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Review #1, by marauderfan Rise and Shine

21st July 2014:
Hi Madi! I'm here with your requested review!

All right, I'm going to start this of with a big AWWW ♥ ♡ ♥ This was adorable. As much as I love the canon Neville/Hannah and Luna/Rolf, there is something really cute about Neville/Luna and before JKR said anything to the contrary, I totally shipped these two :D

For a short fic, you really got the fluffy, cheerful mood across very well. Everything about this fic is happy, both with romantic relationships and friendships, the latter of which we know is particularly important to Luna so I loved that you included that scene with Harry :)

I loved the way you wrote Harry! Especially the fact that he let Luna put an anti-Nargle charm on his house just because she thought it was important (though I doubt Harry is that worried about Nargles, of course.) It's exactly the sort of thing Harry would do to be a good friend and not push Luna's feelings aside.

I also thought it was really quirky and appropriately Luna-ish for her to wake Neville up with balloons and confetti :D The thing that stuck out to me about Luna in this, though, was her dialogue, and that's where I'd like to suggest some CC. Luna is a rather tricky character to write because she's such an interesting balance of dreamy and direct, and I mostly got the 'direct' vibe from her in this story - she seemed a bit more focused than JKR wrote her. Here's what I mean:

“Come on darling, we have loads of work to do today. We’ve got our anniversary to plan for, your birthday party to plan, we have to stop at your mother’s (which will take at least three hours), and we need to fix that wall and plant the garden, and get the cat more food and litter...” -- Luna is listing plans and things that need to get done, in a way that makes her almost sound a bit like Hermione - very goal focused.

What I suggest (this is what I do when I write Luna) : If you haven't done this already - when you write Luna, try to hear her voice saying her lines in your head. That way if anything doesn't quite sound like her, it will stand out more and you'll notice. So yeah, I think a little touching-up on Luna's dialogue could help the story out a lot to make Luna seem more Luna-ish (there's really no other word to describe it haha), but otherwise this was a lovely fic!

I hope that helps! Thanks for requesting this story, I have a big smile on my face now after reading such happy fluff :D

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Review #2, by AdinaPuff Rise and Shine

20th July 2014:
Hi, here with you requested review! Thanks for being the first ever! :)

Might I say, this was an extremely adorable story. I loved how light the atmosphere was. I've never read a fanfiction quite so laid back and fun--it was marvelous! I loved the light air.

You wrote Luna quite well. The confetti, the happiness, and the talking Harry's ear off was all her on the dot. Neville was very well written as well. I particularly loved when Harry asked if Neville was still asleep, and Luna said that he should be down soon as long as he doesn't get distracted by his plants. That was perfect, honestly. It put a smile on my face. I loved the small talk, and Harry dropping by and talking about his growing family! Awe, baby James! So sweet!

All in all, this was quite perfect. Congratulations on placing in the challenge this was written for! It most definitely was worthy of doing so. What an adorable piece. Thanks so much for having me read this! It put a smile on my face :)

-Leigh

Author's Response: Aw thank you so much for the kind review!! You're off to a great start. :)

I'm glad you enjoyed my characterizations and felt they were spot-on! I was worried somewhat about Luna because I haven't written a whole lot with her (really only just a scene or two in my Dramione novel) so she was harder for me to write than Harry and Neville.

I feel happy to know that I made you happy for reading this! And thank you for such a quick turn-around time! I wish I could do that, but real life just gets in the way. I'll come back soon :)
~MadiMalfoy x


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Review #3, by Freda_and_Georgina Rise and Shine

19th May 2014:
Hello-
I usually don't read fluff-romance, but this one was cute. It was rather short, but it works well with the challenge's quote prompt. I wish it was longer!
--Freda

Author's Response: Well I'm with you on that one--I don't typically write or read it either! I decided to try it out for a change for this challenge. :) I do also wish I had written more but maybe I'll write another scene for it sometime in the future and add on to it. Who knows! Thanks for the review :)
~MadiMalfoy x


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