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Review #1, by MileyMalfoy Feel Again

12th July 2014:
This is such a moving piece. I love how you take difficult topics and write about them in a way that makes the reader really see what is going on and see the bigger picture. I can't imagine what it would be like to be trapped in your own body and yet, because of this piece, I feel like I can understand where James is coming from and his thoughts. You did a brilliant job characterising him and showing us both the vulnerable and the tough sides of the same boy. I can't believe this was written over the middle of the night in five hours... It is so beautiful. You have done a really awesome job. Random question I know, but is Madam Brown Lavender?

Anyway, like I said. Awesome job!
~ Meg
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Review #2, by UnluckyStar57 Feel Again

19th April 2014:
Hoppy Eggstravaganza!! :D

Okay, so as the only person to give Prompt One a go, you're a pioneer! I certainly could not think of anything involving House unity that I could write about, but you blew the prompt out of the water by writing about the unity of ALL the Houses! :D

Wow, the accident was intense! I love how you wrote it from James' perspective, so that when the Bludger hit, all that we knew was his pain. It is limiting to write in first person PoV, but having his thoughts really added to the confusion of the scene that you created. That's pretty brilliant!

Yes, James was in a terrible accident, but the most important thing about this story is, in my opinion, the end. All of the students were looking at James and he was thinking that they were glad to see him go, but he was proved otherwise. Their cheers were because they admired him and wished him well in his recovery. That's a really powerful moment of inter-House unity, which is what HPFF is really all about. :)

Oh, psssh. Your grammar/spelling/sentence structure were perfect. There's no need to fret! I had to rush to finish my entry too, because I was worried about the queue. But we made it, and go Team Luna Diggory! :D

~UnluckyStar57

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Review #3, by TidalDragon Feel Again

19th April 2014:
Howdy! You are my last stop on my quest to R&R all the Eggstravaganza entries! Don't worry! It's only because I went in order on the list.

At any rate, this was a dramatic take on the usually light-hearted subject of Quidditch. Throughout the books we usually get the idea that Quidditch is this delightful interlude, yes it's dangerous, but nothing bad has happened in FOREVER. And now James (II) might be paralyzed! Great story to bring the relative brutality and danger of the sport home!

I also thought your descriptions and word choice were very well done. James (II)'s sensations (or lack thereof) and emotions were well written and you chose strong language and phrasing patterns that had a powerful impact.

The scene at the end was also very touching. What's more, it really brings home the point that the world has changed and there is more house unity going on these days with the Slytherin foes clapping as well.

Excellent!

Author's Response: Hey there, TidalDragon! Wow, wow! Thank you so much for not only leaving me this wonderful review, but for also going around to all the others who wrote stories for the Eggstravaganza! That's incredibly kind of you and I'm certain you made a handful of people very, very happy! :)

Too true! Most of the drama that comes with Quidditch is related to winning the game itself, and even with the few injuries that have occurred, they've all been easy enough fixes! This was my first attempt at anything Quidditch related at all, and I thought it would be interesting to talk about another side to it all; that it's not all glory and hard-work and competition - there are real dangers present. I'm so happy you enjoyed my take on it all!

Ah, thank you! That's always wonderful to hear (especially on a story that I had to write so quickly and at a such a late hour)! I was extremely worried about the quality of writing in this piece and feel like I lost some perspective on it due to how quickly it was thrown together, so I'm just thrilled to hear that my choices still managed to resonate with readers - especially in regards to the story having a powerful impact! I really appreciate you saying that! Phew!

This really means a lot to me, hearing that. I struggled with the ending and was honestly very nervous that it wasn't going to come across the way I meant for it to at all, but your comments really reassured me!

This is such a kind review and I appreciate it so much. Thank you for taking the time to leave one for myself and everyone else who entered the competition; very generous of you! Thank you, thank you, thank you! *hugs*


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Review #4, by keyty Feel Again

19th April 2014:
This is not awful at all! It's so good! Especially since it wasn't even proofread -I didn't catch any mistakes at all. But I love this concept. And I love that you went with house unity! I couldn't think of anything so I just went with the third prompt :P But this is so great. It's so real. I love that it's in first person, I don't think third would have worked at all. Because he feels so alienated and confused, and the amount of information we get, as well as he, is so limited. But it works because it makes everything so frightening, is he going to be okay? Will he ever feel his legs again?

I also think it's interesting that everyone was against his team, that everyone wanted him to lose. Why is that? I like that they were rooting for Slytherin because that means that they redeemed themselves in terms of being a house full of (primarily) jerks. So that's good too.
I wasn't sure how you were going to relate it to house unity but I just loved it when they started clapping. I have to say I teared up a bit. It's so scary to be wheeled away in front of your whole school (I speak from experience here... *shivers*) and the fact that they put their differences aside is so heart warming. I wasn't sure how much time had passed but when you said the Slytherins were still in uniform I knew very little time must have passed. The footsteps must have been them returning from the pitch. But I just love that everyone got together to reassure and support him. It's just so sweet! You did a great job. If this is how you write in the middle of the night, I'm kind of afraid to read what you write midday. Because it must be absolutely brilliant. :)

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Review #5, by Veritaserum27 Feel Again

19th April 2014:
Hi Tanya,

While reading this all I could think about is our own Huffleclaw/Ravenpuff unity and the way we have come together the past few days with our Quidditch match (searcing for the snitch AND the game thread). Also, our unification with the Easter egg hunt and, of course the reveiw battle (and reading and reviewing each other's stories). Great job with your imagery. I felt trapped along with James and I felt lifted along with him as he was being cheered on by the whole school! Thank you for writing this.

Beth

Author's Response: Hi Beth!

Aww, that's too sweet! I completely agree and had such a blast teaming up with some of the Claws! It's always nice to see opposing Houses come together, both in real life and in a story! Ooo, imagery - what a great compliment! Thank you! And I'm so happy that the way I wrote this - with its limited perspective - allowed for you to feel as trapped as James did! I'm ecstatic that that came across how I intended! And yay for feeling lifted by the ending as well! I struggled the most with that part, I think, so it's wonderful to hear people were warmed by it!

Thank you so much for this lovely review; you're just the sweetest!

Tanya ^.^


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Review #6, by Panda Weasley  Feel Again

18th April 2014:
Tanya, I don't see what you've been talking about. I thought it was actually really good! I especially like the part with Lavender being the school nurse. Great job!
~Panda

Author's Response: LOL! Aww, well thank you, Panda! I'm very happy to hear that! I get very in my head and anxious each time I write a new story, and this one was particularly nerve-wracking due to the late hour and last minute time-frame I wrote it all in! I'm glad you still found it good; that's very reassuring to hear I didn't completely botch it! hehehe And I'm glad you liked seeing Lavender as the nurse! I just had this idea while writing it that maybe after being so viciously attacked during the war, Lavender would come out of it with the desire to help heal as many people as she could, and school nurse just seemed fitting! ^.^

Thank you for taking the time to leave such a kind review! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Tanya :)


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Review #7, by luvinpadfoot Feel Again

18th April 2014:
Hi! Here with that review. :)

For starters, I think you kept the story in the moment very well. It's a hard thing to do without confusing the reader or having chunky explanation paragraphs, but you straddled the line really well! I was never lost to the point that it was difficult to keep up, but you showed without telling. It all seemed like a realistic thought process for James.

The only thing that did seem out of place was the line that everyone was against him. Perhaps I missed something, but I didn't notice a reason for that? I understand Slytherin, of course, but not the other two. A brief explanation, even a line, might help clarify that a bit and give it a purpose in the story other than a plot point.

Two parts really stuck out to me. One was the beginning, just wow. Those first four lines were brilliant and instantly drew me in. "There. Right there." Utter brilliance, really. I love that line. It was such a perfect way to start the story.

The other was James's rambling line. "Something cracked and there was pain, unbearable pain, and there were cries and there was falling and fading and toes, and toes, and wiggle your toes, and I cannot." There was just something about it that flowed so well and fit with the story. I think I read that line about three times before continuing on. I can't exactly say why, but something about it is so moving.

I'll admit, the ending made me tear up a bit. It's so sweet and a little bit sappy, but only good sappy. It's such a hopeful end and I just adore it!

This whole story was lovely and wonderful! There was nothing at all awful about it. You definitely earned those extra points. :)

Author's Response: Hi, hi, hi! Thank you so much for the review! It's so nice to have some feedback on it! I'm always so panicky when posting new fics, and this one in particular was nerve-wracking because of how quickly it had to be written! hehehe This is exactly the type of review I needed - you're fabulous; thank you so much! *hugs*

Phew! Well that's great to hear! I'm pretty inexperienced with this sort of writing, so I'm relieved to hear I handled it alright! I tend to avoid all mystery, too, because of exactly what you said: finding that balance between giving the readers enough so they can follow along, without giving so much away that they know what's happening before you want them to. I was mostly afraid people would get lost, so I'm glad you could follow along! Yay! ^.^

Ah, I see what you mean! I know what I -tried- to do, but it must not have worked how I planned. :-p This paragraph here: "Today was meant to be so simple; just defeat Slytherin and take a heavy lead in both the Quidditch and House Cups. I'd been so certain that we would, too. It had been easy to ignore the fact that all the other Houses were rooting desperately against us, against me, because all that had mattered was guiding my team to victory and taking that comfortable lead." was meant to sort of allude to the fact that the other Houses were against Gryffindor because if they won the game, they would take a hefty lead against the other Houses - so it wasn't so much that they were against James as a person, but his team (though he was the Captain, but I should have written that... I did originally, but it was an awful sentence, so I deleted it, LOL). I can definitely make that clearer in an edit, though! Thank you for pointing it out; I'll work with it as soon as I get the chance! (I can't believe this is the only critique! *dies*)

*squee* Yay! Beginning are so important to me, and I'm just thrilled you like what I did with the opening here!

*double squee* That was actually part of the story I struggled the most with, so this is so wonderful to hear! I knew what needed to be said, but was having trouble saying it, and then finally this line came out! I'm so happy it was worth the extra time I took to sort it out! :-D

Aww, it did? *hugs* That's so wonderful to hear. Other than the section I mentioned above, the ending was the other part I struggled with. I'm really pleased and touched that it moved you, as it was about 2am when I was pulling that part together and was really unsure if it was going to land the way I intended for it to!

YOU are just lovely and wonderful! Gah! Thank you so, so much for taking the time to leave such a thoughtful review; I endlessly appreciate it! *hugs*


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