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Review #1, by TidalDragon The Wedding

7th July 2014:
Howdy!

A wedding is always a nice idea for a fluff piece, and with what you wanted to explore I think Ron/Hermione was a good choice of pairing to do just that. I liked the fact that you told the story from an unusual POV (Hermione's mom) too.

What I think could have made the story even better is adding a bit of length - we aren't talking miles longer, but perhaps 500 words or so. I think the way you structured the piece was good from start to finish, and with some more detailed descriptions, some more internal thoughts, and ESPECIALLY more of the ending, where Hermione and her mother discuss her early feelings for Ron - you could have struck gold. This last part I think is incredibly important because you basically hang the story on this idea straight from the summary and it would be nice to leave readers with a little something more in that area.

Thanks for sharing!

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Author's Response: To be honest, I threw this together one day and planned to go back and add to it, but I haven't done it yet. Thank you or the review. They're always appreciated.

LM


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Review #2, by Avanell 2 The Wedding

11th April 2014:
very sweet story of giving Hermione to her love :D

Author's Response: Thanks. My goal is to eventually write a story for every pairing

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