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Review #1, by notreallyblonde44 Thestrals

5th October 2015:
Nooo! Not ickle James.

Wait, wait, wait, about half way through, (SPOILERS FOR THOSE PEOPLE LIKE MYSELF THAT SOMETIMES READ REVIEWS FIRST) Iím sitting here thinking Harry is dead. James saw him die. Thatís why itís cold and everyone is a mess. AND. Iím right. Is Harry haunting them? Eek such a strange ordeal and so very sad :(

Your writing was really smooth, flowing very naturally, even with the second person, which is insanely difficult for me, so mad props to you! Hope you did well in the challenge because this was enjoyable (thought thatís not the right word for something so sad, but you know what I mean right? Ha).

Yeah, you captured the moment and scene well. Iím fascinated with after life possibilities and that this was great, a little Sixth Sense like, but still original in the fanfic landscape (esp with the added dimension of seeing Thestrals, which is so poignant for Harry) and the selection of Harry as the reader is cool here. Weíre so used to reading from Harryís third person POV, but this in entirely different. Seems to make sense to such a POV when heís passed away.

Another great one-shot!

xx Ellie

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Review #2, by Luna Lovegood Thestrals

25th January 2015:

Lostmyheart is an odd choice of name. Do you know where you left it? I hear that the new head of the Auror department, Gawain Robards, is actually a Mongolian Morgul, a shape shifter that collects human hearts...there's an article about it in this month's Quibbler. Maybe he has it?

It made me sad to realise what happened to Harry, he was a good friend of mine. Sadder that he didn't realise he had passed away, I hope he finds his way beyond the veil soon.

I remember a long time ago when Harry was scared of the Thestrals, there's a sad irony in James being frightened too. I don't think they're scary at all, I think it's nice to be reminded of our lost loved ones.

I think I'll ask Daddy if we can put this story in the next Quibbler edition. Though he does have an important article about Dabberblimp sightings in the works...

Author's Response: Hello Luna! *cough* Dee *cough*

Or that's who I assume you are in real life.

Hehe, yes. It is an odd choice of name but don't worry, I got one of my friend's heart instead (inside joke).
But I'll try to see if this shape shifter has it, then my friend can have her heart back. I think she misses it.

Yes, it's sad that Harry is dead in this but he'll finally join his family and friends on the other side.

I like your positivity, Luna. I really do.

Thank you so much for stopping by! And say hi to your dad from me.

- Avi

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Review #3, by sophie Thestrals

19th October 2014:
So very beautifully written! Heartbreaking xx

Author's Response: Hi Sophie! Thank you so much. I'm so glad to hear you thought it was beautiful.
Sorry I broke your heart.
- Lostmyheart

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Review #4, by TidalDragon Thestrals

6th July 2014:

So this was a wonderful one-shot! The feel of it reminded me of a movie I saw once where the main character had a psychotic break. Obviously that's not what happened here, but I think you did a great job of developing a similar eerie feeling right from the beginning.

The hinted descriptions straight from the top were really well done - between the small changes to the room, to the heaviness of the air - looking back even the length of time that Harry had supposedly slept. The clues were there all along and though I thought I had it the minute you mentioned an incurable heart condition, something about your writing just made me want to keep reading more to confirm it.

The confirmation was excellent as well. It kind of reminded me of another movie actually with a creepy ending where it is revealed the main characters are dead, so you've gotten me to compare your brief story to two movies that were released in theaters just in terms of the wonderful job you did with the feeling and reveal!

Needless to say, I thought the story was very well done! Thanks for sharing!

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Author's Response: Hi again!

I'm so glad you enjoyed reading it :) It is rather short, but I somehow really wanted to squeeze it into 500 words, but that never happened.
It's kind of inspired by the movie Sixth Sense, maybe a little too much.

Ah yes, you found the details! I seriously loved writing them, almost giggling, because I knew there was a possibility that the reader would miss them and continue reading.

Ah yes, that's the movie I mentioned ealier. Sixth Sense. Great movie!

I'm so glad you liked this story, and thank you for your review.

- Avi

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Review #5, by ATLpaintingflowers Thestrals

14th June 2014:
I only have three words for this. Oh. My. God. At first I was a little confused as to what was going on, but then when i finished it all made sense. How Ginny shivered when Harry touched her, how Harry was confused about the time with James. And then it clicked. I feel like Harry is the definition of a tortured soul in this, unable to pass on. This would make very interesting material for possible future sequels, maybe something from James point of view and how Harry's passing affected him. Anyway, this one shot was beautifully written and I really enjoyed it.

Author's Response: Hi there! :)

Aw you're so sweet! I'm so glad you liked this story. It is a little confusing in the beginning I believe, you can't really know what the point with the story is, haha :b
Thank you for your review! Even though it was from review tag ;)

- Avi

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Review #6, by caapotter Thestrals

30th May 2014:
My heart ached.
Very good writing. Congrats

Author's Response: Hi! :)

Ugh, so sorry I made you heart ache *hands you chocolate*
I'm glad you liked my story, and thank you so much for reviewing :)

- Lostmyheart

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Review #7, by marauderfan Thestrals

19th May 2014:

What a cool story! And awesome plot twist, I did not see it coming, though now when I look back at it all the signs were there. I love stories like that. But it's all there - like the room looking different, James saying he misses Harry, and Ginny being cold when he touched her, or her crying for days about "bad news" which I'm guessing was when he died just he didn't realise it yet! The conversation HArry has with James is so eerie because you can tell something's clearly wrong, but it's not obvious yet, there's just this weird feeling. Despite Harry being a ghost it's really a sweet scene, and I love that he's trying to protect James and.. aw. it's really cute, and so sad!!!

I like the effect the second person pov had too. It has always seemed like a more detached POV and so it makes perfect sense that it would be used with a ghost, it works so well to create this eerie effect.

Wonderful story! :)

Author's Response: Hi!

I was so surprised to see you review one of my stories :D I don't know why, hehe.
I'm so glad you liked my story! Yes, you're right - all the signs were there :) I was a little afraid that maybe they weren't obvious enough, so I'm glad you mention them! The way the room looked like was of course the first one, and all the other clues you mention :)
I really did try to keep it sweet, despite the fact that he... well... isn't alive anymore.

I'm so glad you think the Second POV worked for the plot! I intended to write it differently, but then I saw Kiana's challenge and thought that I could try writing it like that :)

Thank you so much for your review! I enjoyed reading it :)

- Avi

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Review #8, by Smile_Beautiful_ Thestrals

18th May 2014:
I really liked your story and how you set it up! My only issue is that it reminded me a lot of the movie "Sixth Sense," especially the part where Ginny is holding the wedding photograph! So, I picked it up quickly what your ending would be, but that isn't a bad thing!

The part with James is so heart breaking, and you capture it well! Over all, great job!!

Tori x

Author's Response: Hi Tori!

I'm so glad you liked it :)
Well, it was inspired by Sixth Sense, but it's been years since I watched the movie and I only remember the plottwist at the end, and not the part you mention with Ginny :) That was something I made up myself.

Thank you so much for your kind words! And for your wonderful review.

- Avi

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Review #9, by patronus_charm Thestrals

3rd May 2014:
Hi Avi, thanks for entering the challenge as this entry is amazing!

You really did lull me into security at the start, because I honestly had no clue that Harry was you knowÖ (I donít want to ruin it for others by saying :P). You set the scene so well with some really lovely descriptions so I could imagine the Potters house so well, with the way Harry loved and knew Ginny so well he could note the differences in how she slept and it was just so sweet and written so well.

Iím rather slow with these things, so even when Harry stated thinking about the heart disease I still didnít figure what had happened. Another note on Harry while weíre on him, I really enjoyed the characterisation here. It was just so heartfelt and real, and I think you did a great job of showing an older version of himself which is something a lot of people struggle with so you should feel proud of yourself. I really enjoyed the use of second person POV too, and thought it went with the story so well and I really couldnít imagine it another POV as it just wouldnít have the same amount of impact that way round.

The scene with James was so heart-breaking I donít even know what to say. I canít even decide who Iím more sad for Harry with realising his dead at the end of it, or James having to live without his dad and seeing thestrals. I thought you wrote the closing scenes so well, as the tension and suspense was built up brilliantly. It was just such a big twist, as we so rarely get a story which has the main character as the ghost so I really loved it as it made it so original.

The way you ended with just you was really great because they had been sort of arguing away and then there was that one powerful word which silenced everything and made Harry and the reader really realise what had happened and it really gave me the chills. I thought this was a fantastic story as it was so unexpected and heart-breaking and thanks for such a great entry!


Author's Response: Hi Kiana!

It was such an interesting challenge, I just couldn't skip it. I loved writing this entry :)

It's funny that you didn't figure it out right away, I was so sure that I made it too clear :) Which I'm quite happy about, because that was the point, really. That you shouldn't notice right away, but later on it all made sense.

I'm so happy you like my older version of Harry. You're right, it is quite difficult to nail his character, so it means a lot to me that you thought I did it well :)

To be quite honest, the scene with James made me sad. Hehe, sad by my own writing... I think I'm too emotional. But yeah, it is heartbreaking.
As you probably know by now, I love plottwists. I love to surprise my readers and to get surprised myself (when reading other stories) so the ending was of course one of those lovely plottwists. That one word was quite powerful, in my opinion. And you finally realise what's been going on the entire time.

I'm so glad you liked my entry :) It really means a lot to me.

- Avi

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Review #10, by Chazzie Thestrals

2nd May 2014:
That was heartbreaking. Truly, I never usually read second-person stories because they suck you in and tell you exactly what to feel. It's like someone is narrating your life to you, rather than theirs. Poor Potters. It was a really good story, thank you for posting it.

Author's Response: Hi Chazzie! :)

Yes, it really is a heartbreaking story, which was exactly what I was going for.
Thank you for reviewing! :)

- Lostmyheart

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