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Review #1, by DMsSlytherinPrincess Bogart

28th July 2014:
Hi!! For our July review exchange.

This deserves a 10/10, absolutely amazing.
It really captivated me so quickly, by the second paragraph and by the third, after, "Not knowing who I am" I was a bit teary eyed and was completely chilled to the bone as I continued reading. I felt the emotions, his sadness. I loved the way it began and how it was told in his POV. The way you explained how it happened and what happened after in two short paragraphs was absolutely amazing, short yet great.
The ending was also good.
him being fear and her being Hope, Chips at the stone, was my favorite. I also loved how he refereed to her as my girl and the tiny parts about the ones she mentioned but passed away, you slipped those in perfectly. I really loved it.

Author's Response: Hi! Aww, thank you very much! This was written for a challenge where I was given a title, a paring and a rating to use how I liked, so long as it was a one shot. I'm glad it worked out okay. I really enjoyed writing it, so I'm glad you enjoyed reading it!
Lottie


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Review #2, by True Author Bogart

14th July 2014:
Hi there! Here with the challenge review! :D

I know I've posted the results nearly a month ago and this review is too late, but I've been unable to give HPFF as much time as I wanted to. Real life is currently very hectic. I hope you understand!

The best thing about this story was it's originality. The title and the ship don't go easily with each other, so it was a tough job to write a story combining them. But I was very very impressed. This was such a brilliant idea! Hats off for the extremely clever plot! The title fit everything perfectly. Great job!

Draco's characterization must have been the tricky part. I can certainly feel how hard that must have been. His feelings are so complicated and dark at the moment that they are like mess in his head. He loves Hermione so much that seeing her like this hurts. But he still continues to be there, that was so sweet of him! And seriously, Hermione not knowing who he is and waking up screaming because he's in her bed? That sounds too horrible!

The only suggestion I would make is to add a little more descriptions and make it a little longer. I think that would be very effective. It will help you add even more feeling to the whole idea and it will most surely make the reader cry.

Otherwise, this was a beautiful story. Great job!

Thanks for participating and congrats on winning the second place! You totally deserved it! :D

Ashwini

Author's Response: Hi Ashwini! I totally get that real life comes before everything else and I have no problem with that. (I just thought you night have forgotten, that was all!)
Thank you very much for your lovely review. I'm glad you enjoyed reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it. I had a lot of fun with this challenge, so thank you! I've been going over bits and pieces to try and improve, so hopefully that will be up soon. I appreciate your feedback and will try to extend it some more. And add more descriptions! Aww, thank you very much!
Lottie


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Review #3, by DracoFerret11 Bogart

10th July 2014:
Hello there! This is DarkRose from the forums here to review for you for the House Cup 2014! :D So, let's go over things:

Plot: This was so sad and moving. I'd never read anything quite like it, and I really liked it. The idea of Hermione suffering from amnesia is so interesting and unique. And the way Draco handles it is so sad. I almost thought of "The Notebook" throughout this. Either way, you did a great job creating a different and well-written story.

Characterization & Emotions: I think you did a lovely job writing for Draco. His Bogart is so realistic. I would be terrified of being forgotten by the people I love too. That's awful. And his emotions really came out through this writing. I could sense his sadness and disappointment in what had happened, and his depression and harmful thoughts towards the end were really powerful. Great job with showing everything he's feeling without overwhelming readers.

Descriptions: I didn't get many details about the settings or characters (i.e. how things looked, sounded, smelled, felt, etc.), but I actually didn't mind. I think the emotions were what mattered here, and those worked well for me. So, overall, this category went well!

I think what struck me the most about this story was just how sad it made me feel. Your ability to grasp the tragedy of semi-permanent amnesia and show how it affected the people around Hermione was lovely. I really felt for Draco by the end of it. Really good job.

Good luck to Slytherin in the House Cup!

--Emily (House Cup 2014 Review)

Author's Response: Hi again! I feel very privileged to have received two amazing reviews from you. I've never seen 'the Notebook' but I shall note it down to watch, as you have piqued my interest. I'm very thankful for your comments, they are truly lovely. I don't always put enough emotions into my writing (as you picked up in Encounter) so it's nice to know this story was an improvement in that area, even if lacking slightly in detail. Thank you very much for reviewing Emily, it's great to know what you thought :)
Lottie


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Review #4, by Chrissy Bogart

30th April 2014:
This was very heartbreaking but it was written beautifully!! It would be amazing if you could make a full story out of this :-)

Author's Response: Hi Chrissy!
Aw thank you! Stunned has suggested a prequel so I'm mulling it over at the moment. Thank you for reviewing :)
Chazzie


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Review #5, by Stunned Bogart

30th April 2014:
Beautiful.
I would love a prequel one-shot about them before the accident. Loved the one-shot though, really thought provoking.
Stunned x

Author's Response: Hello Stunned :)
Thank you, I really appreciate that! For you, I will try but I can't promise anything. Thank you for leaving a review, you made me smile
Chazzie


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