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Review #1, by The Basilisk The Serpent's Tale

21st March 2015:
What is this I see? A tale of my plight? But how, little Ravenclaw, have you captured my story? Perhaps you were friends with Rafeek who told you of this tale - or some other snake lurking around when this incident took place.

Nonetheles, I mussst say, you have captured my story very well. I am surprisssed that it does justice to my feelings - my anger with being trapped, my hunger, my boredom, my longing for freedom, my frustration with being bound to Salazar. Oh, how I loathed him - my so called master - and you've indeed expressed all of that brilliantly in your little story here.

Your descriptions and details of my existence, of the parting incident of Salazar Slytherin, of me having eaten my only friend (not that I regret it), is nicely conceptualised and executed into this story. I enjoyed your writing style and it allowed me to relive the emotions once again. I am also still curious to know whether Salazar ever really cared for me or whether I was just his 'pet' (though that term disgusts me, I am the Queen of Serpents after all) - and you did a good job of showing that attitude here in the story too. The detail about the way of speaking Parseltongue was also something I loved - it is a subject I've always been passionate about so I was interested to see how you touched upon it here.

All in all, this flowed beautifully, had a compelling narrative and great plot idea. I loved reading it. I am so happy to be able to move freely now and slither from story to story to liven up this boring existence.

Thank you for honouring me with a story. I shall not eat you and your fellow friends. Better keep your eyes down.

HIss Hiss,
The Basilisk

Author's Response: I am delighted to hear that you are pleased with this portrayal of your story, Safiyah! (May I call you Safiyah? Or do you prefer to just be known as Basilisk?) As to how I captured your story - Ravenclaws are good at finding things out! ;)

I think perhaps Salazar did care for you, but he was too proud and caught up in himself to consider that you might have reasonable complaints. He was never one for showing his emotions, and certainly not one who liked to be challenged - which is why he refused to take on board your suggestions with regard to his speech patterns in Parseltongue. I can see why you would be passionate about the way of speaking Parseltongue - as parselmouths don't learn it like snakes do but instead master it by magic, and have very little contact with native speakers to pick up stylistic features like this, it's perhaps unsurprising that their delivery leaves something to be desired. No, I don't think he considered you a pet - a tool, perhaps, and in some ways a daughter - as he raised you from an egg. Mostly, though, I expect he just took you for granted - highly disrespectful, considering you are Queen of Serpents!

I am very glad you are enjoying your freedom and are no longer trapped in that chamber. And thank you very much for not eating me, and for this wonderful review! I am so glad you enjoyed my rendition of your tale.

~ Leo

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Review #2, by AlexFan The Serpent's Tale

8th July 2014:
Hey there again! House Cup review 2014 for Educational Decree number 4!

Hey there again Leonore! It took me about the first two paragraphs to realize that this was actually being told from the point of view of the Basilisk. I thought it was really interesting to actually look at the thoughts that Safiyah might have had before she woke up and started killing people.

I never really thought about how she would feel about not being able to see outside and breathe in the fresh air, I kind of was more focused on the fact that she petrified students at Hogwarts and such.

Great one-shot!

Author's Response: Heya! First of all, thanks!

I love writing from the POV of unusual characters. And I'm quite proud of how unusual I managed to get this time. ;)

*laughs* Yeah, most people seem to be more focused on the fact that she's a giant evil killing machine. Really, she's... yeah, a giant evil killing machine, one who's not being allowed to do nearly as much killing as she'd like! :P


~ Leo xx

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Review #3, by Beeezie The Serpent's Tale

8th July 2014:
Oooh, I'm glad you posted a link to this. It was incredible.

I like to think of myself as a fairly open-minded person, but I literally never thought about how Slytherin's basilisk felt. I just kind of assumed that it was kind of a mindless killing machine, without feelings or conscious thought.

Given what we know about it, though - especially the fact that it was capable of speech, albeit in Parseltongue (which of course most people can't understand), your take makes a lot more sense.

I think my favorite part about this is how human she felt at some times - e.g., not liking Slytherin (which I completely loved as an interpretation!), but how completely alien she seemed at others - e.g., eating her friend.

This was an amazing entry, and I'm proud to have you in my house. ♥

House Cup 2014 Review - Ravenclaw

Education Decree #4

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

Believe it or not, I don't think many people really consider how Slytherin's basilisk felt. But I like taking characters that seem evil and making people like them. That is my goal in life. Well, that and making readers cry, and who doesn't have that as one of their goals? Anyway...

I love writing animals, getting a certain level of... human-ness, because they're sentient beings after all and surely feel emotion to some extent - and also the fact that they're animals, governed by their own instincts, and while similar to us in some ways they're infinitely different in others.

I'm very proud to be in the same house as you! Lovely review, thank you so much! *hugs*

~ Leo xx

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Review #4, by StarlightAsteria The Serpent's Tale

7th July 2014:
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Really interesting :) I thought you handled the non-human perspective really well, and to provide a different angle to the accepted view of creatures that can be termed 'monsters', by showing that what can be seen by humans as frightening or evil is merely natural behaviour for that species. Well done for questioning human superiority :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. I don't think anyone (human or otherwise) would think of him/herself as a monster. That's a fact I like to make use of when I come up with plots. Glad you liked it!

~ Leo xx

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Review #5, by LilyFire The Serpent's Tale

3rd April 2014:
This was an interesting view of the a female, no less. I enjoyed reading it and I love how she was actually there, no by her own design or desire, but by Slytherins. And I love that she really just wanted to be free. I wonder what she was thinking durning the second HP book?

Author's Response: In fact she's a female in canon, so that wasn't my originality ;) I'm glad you liked it. Could you imagine anything enjoying that kind of life? I'm tempted to write a later story when she wakes up, but don't have time right now. Thanks for the challenge, giving me an opportunity to write this story!

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Review #6, by MargaretLane The Serpent's Tale

21st March 2014:
One thing immediately: you've said "with not prey". I presume it should be "with no prey."

LOVE the line "bound with magic she could neither wield nor understand". And I love the explanation that she has to obey when he speaks parseltongue. That's definitely implied in canon, that snakes obey parseltongues.

And this explains how Voldemort knew so much about his ancestry. I wondered how he figured out so much about it. If Slytherin has ordered her to tell him everything, that explains a lot.

I also like the description of the heir as a "hatchling".

And this also explains how the Basilisk survived so long without food.

The part where she eats Rafeek because he's no more use to her is...I'm not sure how to explain it. I guess it sort of shows her non-humanness, if that makes sense. She doesn't see friendship at all as a human would. She's fond of him, but if she can't have him as a friend, he makes a good meal. In a way, it's jolting, because it's so utterly disinterested and detached, but it makes sense because after all, she is a Basilisk.

Author's Response: Hello! Can't think who this review might be from... ;)

Sorted that :P - thanks for pointing it out.

Thank you! Rather pleased with it myself.

She has to obey HIM, not because of the parseltongue but because of some magic she doesn't understand (going back to her hatching). I think most snakes obey parselmouths because they choose to, but can you imagine a basilisk choosing to obey a person? Given the chance, she'd just eat him!

I think I got the idea of the basilisk telling Voldemort things from another fic I read, but I didn't note it down and I can't remember which. So I can't take all the credit for that.

Well, you don't expect her to respect him, do you? And the "suspended animation" idea is canon, although I only realised when I was researching ;P

She is, indeed, a basilisk. I had a few ideas for the ending - her not realising that he wouldn't be there when she woke up and thinking she'd see him again as she fell asleep, her looking at him and killing him like that, or asking Salazar to send him to sleep too and him refusing (jealousy that she actually speaks to someone other than him) and maybe killing Rafeek, but I decided that her eating him would have the best effect - and I'm pleased to hear it did show her personality well! (I don't like to go all cliché and give her a conscience!)

Thank you for yet another lovely review - I hope I didn't steal too much of your writing time...

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