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Review #1, by MischiefNotQuiteMannaged Civil Conversations

9th July 2014:
I can't believe how many things you captured in this short snapshot! There's so much here! I can feel Narcissa's guilt at not being there for her big sister, and I feel her deep remorse at going along with all the Pure blood mania of her parents and Voldemort. She's so clearly genuine at her desire to change and become a better person.

I can totally understand things from Andis perspective too. How much more she's lost. I think its only natural that she should be unwilling to let Narcissa into her home, but I like how she's willing to begin to build bridges, when Narcissa reveals her deep desire to Change.

I really liked that you gave Andromeda such a detailed backstory. i liked reading how she herself gradually saw through her parents beliefs by reading and talking to other people, instead of just falling in love with Ted and all this character development happening overnight. Needless to say I loved reading this, I find the Black sisters so incredibly fascinating, they're some of my favourite characters!

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Review #2, by MidnightBlue_x Civil Conversations

18th March 2014:

Sorry for the late review! I had read this a while back but I didn't get a chance to review it until now. Secondly, I want to thank you for entering my challenge!

I love this story, really I do. I absolutely love stories about Narcissa and Andromeda, especially after the war. I think you've written them very well, especially how Andromeda wouldn't forgive Narcissa immediately.

Thanks again for entering my challenge!

x Ely

Author's Response: Hey, no big. Thank you for the review! And I'm really glad you like what I did with it.

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Review #3, by DraconisScarlet3792 Civil Conversations

24th February 2014:
Exploring the relationships between these sisters and their pasts, presents and futures could make a wonderful longer piece. Sister/sister relationships are complex at the easiest and intriguing in all situations.

Author's Response: I know, and I may eventually do a longer bit with them, but that's doubtful. Thank you for the review!

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Review #4, by anythingcouldhappen Civil Conversations

23rd February 2014:
Hi! I'm here with your review swap :)

I really liked this. It was just the tiniest snapshot of an interaction between Narcissa and Andromeda after the war, but it managed to show a lot of what must have been going through both their heads. As a sister myself, I can totally understand why Andromeda wasn't prepared to just let Narcissa in right away. All those years of resentment don't just drop away!

I loved Narcissa's line: "I want to be able to do that, to save those who wouldn't save me". It's so powerful and sums up so perfectly what so many of the heroes did in the HP series. That Narcissa wants to be that sort of person is really cool. It would be interesting if you carried this forward into a short story or novella or something!

There was one line that was a little confusing: "my daughter, your niece, Narcissa, was born?" The way it's phrased makes it sound like "your niece" is referring to "Narcissa". I don't think saying Narcissa in there is totally necessary. But that's just my view :)

Great job!


Author's Response: Thank you! I was afraid Narcissa's line would come off as OOC, but hopefully it didn't. I may eventually, but it would be way down the line. And I see what you mean about it sounding like I'm saying Narcissa is the niece, I'll try to work on that line later. Thank you so much for the review!

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Review #5, by CassiePotter Civil Conversations

23rd February 2014:
I really loved this! The conflict between the sisters at the beginning is really interesting to read, because I've always imagined Andromeda to be very sweet, and reading her as someone who has this much anger towards her sister was really different, but I really enjoyed it! I loved that you were able to make the relationship between the sisters feel really real. I could understand why Andromeda didn't want to talk to Narcissa, but at the same time could see why Narcissa was reaching out to her older sister. Also, the way Andromeda starts to forgive her and see the good in her at the end of the story was really nice.
There was one tiny spelling mistake I noticed- you had "that basted war" instead of "that blasted war"
This story was really great, and I really enjoyed it! 10/10
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Thank you! Fixed the mistake. I'm glad their relationship came through properly and that you could see both sides and I've very happy that it felt real to you. Thank you for the review.

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