Reading Reviews for Second Chances
  
7 Reviews Found

Review #1, by yeah Redemption

12th July 2014:
pleased update please please update this one

Author's Response: Hi there! This story is finished. I don't think I'll continue it, but I have some other stories if you'd like to check them out. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

-Karou :)


 Report Review

Review #2, by BLONDEbehaviour Onwards

26th March 2014:
Hiya!! I am here to review for the Canon Craziness challenge :D So sorry it has taken me so long, but I am here now!

This was a fascinating read! I loooved what you have done with Voldemort. First of all, the third person perspective was a great twist. It felt like we were looking in on a very intimate moment between Voldemort and Dumbledore, and that this hidden moment helped to give us a different perspective and look at what it means to be weak. I think this perspective has made a great impact on your story :)

As for your character change around.. what fun to take Voldemort and make him well.. human! You gave him flaws, weaknesses that shows that underneath that craziness, there was once a man who lived and breathed and thought like the rest of the wizards around him. The line about him having a thirst for knowledge is a trait that did somewhat continue to go with him, but you related it to a more human version of the feeling, which i think was very effective. The line about him being scared... that just made it. Great writing!

I also loved how you incorporated some of Dumbledores story into it. I find those two to be very interlinked, and the way that you percieved it was great, especially with the last scene being purely dumbledore. It was like now that Voldemort was wholly over, he could now look to his own problems, and lay them to rest so he could to lay to rest. I liked it alot, very well captured :)

I also liked how you continued the story, keeping Dumbledores memory in the children in the next chapter. I think that was super sweet, and a great ending to the pain they have all had to endure.

I have little to give i constructive criticism on this piece of writing. Something I would check up on is the tense of the writing, especially this chapter here. It seems to go through present and past, only a few times. Just perhaps read it aloud and see if that would make a difference in the tenses :)

All in all, a very fun read! I really enjoyed it.
Thank you for entering my challenge, I hope you enjoyed it. Good luck! And the results should be up inn the next few days :)

Grace :D

Author's Response: Hiya!

Thank you! It was kinda subconscious really, I tend to write most of my HP stuff in third person (and OF in first person. *shrugs*).

Yes, fun indeed! Voldemort was always scared of death (I believe it's called thanatophobia, and I believe this because I just looked it up) so it was only natural that he would be scared here. And due to the strangeness of the whole thing, Voldemort/Tom admits it to Albus (which helps him move on).

Me too. Their destines have always intertwined (I sound like Trelawney or someone! You know what I mean though) even in death.

Thank you for the CC. I've hardly ever written third person-present tense so I'm still working my way through it.

It was a very fun and enjoyable challenge, thank you!

Thanks for the review!

-Karou


 Report Review

Review #3, by Rumpelstiltskin Redemption

16th March 2014:
I'm back with the Blackout (number 12/20)! I also have a new reviewing style that should prevent most (or some) of my rambling!

Plot/plot arch: That strange light in the beginning definitely has me curious. Then I was reading through the rest, with Harry watching the newborn, contemplating a name. I was wondering what this had to do with Voldemort's redemption, and then I figured that this was just a transition chapter. Of course, then it hit me at the end -- Voldemort came back as Albus Severus Potter! Brilliant.

Characterization: Ginny -- I have to admit that Ginny hasn't always been my favorite character, though I can appreciate her as a character and as a strong female. I do like the way you've characterized her here; I think being a mother suits her. Harry -- He's very sweet in this, watching the newborn. Harry will be a fantastic father ♥ !

Detail: While there wasn't much detail in the beginning, the ending was perfect. Though, you may have excluded a majority of the detail in the beginning to allow the text to flow faster, which is understandable because bulking up with too many descriptors can slow your flow too much sometimes. I did enjoy the flow, so I think your amount of detail was decided nicely.

Emotion: Anticipation, for one! I'm shocked that Voldemort came back as Albus, though the light with James could mean that a piece of him is in James as well.

Other/notes: This is where I've allowed space for me to ramble. I don't know whether to be frightened or excited that Voldemort came back as the children! It is definitely interesting, to say the least, and it is certainly an original idea, as I can safely say I've never read anything like this before. Anyway, great job!

-Rumpel

Author's Response: Hi there! Well done on finding a structure that works for you, I've been through loads. ;)

Not quite. Voldemort/Tom appeared as green light, as a reference to the Heir of Slytherin. Dumbledore was the white light, because "Albus" means white.

Thanks. I always imagine Harry being the overprotective, extremely loving father, just because that's everything he didn't have (through no fault of James's, though).

Thanks for taking the time to review!

-Karou


 Report Review

Review #4, by PolyJuice_ Redemption

13th March 2014:
BLACKOUT BATTLE~ 8/20

I'm back for chapter two!

Oh my gosh, BPT. That is so Harry and Ginny! Sheesh you two, of course you'd have a nickname for the unnamed baby.

Anyway, poor James and Bluey! BUT OH MY GOSH. YOU SO DID NOT. YOU DID FREAKING NOT. DID YOU HAVE LORD VOLDEMORT REINCARNATE AS JAMES POTTER THE SECOND?

AND EVEN BETTER, DID YOU HAVE DUMBLEDORE REINCARNATE AS ALBUS SEVERUS POTTER? OH MY GOSH. YOU TOTALLY DID.

Sorry, all I can do is flail around. Wow, okay, now I'm totally loving this story.

If you'd have just told me the plot I'd have been a bit skeptical, but the way you wrote it really brought it to like, and made is completely believable.

Anyway, once again, looking forward to the next chapter! Great story, it's on my currently reading list so I can keep up with it!

Liz

Author's Response: Hallo! Sorry it took me a while to respond, I was reviewing for the Battle!

I know, it's just so...Potterish. (That's probably not a real word, but it should be.)

OH MY GOSH. YES. YES, I TOTALLY DID. Kinda. Sorta. Basically. [Shut up, self, you'll give away the plot].

I'm glad you like it! I'm still trying to figure out the best way to do this, so next chapter might take a while, but then it might not... It all depends on when I get another inspiration boost.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

-Karou


 Report Review

Review #5, by PolyJuice_ Onwards

13th March 2014:
Blackout battle~ 7/20

Oh my goodness. This was absolutely fabulous. I've yet to see anyone describe the afterlife like this! *adds to currently reading*

I can't wait to see where you're going with this.

As soon as Dumbledore mentioned an old childhood friend I gasped. I KNEW I WAS GONNA BE GRINDEWALD. Aw, poor Dumbledore, of course he's still holding on to that.

I never thought of why or how Dumbledore was waiting for Harry, and it was cool to see your take.

This will forever be my headcanon!

The way Voldemort morphed back into Tom was so sweet. I'm glad he got his redemption.

Anyway, simply wonderful work!

Liz

Author's Response: Oh my goodness. Thank you so much! This afterlife was based on the one Jo wrote in DH, only I hanged the setting because I figured Voldemort/Tom would have a different setting.

I'm glad you could tell! I was pretty sure people would know but I jus had to slip his name in somewhere, just in case (because I am always that person who needs to read the character list to find who they're referencing :P).

Thank you so much for the amazing review!

-Karou :)


 Report Review

Review #6, by Rumpelstiltskin Onwards

6th March 2014:
I'm here for Blackout Bingo (number 6/15 of square 2, to keep track)!

I really like that Voldemort is envisioning the lake at Hogwarts in his vision of the "afterworld" or whathaveyou. Like Dumbledore explains, it's really significant to the possibility that Voldemort yearns for a time before his reign, when he was young and good and at home at Hogwarts. When he was denied the Defense Against the Dark Arts position upon graduating, it's almost as though his home had been ripped out from under him. It's understandable why THIS would be his vision, as well as many others, as Hogwarts was a second home to many students.

Redemption, Voldemort has a chance at redemption which is not something you would typically see in a fanfiction, so I'm loving this original idea.

I hope I have more time soon to continue reading this, as it seems extremely interesting!

-Rumpel

Author's Response: Hey there!

Voldemort's not as unique as he thinks. Everyone loves Hogwarts (who wouldn't?) and he's no different.

I hope you like my idea of his redemption...I feel it's slightly controversial but I know why I made it that way.

Thank you!

-Karou


 Report Review

Review #7, by Jimmy Cortex Onwards

22nd February 2014:
Moving, sincere, deep. Where is the next chapter??

Author's Response: Thanks so much :). The next chapter is in the queue, so it'll be up soon!

-Karou


 Report Review
If this is your story and you wish to respond to reviews, please login