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4 Reviews Found

Review #1, by SereneChaos Chapter 1

7th July 2014:
Ah! So cute! I don't know if I've ever read a Harry/Luna fic before, but I really liked this! It was as fluffy as Luna's hair, haha! I think your biggest strength here was in your dialogue. The way each character (especially Luna, you hit the nail right on the head with her) spoke really made them seem alive and really made them seem like themselves from the books. I especially loved how Harry made his little declaration of love, and Luna just replies with an 'ok'. It's so wonderfully IC! There were a few typos/capitalization/punctuation errors that could be fixed (mostly because they can be distracting), but otherwise this was an adorable fic! Thank you for posting it!

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Review #2, by teh tarik Chapter 1

17th April 2014:
Hey there!

Awww, Harry/Luna! ♥ One of my favourite pairings involving Harry. I haven't come across too many Harry/Luna pairing fics recently, so it's wonderful to see your story in the Recently Added. There were so many surprising details here, like Luna having run off to hunt for Yistings in Greece (whatever those are), and that Harry fell in love with Luna at Bill and Fleur's wedding (I'm assuming it's Bill and Fleur's? Or is it Ginny and Dean's?). I find it really interesting that he dated other girls as well like Katie and Parvati, but yay!

This is incredibly adorable! I especially loved the moment when Luna tells him rather directly that he's done nothing to substantiate his claim that he likes her, bahaha! So Luna! And gah, what a sweet fluffy ending.

You do have a few punctuation and dialogue tag errors, so if you can get hold of someone to look through your fic with you to straighten out the small things, that would be wonderful.

But otherwise, this was a lovely story about a ship I adore, and I enjoyed reading this very much.

-teh

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Review #3, by maskedmuggle Chapter 1

17th April 2014:
Hey!

Aw, this was a short but sweet fic! I really liked the plot here. You've used so few words, but said so much with them. I got such a good sense of Harry's background and the context of where this was taking place. I felt so sad hearing about Ginny's wedding to Dean Thomas, and I really got a sense of Harry's isolation, particularly with Hermione/Ron's absence. I thought him stumbling into Luna was a really nice coincidence, and I particularly liked how you characterised Luna so realistically. I can just imagine Luna hunting some other oddball creature, and I really loved her bemusement and the line "you have merely stated something; you have done nothing to substantiate it!" because I can so imagine Luna saying something like that! To be honest, it seemed a bit abrupt that Harry would straightaway declare his feelings for her and then go and kiss her, but the spontaneity did make this fic very fluffy and enjoyable to read. Nice job writing this! :)

- Charlotte
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Review #4, by UnluckyStar57 Chapter 1

16th April 2014:
Hello! I thought that I would come and review this story so that it wouldn't be lonely anymore. :)

Harry/Luna is an interesting pairing and I think you've managed to make it fairly believable. However, I wish that there were more to the story--something like a drawn-out romance in which Harry falls more in love with Luna's idiosyncrasies and quirks. :)

One suggestion that I have for you is that you should take a look at capitalization and dialogue tags. Sometimes you don't have a capital letter at the beginning of a bit of dialogue, and if you clean that up, it makes things easier to read.

Also, I just really find myself wishing to know MORE!! Did Luna feel the same for Harry at the wedding? Did she spend all year thinking about him while hunting for elusive magical creatures? I want to know, and I think that you should expand this story into more than just a one-shot! Who knows, it could be fun! :D

Good story! :)

~UnluckyStar57

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