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Review #1, by bellatrixlestrange123 Let the Madness Begin

15th June 2014:
Here for our review swap! You left me such a lovely review so I am so sorry this is a little late ..

Anywayy, I love how brilliantly your writing flows. I've always said this when reviewing your other story, but seriously, it's a breath of fresh air to read. It's probably down to the fact that you do a lovely job in really inhabiting your characters really well and giving the narrative a wholly persona to write from. It's brilliant!

I felt so sorry for Maude when you started the story and it was nice to hear that she had finally made quidditch captain - just so she can rub it in the face of arrogant James. It was a great feeling to read :)

It's good that you've made this light-hearted by incorporating humour in the midst of the story. Maude's almost prophetic speech to Frank was humorous yet just the right amount for narrative to once again, flow very well.

I could practically feel every bit of Maude's annoyance at the team, you wrote that scene with real clarity and described all the characters really well. Sometimes it can be hard to write a ver 'noisy' scene with a lot going on and make it clear. But you did - so well done!

Keep up the good work!

- Bella x

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Review #2, by Red_headed_juliet Let the Madness Begin

10th June 2014:
Wood's prodigy! This was a great feel good read. You have a very strong character with Maude. I love her quirky personality traits and that she truly is obsessed with the sport, much like her father was.

I also like that you have both of your main characters in Hufflepuff, as I think that doesn't happen often enough in Next Gen.

I'm looking forward to see more in detail interractions between the team, and of course, the quidditch matches that are sure to come ahead.

I didn't find any typos or grammatical errors, and I appreciated the narrative style of the story, complete with inner monologues. It really adds to the tone and mood of the story.

Overall very well done! Thanks for the swap.

Until next time!

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Review #3, by navyfail Let the Madness Begin

22nd April 2014:
Hello! I'm here for the review swap!

I honestly love the title of your story since it reminds me of an Imagine Dragons song. Second off the name of your main character is quite unique: Maude. And she is a Wood? That is quite a lot to live up to but I think she'll do just fine.

Her character is great. Immediately, I love her willingness and determination. Though, I wonder what makes her more of a Hufflepuff than a Gryffindor. She has confidence in her and it probably takes a lot of patience to stand James Potter.

It turns out she does manage to pull a team with some skill though it looks like they'll have to go through some brutal training to win against the rest of the teams. The beaters... are interesting. I had no idea that they would actually know how to fly. I wonder how much skill Maddox has since we didn't seem him throw the Quaffle at all. I had a feeling the fourth year would end up getting the position though for some reason.

Great first chapter! I hope in future chapters we get to know how each member of the team is like. And I can't wait to meet the talked about James Potter.

~Sama (~chocolate)

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Review #4, by maraudertimes Let the Madness Begin

22nd April 2014:
JANELLE!

I saw this a while back and never got around to reviewing it, so I'm glad I got the chance, because it was super fun!

Your characters are hilarious and I think other than Maude and Frank(lin), they're my favourites! You really nailed the aspect of a tryout with misfits, and I can't believe that poor boy showed up with one arm! Goodness gracious, that would be a little scary!

Every character seems really rounded out, and I like the budding rivalry between James and Maude (well, budding...). It's also super cool you've got a Hufflepuff to show the world that Hufflepuffs CAN be awesome!

This was really great and I'm going to have to keep an eye on this, because you've really started out strong!

Great job!
Lo :)

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Review #5, by Dirigible_Plums Let the Madness Begin

17th April 2014:
Great, I've found a new fanfiction to read! Can't wait to see where you go with this

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Review #6, by uxutwist Let the Madness Begin

2nd April 2014:
Hahaha! I love this already! I think the twins are my favourite, I love that they can actually play a little and gosh, that ending is fab :D I can't wait till the next chapter!

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Review #7, by Infinityx Let the Madness Begin

16th March 2014:
Hi Janelle! Here for the BvB battle!

This chapter was unlike anything I've ever read before. I think the premise of the story is great and you've done an amazing job at writing this chapter!

Initially, I didn't like any of the characters much. Those two twin girls were just so dumb. It was a wonderful twist to read about them being excellent beaters though! Haha, the ending was the best. :D

A little more description would be nice though. There are a lot of dialogues throughout this chapter which make the pace really fast. A bit more description could help balance that out. Maybe there could be some more emphasis on what Maude feels and her thoughts.

I like the voice you've given to your MC. It's clear that she has the Hufflepuff pride but doesn't have confidence in the members of her house. It's quite complex and touching, and I'd love to see how Maude's character develops from here. :)

I love how each of your characters have their own different personalities but are also similar, all of them being misfits. The best part was how they stood up against the Gryffindor team, showing that they can't be intimidated. Once again, the ending where James is hit by the bludger was brilliant! I can see some thick bonds forming between the 'Puffs, all of them having each other's backs, and I think that's lovely!

Good job on the first chapter! I think it was a wonderful start!

~Erin

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