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Review #1, by Seamus 'The Bomb' Finnigan A Phoenix in the Sky.

31st May 2015:
Hi there again, Margaret! Been a little delayed recently - had problems at work again: had to go get my shoulder sorted out. Apparently Salamanders don't like the idea of helping make fireworks...

Anyway, I'm back now! I wanted to stop off at this one because it's not got so many reviews as the others - can't think why, as it's an interesting topic, recovery from trauma and response to war. Difficult, but real, you know?

You've really nailed Hermione's character, too - she always did love school the most out of all of us. Probably Dean and Parvati next, but that's not really relevant, is it? Anyway... I love how you've used that to highlight her character, and her intelligence to understand and make the points about recovery and how important it is to keep fighting prejudice and rudeness; that winning an actual war doesn't necessarily get rid of all of the issues which have caused the war.

The conversations with her parents were so good, too. Parents can be overprotective, even if it doesn't help in the end - it's all well-meant, usually. Still, it's nice to see them coming around and supporting Hermione in the end; it's probably the right thing to do.

Your writing in this is so gorgeous, too - I love the way you write so cleanly and so truthfully - there's so much honest truth in this, and so much detail, which is just lovely: how Ron and Ginny are coping after Fred's death, the gradual changes coming to the wizarding world, the strangeness of being back at school with the marks from the battle and the lack of people, like Dumbledore and Snape.

I'm so glad I got a chance to read this - this was such a lovely story! Anyway, got to run - Harry wants to talk to me about 'wilful fire-starting' or something. Who knows what that means?

Seamus xx

Author's Response: To be honest, I'm not surprised this has less reviews than the others. It's a bit rushed. It was written as a gift fic for a friend and I'd a deadline, so that is probably why. I might expand on it sometime, but at the moment, I've too much else to be working on.

Hmm, I'm sort of surprised at Dean. Never imagined him as much of a scholar - I guess I tend not to see most of Gryffindor as the most academic, apart from Hermione.

And yeah, the wizarding world clearly had problems before Voldemort took over - essentially owning slaves, the dismissal of Muggleborns, sometimes even by "good" witches and wizards - even Arthur acts like they're some kind of amusing novelty - and of course, the behaviour of people like Crouch and Scrimgeour, who basically responded with internment without trial. Those people aren't going to change their mentality because Voldemort is defeated.

And I REALLY don't blame Hermione's parents for being overprotective. Imagine finding our your teenage daughter had been brutally tortured by people with powers you could barely imagine, during a war in a world you couldn't enter and you didn't even know the full details until afterwards. They're bound to want to take care of her and ensure she's fully recovered from her ordeal.

But she does need the opportunity to decide how she wants to deal with things and do what's best for her. And I don't think Hermione would be happy in a career that didn't utilise her intelligence.

Really glad you enjoyed this and thanks so much for the review.


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Review #2, by red_headed_juliet A Phoenix in the Sky.

23rd June 2014:
Hey! Here for the swap.

I love missing moments, and I think you've done a great job of keeping everyone in cannon. I don't have the courage to try and write the trio, so it's nice to read something from Hermione's perspective.

I think you did a great job, starting with her describing Hogwarts, then going back to making her decision, talking to Harry and her parents (which was refreshing. I think this is the first time I've seen a fic including her parents, though I am in the middle of writing a piece from her mother's POV while in Australia.) I'm glad they like Ron.

I think you bring up a very good point, relating Voldemort to muggle dictators and the idea that you can't lock yourself away after bad things happen, especially if it's out of fear.

The entire message throughout the piece was strong, delivered tastefully, and it was well balanced with description, inner thought, dialogue, and exposition.

I like the idea of her tutoring after she returned, and McGonogall checking up on all the students.

It was a very well written piece I'm glad I got the opportunity to read.

Thanks for the swap! Until next time!

Author's Response: Thank you SO much for the review. I don't write the trio much myself, except as like parents in the next generation era or stuff, but this was originally a gift fic for a friend who likes Hermione.

And yes, I wanted to include Hermione's parents, because they are very much overlooked in canon and it does appear she has a relationship with them.

That idea about a piece about her mother in Australia sounds REALLY interesting. I must read that.

Actually, one thing I realised while writing this was how the wizarding wars and the "Troubles" in Northern Ireland run pretty much parallel. I've always compared the whole Sirius Black situation, but peace came to both less than a month apart and the first wizarding war must have started around 1970, which is only just after the beginning of the modern Troubles in 1968.

Thanks for the review and glad you liked the story.


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Review #3, by Missy_Janelle A Phoenix in the Sky.

2nd May 2014:
Hi, here for our review swap!

This was so wonderful! It was very cannon, and you wrote all the characters accurately. This was entirely believable. Actually, are you sure you're not JK Rowling in disguise?;) This was great, honestly. I'm very impressed.

Sorry this is so short. I can't write long reviews:)

Good job!

-Janelle

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review. Don't worry about its being short. I'm just incapable of being anything but long-winded. I COULD blame it on my nationality, except even here, I've a reputation for talking rather a lot.

And wow, that's quite a compliment - a comparison with J.K. Rowling. Wouldn't it be hilarious if she did post fanfiction under a username?

Glad you liked the story and thanks so much for offering the swap.


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Review #4, by magnifique11 A Phoenix in the Sky.

7th April 2014:
I really loved this! It felt so accurate and wonderful and true the characters and the books. It was honestly such an enjoyable read and it almost felt like coming home, coming back to the books, you know? Excellent job portraying the characters, especially Hermione. :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review.

I write a lot about OCs and minor characters, so I'm not used to having to keep characters "in character" so much, as a lot of the people I write about don't have as much depth to their character in the books. So I'm glad to know she seems in-character, especially since I was trying to balance the fact she's clearly a very strong character in canon with the fact that what happened to her was truly horrific and is bound to have some degree of psychological effects.

Glad you enjoyed it.


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