is still underestimating his little sister a bit. Lily is no baby!

Thanks so much for reviewing all these middle chapters! It really means a lot. :D (hufflepuff hug!!)


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Review #12, by CassiePotter Detention

28th May 2015:
Hello again! We got lots of developments in this chapter! Poor Albus seems like he's getting the worst tasks to do during his detentions. Pickling puffer fish eyes seems awful!
Everything with Ella's mother has me so curious! Obviously blood purity has something to do with what's going on, since Muggles are being attacked... And they tattooed her arm with the deathly hallows symbol. That's so intriguing! Is is just Death Eaters who were never sent to Azkaban or something else entirely? You've definitely done a really nice job gradually adding in details about what's happening, because I really want to keep reading to find out more!
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Well, detention is bound to be bad if Stark gets to decide. I'm glad you thought his punishment was horrible (within character).

Yes, the Death Eaters are in Azkaban. Yes, the people killing off the muggles knows about the Deathly Hallows. I'd tell you more, but it would ruin the mystery!

Goodness you've made a lot of reviews recently! They've been delightful!

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Review #13, by CassiePotter The Aftermath

28th May 2015:
I'm glad to see Scorpius back again! He's one of my favorite next gen characters, so I was really excited to get a little more of his personality in this chapter. I thought it was really cool that you characterized him as being different from the rest of Slytherin house. I also liked the way he started to call Ella a mudblood, but stopped himself, because I think that even though it's a little detail, it shows the environment he's grown up in, but that he's trying to be different from them.
I'm surprised that Albus got detention! At least it was for standing up for someone. I think that you can't really blame someone for getting a detention for that.
Another great chapter! I'll be back again as soon as I can!
Cassie :)

Author's Response: We have written Scorpius in a meek but mysterious light, something you don't see too often. You'll find out more about him and his background in a future chapter. I did like including that detail about him correcting himself when he stared calling Ella a mudblood, it does give a bit of insight.

As for Stark and Albus' detention, Stark likes to give detentions. Albus just happened to get some fire at the wrong time.

Yet again, thanks for reviewing!

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Review #14, by CassiePotter Slytherin vs Green

28th May 2015:
Yay, a Quidditch match! I've never written one, but they seem like they'd be hard to write. Yours was very well done! It was exciting and Kenway's commentary was great. I was really surprised how far the Slytherins were willing to go to make sure they won! But I thought it was great that Ella got back on her broom and totally ruined Nott's plans. Onto the next chapter now!
Cassie :)

Author's Response: We have quite a few quidditch matches, particularly in this story. It's refreshing to hear you liked them. The Slytherins not only wanted to win; they wanted to teach the Gryffindors a lesson (specifically Ella, being a muggleborn). But she's a little too quick for them. :)

Thank you so much for this review!

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Review #15, by CassiePotter Hogsmeade

28th May 2015:
I loved this chapter! I liked that we got to see Harry, Ron, Hermione, and Ginny. I thought you wrote them all very well. I want to know what Ron told Rose! I feel really bad for her if it made her that upset. Hopefully no one else has died! But I have a bad feeling that might be the case...
One little thing I noticed- Rose's letter is signed "Love, Hermione," which I thought was a little funny, since Rose calls her parents Mum and Dad, and not Ron and Hermione.
Other than that I thought this was a really great chapter!
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Hi! This is Freda being a ninja and answering one too! Haha! ;) (PS I told Georgina it made more sense for her to answer most of them before.)

You'll find out what he told her in a little if you keep reading! ;)
The "Love Hermione" was definitely an oversight. We got into the habit of calling them by their first names (except when spoken of) way back when because there's all the mums and Mrs. Weasleys etc and we kept changing the POV each chapter.

Yay! Glad you're enjoying it! :) Thanks so much for all the reviews; it's really great that some of these middle chapters are getting reviews! :)


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Review #16, by CassiePotter Knarls and Quidditch

28th May 2015:
So we have some more developments with Harry's appearance at Hogwarts! Dementors attacking people really doesn't sound good. I wonder if it's connected to the Muggle deaths or just a freak coincidence? Something tells me it's not...
You wrote Hagrid so well in this chapter! He's one of those characters that's just so hard to get right because he has such a specific way of talking, but I thought he was spot on in this!
Great job with this chapter!
Cassie :)

Author's Response: That feeling that the Dementer attacks and the murdering of muggles are connected is called author instinct (that's what I call it anyways). Most often you can trust it, but I won't be providing any spoilers.

Freda gets all the credit for Hagrid. I tried to write him in our original draft. And failed. Needless to say, Freda was able to provide the brilliant final Hagrid conversation you can see today.

As always, great to hear from you!

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Review #17, by CassiePotter The First Day of Classes

27th May 2015:
Hello! I'm back with another review for you!
I thought this was a really nice chapter. It had a really nice flow to it, and I liked how you included little details from each class without trying to cram too much in about everything they were learning. I thought it was hilarious that Albus fell asleep on his quill, and James recommended turning it into a pillow!
The chemistry between all the characters is one of the high points of this story, I think. I love the way all the cousins interact. Molly and Lucy were too funny together!
This was another great chapter! You've got me curious since you mentioned Harry going into the Forbidden Forest!
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! There is a certain balance to writing classes, especially when told from the perspective of a non-first year. We appreciate your compliments on the flow and character chemistry. Oh yeah, Lucy and Molly. I may or may not have put a lot of my personality into Lucy in that scene. Merlin was it fun to write!

Again thank you!

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Review #18, by CassiePotter The Sorting

23rd May 2015:
Hello! I'm back again for the next chapter!
I think this was my favorite chapter yet. I loved your Sorting Hat song! I've never attempted to write one myself, because I imagine they'd be pretty hard to come up with, so good job with that!
With every chapter in this story so far, I really like the way you weave in little details. Specifically with this chapter, during the sorting you mentioned different people sitting with their houses and gave little details about them, even if they weren't major characters. It made me feel like I had more of a complete understanding and picture of what was going on during the sorting.
Harry's here! And from his conversation with Lily that Albus eavesdropped on, I don't think his being here is a very good thing. I wonder what he gave her? I would be so scared if I were eleven and had to protect something valuable like that!
Like the last two chapters, this one has me curious about what's to come!
Cassie :)

Author's Response: I give Freda all the credit for that song; anything I did would look like a vampire in comparison. Yes, we tend to give a few more clues every couple chapters to keep the mystery moving despite the hectic Hogwats.

Glad to hear you're enjoying it!

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Review #19, by CassiePotter Candies on the Train

22nd May 2015:
Hello! I'm finally back again for your second chapter!
I really enjoyed this! I liked your introductions of more of Albus's cousins, and thought the little interactions between the family members were really well done. I loved the fact that you made Ginny's dialogue similar to Mrs. Weasley's in Sorcerer's Stone. That detail was a nice touch to the chapter and it really made me smile.
I also enjoyed the fact that Scorpius Malfoy came into the story! He's one of my favorite next gen characters, so I was really curious to see how you wrote him! I honestly felt bad for him when James and Fred tricked him into eating the taffy. I was glad that Albus took pity on him and got his brother to give him the antidote. I'm wondering if he and Scorpius will bump into each other again, or if Scorpius will play a larger role later in the story.
And we have some developments with the mysterious dark wizards! I can't wait to find out more about them!
This was a really great second chapter. I'll get to the next one as soon as I can!
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Yeah, this is the chapter where we kind of throw just about everyone at you. We did enjoy writing Ginny as a mother, especially the similarities between her and Mrs. Weasley. You'll see Scorpius in later chapters, you'll see. Our take on him isn't exactly tradition.

Thanks for the review!

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Review #20, by CassiePotter Parchment, Quills, and Symbols

17th May 2015:
Hello! I'm here for our review exchange!
I thought this was a great first chapter. I liked how you introduced each member of the Potter family, and gave us a glimpse of each of their personalities. I loved that the three kids were trying to be sneaky and use extendable ears!
I'm really curious about who cast the Dark Mark! Is it Death Eaters or a new dark wizard trying to rise to power? You've definitely got me intrigued!
Great job with this chapter! I'll be back for more soon!
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Now we've both reviewed the required amount (that doesn't mean we'll stop). Anyway, thanks for this review, this was the first fanfiction we ever wrote (it took quite a bit of editing before we posted it, after we wrote some short stories). We're glad to hear you're intrigued; that's the point of a first chapter isn't it? You'll meet the culprit later, just keep reading.

Thank you so much for stopping by!

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Review #21, by Pheonix Potioneer Justice Where Justice is Due

16th January 2015:
Right... so... I started reading this because of the Hufflepuff Hot Seat Review... and I got a little carried away... Well, that's a good thing for you guys! It means I liked it.

It's awesome that you guys wrote this starting at Albus's third year- most people start at Albus's first year and do it Harry Potter-style feedback.

Speaking of which, are you doing a sequel? Sombremaitre is still out there.

If I have one complaint, it's that I have to use copy and paste each time I write Sombremaitre. Couldn't you have made it an easier name? But it is a really cool name, so I suppose that makes up for it.

I read the little Ella Green story after I finished this- I find it great that they ended up together. I actually was thinking about her maybe being a good match for Albus before I found out it actually happened. Great job! She's a lovely girl.

I'm glad Albus and Scorpius are on friendly terms- and Harry's and Draco's reactions are golden. Just golden.

This has disappointedly low reviews! Hmm. I thought it would have more. It's too good.

I love the idea of the resurrection stone as part of Lily's necklace. That is just so, so awesome and clever.

The duel was pretty epic. Just saying.

And Dunstan is a jerk.

Wonderful, wonderful story!

Author's Response: Yay, it keep you reading! With the minimal reviews I assumed it wasn't all that interesting.

We wanted to make sure the whole Weasley clan was there, including Lily and Hugo.

We do not plan to do a sequel due to lack of time (and ideas), but we do mention what happened to Sombremaitre in the second chapter of Give It a Go.

Sombremaitre is French for DarkMaster, like Voldemort is French for FlyOverDeath.

Excellent, you saw them as a perfect couple. Albus and Ella are so adorable and their first date is also featured in the second chapter of Give It a Go if you want to see more of them. (we also wouldn't mind a few reviews on her story if you had time)

Good, you liked them. We certainly didn't want them to be best friends (that idea is so overused) but our Albus and Scorpius would get along, so we make sure they did. As for their fathers, at least we don't ship Scorpius/Rose.

Aw! You are so kind! If you really think it was that good could you please recommend it? We're kind of overlooked.

Yay, you didn't think it was unrealistically dangerous! That was something we feared would lose readers.

Epicness is our middle name. Not really, I've just always wanted to say that.


Thank you ever so much for your review! Make my day!

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Review #22, by johnc Justice Where Justice is Due

12th December 2014:
itsjust it left off without ending really. so must
left untold

Author's Response: First off, forgive me if I am misunderstanding you.

If you are referring to the fact that most of the intruders are not captured, then yes it did not technically end. In other words, some things were purposefully left untold. (Only so much can happen in one year!) This is because Albus' story continues even though this novella ends. Most importantly, in real life, there are lots of villains running amuck in the world, and no all of them are caught ever. It becomes cliche for everyone to be caught by the end of the story (like in Nancy Drew or Scooby Doo or a number of other series) and that's not realistic, so we tried to reflect that.

When we wrote the novella, we based it off of the original series; specifically the earlier years at Hogwarts. And you may notice that those books do not tie up all their loose ends at the end of each book. It may seem like less ends are tied here because the readers know the background of the deathly hallows; Albus didn't.

However you do bring up a fair point, I suppose our novella does not come off quite as conclusive as we thought it does, especially with the Dark Knights of Gaunt. (The story of various relationships between the characters in later years is expanded upon in some of our other stories.) However, to do justice to the extended story of the Dark Knights, we would need another novella, and we don't have to time to commit to that just yet.

At some point we do hope to edit this story, especially the first two chapters, and we might consider trying to make the ending a little more conclusive. However we still won't have all the intruders captured or anything at the end, because some of the loose ends should be left untied. In other words, it wouldn't make sense to have a whole movement of "new Death Eaters" swell and rise up, only to be crushed at the end of the year by a bunch of kids and maybe a couple teachers. So I don't think we'll change that, but we may consider trying to make it a bit more conclusive despite that.

Thank you for your feedback.

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Review #23, by jcon Justice Where Justice is Due

4th December 2014:
is there going to be a book after this one.

Author's Response: Sorry, but we have no plans to write another full novel/novella with Albus and the cousins. :/ But we have a few short stories about these next gen a couple years later, and we may write more of those. But we're really glad you enjoyed it enough to want a sequel! :D

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Review #24, by MargaretLane Knarls and Quidditch

15th September 2014:
LOVE your portrayal of Natalie Zane. I've gotten a feel for her character already in just a couple of lines.

And aw, I like your portrayal of Lily too. She's so enthusiastic.

*laughs* Hagrid is always a good person to go to if you want some information. He tends to let stuff slip.

And that part where he says he can't use Voldemort's name because of "force of habit" made me laugh. I think you've kept him really in character here and he is a hard character to write, in my opinion, so I'm impressed.

I'm also getting intrigued by the whole Dementor attacks part.

Author's Response: I (Georgina) really liked the name Natalia and wanted to use it in the story, so Freda said she could be a minor character. We mention her a few more times in the novella.

We envisioned Lily as the kind of person who would always has a child-like wonderment. We're glad you like her.

Poor guy. He means well.

I cannot take much credit for Hagrid; Freda usually wrote the sections with him in it, and I'm happy to hear you agree she did a brilliant job of it.

Yay! Intrigued readers are faithful readers.

It's great to hear more feedback from you.

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Review #25, by MargaretLane The First Day of Classes

6th September 2014:
*laughs* Yeah, I wouldn't have expected Rose and Albus to sign up for Divination, especially when the norm seems to be to take two classes out of five. That's hardly be one of their first two choices. Not with Trelawney teaching it anyway.

Well, that was silly, doing that Transformation in Transfiguration. Who teaches Transfiguration in this anyway? I suppose I should check back to see.

I like the part where Rose beams with pride to hear Hugo has earned his house points.

It's interesting to see how different people portray various characters. Lucy seems quite different in this than in my story. *laughs* And Fred is much older.

Author's Response: We have Rose taking three total, and Kenway is the only one of the three taking Divination.

Our Transfiguration teacher is Professor Brocklehurste, the Head of Ravenclaw and Deputy Headmistress.

That was all Freda's idea.

I love love love Lucy's witty character. We wanted Fred to be a prankster like James, so we put them in the same year.

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