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Review #1, by MadiMalfoy Because of James Potter

20th June 2014:
Hiya! :) Here's your review from the Merlin challenge prize!

Let me first say that I'm not a shipper of Snape/Lily but you wrote it well enough that it doesn't try and force Snape/Lily onto the reader. I LOVED the second person POV--it's really different and I'm glad that there was a challenge that focused on this point of view because it's so underused!

Anwyho, I actually quite liked the plot; it's so cute! Sev being a cute nervous 15-year-old asking the girl he's had a crush on forever out on a date and her actually agreeing to go with him. A lot of times people write them as so much older than they really are. James being all immature is spot-on! I definitely really enjoyed this unconventional one-shot because it shows how Snape realized that Lily didn't love him like he loved her and that she was in love with James Potter and would always be. Great job, I liked it a lot!! :)
~MadiMalfoy x

Author's Response: Hi there! Thank you :)

I loved the second person POV challenge. It's quite hard to write sometimes but this challenge made me want to write it more.

Thank you! In my headcanon, this is really the point where Sev turns completely to the Dark Arts - and as we know, later on in the year Sev does something he regrets very much.

Thanks for reviewing!

-Karou


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Review #2, by MissesWeasley123 Because of James Potter

14th May 2014:
Hello flamey! (I shall call you flamey, lol)

Oh lord, this just took all my Snily feels and just crushed them and no. And then there was that very very little mention of Remus/Lily which I also adore, and this really was just a great mixture of some of my favourite pairings in HP :)

I'd like to comment on your characterization of Severus. His mood swings, where he would get really intense when talking about James but then really calm and cute around Lily. In a one shot and especially second POV, it's really hard to do that sometimes because of, "you" and you can't entirely grasp a person too well. I thought you played it really nicely and wrote his character brilliantly.

I'm not the biggest fan of Lily Evans, but I do admit the little subtle things with her talking about James... this part here:

But despite her words, she's smiling.

Aw, my poor heart breaks. :( So so sad. What's worse is the whole, "He hasn't gotten to me," you say slowly. "He's gotten to you." -- SERIOUSLY. That part just left me in asdfghjkl; as it was SO amazing. And especially the ending, when Severus realizes that she is in love with him.. it's such a perfect missing moment. Almost as if this right here is where it all begins...

Oh, and a comment on James' character. Never liked him either. Him and Lily aren't favourites, and specially not them as a pairing. This piece truly brought out the "I want to punch James Potter in the face" in me. He was SUCH a bully. And possessive too -_- I really wanted to slap him. Or something of the like. lol.

All in all, I think you did some wonderful story telling. Loads of fun in this, and really dramatic as well. Liked it a lot. Good luck in the challenge ♥

Author's Response: Hello Nads! (I called you Nads. That is your name now :))

I get the feeling you're not a big Jily shipper...nope. Score! I managed to do an okay job with character despite the overuse of the word "you".

YOU ARE TOO NICE. I DO NOT DESERVE THIS AH please no...I can't respond to this loveliness. Thank you so much for liking this.

No, I don't really like young James either. Yay for inspired emotions. I'm glad this story did that, because I was worried it would come off as strange and totally OOC.

Thank you so much, you made my year :D

-Karou/flamey


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Review #3, by patronus_charm Because of James Potter

19th April 2014:
Sorry I only just got to this, being ill does hamper my reviewing but it was probably a good thing I left it until now as it crushed all my feels and that wouldnít have made me get better any quicker!

Ah, you actually made me want to hug Snape and you made me cheer him on throughout this which was pretty weird as usually I canít really stand him and Iím not a big fan at all. I thought you wrote his character really well and the narration suited him really well as I viewed him a different way to then I usually would.

Ok, what I really mean to say is that the Lily and Snape you showed here was really perfect as they were still both so innocent and full of hope that everything would work out and they could always be best friends. I really loved that as we so rarely get to see that innocent side of them, even if it was only shown here for a few moments.

The ending complimented it perfectly with the way James came along and made Snape run, showing perhaps that Snape could have been the better, nicer person for Lily, but it was just circumstances which made it be James instead. That actually left me thinking a lot, because if this did actually happen I wonder how much this effected Snapeís decision to go and join the Death Eaters.

One final thing I want to say is how well you showed the darker side to James, and that he wasnít that nice at all. Iíve noticed people turn it down quite a bit, but what they did to Snape there was really horrible and that was definitely the point where I wanted to go and hug him. Seriously, you made me feel so much from squeeing over Snape and Lily, cheering on Snape, and then yelling abuse at James.

This was such an interesting one-shot, and thank you so much for entering it for the challenge!

-Kiana

Author's Response: That's fine, it's not your fault you were ill. Hope you're okay :)

Thank you so much! I'm not a fan of adult-Snape but kid-Snape was a nice guy at SOME point.

You have just made my week with this review, thank you so much. That's exactly what I was trying to do and I'm so glad it worked.

No, he wasn't nice at all. Aw, that's so sweet, thank you so much :)

Thanks for posting the challenge!

-Karou


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Review #4, by Infinityx Because of James Potter

16th April 2014:
Oh my. :'( This was definitely not how I had expected it to end. Poor, poor Sev. Everything makes so much sense, but jbnjdfnsm. No, why?! :(

I always love reading fics that show the good side of Severus. He's such a complex character and it's wonderful to read about those innocent days when all his troubles only consisted of the Marauders, and you've done a wonderful job here.

I love how you've brought in that bit about the Amortentia. It really adds more depth to Sev's character and I think it gave a terrific touch to the story. Also, that part about Lily's date with Remus was a nice little bit of detail as well.

The POV works really well in conveying the amount of emotion he feels, especially in the end. My heart broke with the last few lines. :(

Great job and good luck with the challenge!

~Erin

Huffleclaw-Ravenpuff Extravaganza

Author's Response: Because it had to happen. Unless it says AU in the genre list, everything I write will be completely canon. Haha.

Aw, thank you. I'm glad you like my characterisation here, I spent a while trying to get it as close to the Snape we know (and love?) as possible.

Thanks for the luck, and good luck to you with the Extravaganza! :)

Also thank you for reading and reviewing.

-Karou


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