Reading Reviews for Fortress: An Anatomy
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Review #1, by Roisin The birth, life, and death of stone

2nd August 2014:

This is beautiful.

After reading the first few paragraphs, I ended up going back and reading them out loud, just for the joy of hearing it. It reads almost as a prose poem. The language dazzles.

This story is a great example of the title perfectly capturing what it is--I've said it before, but your prose is so visceral.

"These are the days of its infancy."--I actually teared up at that.

And the story was smart, and heartbreaking, and cruel. How Grindelwald created this thing, his child, without understanding or properly nurturing the thing that he'd brought to life. How that mistake ended up creating his own tomb.

And the cruelty--that Nurmengard is a concentration camp, sated by its prisoners. That its master twisted its existence into something so terrible, and it's, like, a BUILDING, so it doesn't know any better. This could almost be read like an allegory for bad parenting--except it's a lot more.

I know it's silly to say that this story was like magical realism, considering it's HPFF, and therefore *literal magic*--but it WAS.

All in all, this was an amazingly imaginative, and genuinely inspiring thing to read.

And if you haven't noticed, I'm basically just in love with everything you've written, and going through your back catalog.

Fangirl out,

Author's Response: OMG


I don't know if there's anything more flattering than this!? THANK YOU ♥

I did have a bit of fun with the descriptive prose in this one; this is probably one of my more descriptive stories. :) The fact that you read it aloud made me smile quite a bit; I always read things aloud! Because I love hearing the sounds of words, which I suppose is one of the factors that shape my choice of words.

Grindelwald creating a sentient fortress bahaha! I never thought I would actually write a fic from the POV of a building, but ah well. Some story ideas just plague you for months. Gellert never in deed understood the extent of his creation; he's quite unsentimental and indifferent to the Fortress. And you're right, he did twist it into something awful and terrible. I'm imagining that the Fortress could have turned out into a...a..more...benevolent building (if you can describe a building as such). Like perhaps how I imagine the Hogwarts castle to be, if castles can be sentient.

I laughed at the allegory of bad parenting bit! Yep, Grindelwald will make a terrible parent. It's a lucky thing that he doesn't have any children in canon. Or at least, it's not stated.

I absolutely /love/ magical realism! And I'm over the moon that you think this story fits that genre!

THANK YOU SO MUCH ONCE AGAIN. ♥ All your reviews are muchly muchly appreciated!


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Review #2, by academica The birth, life, and death of stone

9th May 2014:
Hi teh, I'm here with your requested review :)

This is definitely an unorthodox point of view, but I got into it after a while, mostly after I identified who the characters in the story were. I liked the different facets of personality demonstrated by the fortress, first a sort of childlike admiration of Gellert, then a sense of wanting to defend him, and then a loving embrace and self-sacrifice at his death. It was also interested to observe the two intruders from the fortress's point of view. I think you had a gorgeous way of personifying the building; your imagery throughout was my favorite part of the piece (e.g., the way the building fed on the prisoners).

I think the pacing is okay. I read it at sort of a medium pace throughout, though there were obviously more intense moments of confrontation. It would have been interesting--and perhaps more intense--to take the point of view of the wand, but I liked how you were able to take it all the way to the end of Gellert by not doing that.

I liked the characters, too. I thought you did a good job of using context clues instead of stating outright who was who, and you got the defining features of their personalities down well (e.g., Dumbledore's sort of sad, but knowing resignation). I took more of an interest in the interactions between characters than I normally do in stories featuring them, so that's good. It was interesting to watch all of that play out from the perspective of the fortress.

I really liked the mood here, though I'm not quite sure about how to characterize it, and it was nice to see the different phases of the fortress's existence and Gellert's "reign" play out in parallel. Really nice job with this one! I would definitely recommend it to others.

Hope this review is helpful. Thanks for requesting!


Author's Response: Hello Amanda! Thank you so much for coming by to read and leave such an incredibly helpful review! I know how busy you are, and I really appreciate you doing this - fulfilling my request before closing your thread. Thanks again! And I'm sorry it's taken me quite a few days to respond.

I'm glad you managed to get used to the oddness of the perspective of the story; I hope it didn't take too long! That was one of the things I was quite concerned about. I'm so glad you noticed all the shifting facets of the fortress' 'personality'; it's always so weird when I think about it, that this is a building and all. And gah, thanks for your lovely compliment on the imagery. That was so fun to write.

Glad the pacing worked out okay. And yeah, the Wand would have been interesting, though I'm not sure how I could fit two different perspectives into this story. And it's great to hear that you took interest in the character interactions. I like writing character interactions the best, and it was interesting portraying Dumbledore and Grindelwald through an outsider's POV.

This review has been absolutely helpful! Thank you so much, Amanda! ♥


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Review #3, by Veritaserum27 The birth, life, and death of stone

3rd May 2014:
Hi teh!

Here for review tag!

Wow! This was really, really well written. Kudos on such an original idea! I don't think it was stupid or weird. It was captivating. I could see how the concept would be mishandled by a novice writer, but not you.

Your description was beautiful and moving. I actually found myself caring about a prison!! I felt bad for it and was almost rooting for Grindelwald to win the battle with Dumbledore! The was you showed how Nurmengard cared for his master until the end was touching.

The little details you provided along the way were what made this story great. For example, the way that Nurmengard was born, the way he passed along the newspaper about the coming of Dumbledore , and the "green globes" of bitter fruit that grew on the vines were my favorites.

Fantastic story!


Author's Response: Hi Beth!

Thanks so much for stopping by and reading and reviewing my newest story! It's one that I wasn't sure about when posting, and you comments have been absolutely lovely, so thank you. ♥ I'm so pleased to hear that you thought it original.

Gah, glad you like descriptions. And I'm surprised to hear that you were rooting for Grindelwald! Wow, that usually doesn't happen!

All the details were so fun to write! Some of them were last minute additions, just to take up more space and pad things up a little - whoops, sounds like it didn't plan this too well... :P The strange fruit and plants were definitely not part of the original plan I had for this story.

Thanks so much for such a wonderful review, Beth! :D


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Review #4, by marauderfan The birth, life, and death of stone

3rd May 2014:
1. I can't recall ever having read something from the POV of a building before.
2. This story (especially the beginning) is incredibly creepy.
3. And weird.
4. therefore I LOVED IT.

Seriously, how do you do it? This is an amazing story. You have an amazing way with words (unlike me, because I'm just calling everything amazing again) and you craft them so well into this incredibly vivid, intense story that I feel rather than just read. I especially love the part about how Nurmengard is composed of stone cells, making it like any other living thing - that is such a cool way to draw a comparison and makes me see the building in a whole new way. The way you built up the fortress in the beginning with all the creepy imagery of the dead inside it, just wow.

I also love the way Nurmengard watches time pass, kind of removed from history because buildings don't age the way people do, so it just watches as the war happens and all this stuff happens and nothing is that important because the building has no emotions, except respect for Grindelwald who created it. Aah it's just so cool.

Your characterization of Grindelwald is phenomenal, btw. Not that I'm surprised at all by this, because I know from TDC that you have a good grasp on writing him, but this was just so unique. Its from the POV of a building that kind of worships him, so there's that weird aspect to it, and then his interactions with Dumbledore and finally with Voldemort are just so well done. He's so arrogant and almost charming, which is what makes him such a great bad guy :p Voldemort is just ugh go away so boringly evil. But Grindelwald is fascinating because he still kind of holds onto his past with Dumbledore, and he thinks Voldemort is not even worth his time. I'm starting to ramble so much but I just really like the portrayal of him here.

And the italics for speaking! Love it. It feels more disconnected than using quote marks, for some reason - but that works perfectly since a building would feel a bit disconnected from human babbling.

I know this probably wasn't meant to be funny, but I laughed when you described Grindelwald's face as "stony" - considering this is from the POV of a stone building.

Well, I've found a new story to add to my favourites. Excellent story, teh! As you can tell from my gushing review, I really admire your creativity on this and it's just such an unusual, impressive fic. Bravo!

Author's Response: Kristin! ♥

1. That's because buildings don't usually have POVs
3. Vampire!buildings drinking people's blood?
4. ♥ ♥ ♥

Waah, thank you for your fab review! I didn't even know how to respond so I left it for a few days, and now I've got a small build-up of reviews thanks to your awesomeness. :P

Amazing is a good word to use. :P I use this a lot in reviews and review responses. Amazing. Lovely. Gorgeous. Brilliant. Et cetera. The dead people in the walls is totally plagiarised from history. I heard that the people who died while building the Great Wall of China were thrown into the wall and then everyone just kept on building.

I enjoy writing Grindelwald a lot, and this fic was definitely good practice for writing him, which I'll be doing a fair bit in upcoming chapters of TDC. Yeah, compared to Grindelwald, Voldie's a bit uptight. Reads too many Dark Magic books, I reckon. Cuts his soul up and has his personality flattened more and more each day.

And yay for italics! So much neater than yucky quote marks. It's probably what I enjoyed most about writing this story. Using italics for all the speech. Heh.

The 'stony' bit was totally intentional. Considering this fic's from the POV of a building, it probably considers Gellert is soul mate for life.

Ah, thank you for reading! And reviewing! And favouriting! And gushing! Honestly SO HAPPY to read this review. ♥


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Review #5, by patronus_charm The birth, life, and death of stone

1st May 2014:
Whoo, I hope your one-shot roll never ends as I’m enjoying this far too much! Ok, I’m going to do this section by section otherwise my brain will burst with too much to say!

Uno! Ok the description here was chilling and so amazing and wah! I loved the whole biology theme to it, and how you worked it into the title as that was really clever and I really love it when authors do that. Erm, I mean, what is this amazingness! ‘shrouded in a placenta of flint and lodestones and broken shale’ and ‘Hundreds of cells, segmented by membranes of stone, all waiting to be filled to function.’ It really reminded me of Lord of the Rings (please say you’ve read/watched it so you know what I mean), and had the creepy feel that Sauron had. I wasn’t sure whether Grindelwald or the prison were alive and that ambiguity was written so well.

Deux! I really liked how you explored the prison and Grindelwald’s relationship here as they were so interlinked and really relied on one another, it was almost as if they could only carry on living with the other one. That small moment of sort of understanding with Grindelwald when the prisoner spat in his face was so interesting and unexpected but fitting and wonderful and yeah, his characterisation here is fab!

Three! ahaha this was fab! ♥ The use of italics was really what made it for me in this chapter as it just created so many more levels to the story and made it so much more complex and interesting to read and I loved it! Albus really brought out another side to Gellert, it seemed to make his thoughts a lot more guarded yet emotional at the same time, showing how they had a past together really effectively. The duel was really fab (also, yay for more fighting scenes, keep it up!), and I definitely felt that there was something lacking in Gellert when he fought. Almost as if he built this fortress for the sole purpose of tempting Albus back to see him again and that he never wanted this fight. The fortress and him had such a solemn air at the end, like they had both lost Albus forever it was so great and a really amazing bit of writing.

Iv! Ah this was so sad and definitely a tough love parenting moment from Nurmengard :P Your descriptions of the torn bits of letter were so vivid and sad, I could just imagine Grindelwald slowly crumbling away before me as his one hope of having Albus again fades away! Ah, even though this story isn’t about their ship I can feel tinges of it when reading and there’s just so many feels because of it!

Five! NO! I think the master and I are having the same levels of soul destroying feels at the death of Gellert! That scene was just so fantastic with Voldemort because you still managed to squeeze in some sarcastic lines which just fitted his character really well, and even though I knew it would end that way it didn’t stop me wishing it wouldn’t. I think I was just so sad because this was such an interesting and refreshing portrayal of Gellert – like nothing I’ve ever read, frankly – and I just wanted to explore him so much more as it was just so interesting and fab and yeah this was amazing! ♥

Author's Response: Y U SO COOL KIANA ♥

Unfortunately, I have to announce that my one-shot roll has indeed come to an end :( April has ended, along with my one-shot writing/editing spree. I've got two half-shots waiting to be completed, but I'm going to finish them slowly over May, though my focus will be on writing something else (guess what that is!).

Yeah, Section I was so fun to write. I wouldn't think it's highly original to write phrases like 'bones of the earth/mountains etc.' since I've come across this sort of stuff in...YES TOKLIEN'S STUFF. And a whole lot of other published authors. This is me trying to jump on the sentient!insentient-things bandwagon. And man, this was fun to write, though the editing was a giant headache. I must say, though, I'm quite pleased you picked out the 'placenta' quote. :D I was influenced by the fact that in Maori, the word 'placenta' and the word 'land' share the same word, and that people traditionally bury placenta in the earth, and many things are born of the earth...I thought there were some lovely interlinking ideas there that could be explored. Oh dear, I'm rambling.

Yeah, there's kind of a close relationship between creator and created, though that being said, Gellert is kind of an indifferent god to Nurmengard. In fact, he hardly seems aware that the building is more than a building. AH I'M GLAD YOU LIKE GRINDELWALD'S CHARACTERISATION. He's so fun to write lol.

I love some stories which use italics as dialogue as a stylistic feature! I tried to do that here, get rid of the quote marks to reflect the unusualness of the perspective.


Well, sigh. Gellert had all this coming. Yay, I'm glad you like the Voldie scene! Voldie is just all evilevilevilevil and Gellert is like 'Evil? Yeah, OK.' With a raised eyebrow and everything. He's clearly not afraid of death. I seem to be writing a lot of reckless characters lately! First Sirius, now Gellert, and also an OC on one of my uncompleted one-shots...gah.

Fortunately with you, I'm not done with writing Gellert. I've got chapters of him left to explore!

Thank you, lovely!

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Review #6, by BookDinosaur The birth, life, and death of stone

29th April 2014:
O HAI TEH. Review swapsies, and am I ever glad I swapped with you!

This isn't like anything I've read before, I've never read a sentient!building fic but if I had to I'm so so glad it was this one because it's just so lovely.

The way you wrote everything here was amazing. There's something so beautifully prose-y about your writing here, all the words flow together perfectly and it feels a little like poetry. The writing here is just so powerful, you know? And I love it.

The way you portrayed Nurmengard, I don't really know how to explain this but somehow you managed to inject a real personality in there, if Nurmengard took a human shape than I can imagine its character being filled out and well-rounded, and that's just amazing and how do you do it? Teach me your secrets.

You write Grindelwald so well! And not only that, but you write Grindelwald and Dumbledore's complicated relationship so well, it's seriously a joy to read this stuff, teh. He and Dumbledore have an immensely complicated relationship and I think that's it's incredibly hard to get that right but somehow you do. And even though both Grindelwald and Dumbldore only speak a few lines here, and they're not main characters, you still managed to characterise them and personify them so well and just gaaah I'm jealous now.

Also, can I just say that I love how Nurmengard is all No you will not write to Dumbledore. No. It's just so perfect and made me laugh out loud.

And Grindelwald hasn't lost any of his sass, has he? Oh dear, when Voldemort comes to visit him I can definitely see why Nurmengard wishes for a way to keep the Master silent, oh dear. But I love how protective Nurmengard is of its Creator as well, it suits the building so well, this blind loyalty to Grindelwald. And how sad that Grindelwald was deaf to Nurmengard's whispering! Poor Nurmengard. :( But it's probably a good ting that they never tried to plot anything together or something truly terrible might have happened. ;)

Thanks for agreeing to swap with me teh, I really enjoyed it!

Author's Response: EMILYYY

Gah, thank you for this brilliant review!! ♥ I was waay nervous about this fic; there's a reason why there aren't many sentient building fics on HPFF, and it's because buildings aren't typically sentient. :P But your review was such encouragement, thank you!

Sadly, I have no secrets. :P I'm not lying! Everything you read is all that I have, TIS ALL THERE IN THE FINE PRINT, I mean the writing. :P

Oh thank you for those comments on Grindelwald and Dumbledore. I love writing Grindelwald. He's a more interesting Dark Lord to write compared to uptight, sneering Voldemort. And wow, it's such great pleasure to receive this compliment about the Grindelwald-Dumbledore relationship. They do indeed have a very complex relationship, and I'm always deathly afraid I'll botch it up. Nope, Grindelwald is rather rude to Voldie right up to the end. He should indeed have his throat filled with gravel and his mouth sealed with tar, and if Nurmengard was a person, it would probably do just that. :P

Thank you for this awesome review, Emily! Pleasure doing a swap with you.


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Review #7, by MissesWeasley123 The birth, life, and death of stone

29th April 2014:
Hi teh!

So, wow. This is unlike any story I have ever read. Such strong, powerful writing and vocabulary. really brilliant.

Before I forget, I'd like to express my astonishment at how superb that scene was, when Gellert would try to write to Albus, and then Nurmengard would be all, "oh no you didn't" except not like a fashionista such as that but more like:

The Master will not write to Dumbledore.

like whooaaa stuff just got reaaal. Seriously I loved that part so much.

The fact that all of this was written in a way like this was so chilling. Seriously great writing, because it was a building but like whoa. I can't really express my feelings right now because this whole piece just makes you think and you've done a really great job at taking emotions to a whole other level.

Grindelwald as always was portrayed so well and he is so hard to write the struggle is actually real and you just do him so well every time it makes me so jealous like WHY can I not write him like that god I just make him sound like a pathetic girl *rolls eyes*

And seriously. Your summary/opening is so brilliant. Amazing writing. Everything you write is so different and I really think you have a knack for looking at things in a different way, and you are a true story teller.
(go write OF!)

I really enjoyed reading this piece teh, very cool and different. One of the most original fics I have read on this site! You truly are one of the best writers here.

Author's Response: Ooh, helloo Nadia!

You mean this is a very weird piece? I AGREE. What the devil was I thinking eep. But you compliments! ♥ THANK YOU.

...are you trying to seed more plunnies in my brain with fashionista!buildings? Because as you can see from this fic, I'll pretty much write any weird thing. And I do not have time for too much of this.

But yeah, I'm glad you liked that scene! I'm quite fond of that little segment as well, which is kinda like an interlude between the middle and the ending parts.

The more people point out to the building-ness of the fic, the more I kinda cringe and wonder if I did the right thing at all.

But ah, thank you for your comments on Gellert. I LOVE writing him; he's seriously such a fun-loving Dark Lord. OK, he's an evil jerk as well. You should totes write Grindelwald; seriously, I'll read it and I'd love to hear him sound like a 'pathetic girl'. Your writing is FAB. REPEAT. Your writing is FAB. Your writing is FAB. (When you're repeating, you should be replacing 'your' with 'my') ;)

Thank you, lovely! I'm a bit reluctant to write OF at the moment, but someday soon I'll try.

Sorry for the ridiculousness of this response, but honestly, your words as always, mean so, so much to me. ♥

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Review #8, by RedHairGinny The birth, life, and death of stone

28th April 2014:
I think I'm the first reviewer!
Your story was wonderful, a great read.
I think the spirit of Gellert Grindelwald has been portrayed beautifully. And the sentient!building idea has been executed perfectly!

Your imagery and choice of words in some places is absolutely stunning. You've done a great job using your words to portray a dark theme for this one-shot.
'before humans came to speckle the foot of the mountains with their villages'
'filters away the ugliness of his dreams and cradles him in sleep'
'Blood to slake the thirst of stone, to strengthen the magic in Nurmengard’s lithic arteries'

And am I wrong in guessing that some of this - the omnipresent eye, the 'evil place with its own mind' concept - has been inspired by Mordor in Lord of the Rings?
Even if it is not, it really reminds of Sauron's stronghold. Also your writing is quite similar to Tolkien's.
Anyway, amazing piece! And I hope you get your banner soon - I'm looking forward to see how it will be!

Author's Response: Oh hey there!

Wow! What a lovely surprise review! Thank you so much for dropping by and taking the time to read and review ♥

Hearing your compliment about Grindelwald's portrayal just absolutely made my day! I really do enjoy writing him. And I'm glad the sentient!building idea worked. :D

Thanks, I love playing about with word choice and description!

There are indeed similarities with Sauron's All Seeing Eye. :D But I've actually put this fic back into the queue and edited stuff, mainly to explain in a longer author's note about some of the inspiration behind this fic. I'll explain it here now. The structure of Nurmengard is based on the design of the 'panopticon', which is kind of an institution where inmates always feel watched at all times. It's a design created by Jeremy Bentham, English philosopher, who's also associated with modern utilitarianism (the greater good!) Also, the Deathly Hallows symbol always looked like an eye. I think Harry mentioned that in the book.

And gah! I love Tolkien's writing, so it means a great deal that you're comparing my humble work with his. :)

Thank you once again for such a lovely review! I really do appreciate this.


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