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Review #1, by MargaretLane The Study

31st July 2014:
I think you've really captured the speech pattern of a 1920s British police officer. The Chief Inspector really sounds like a police officer out of Agatha Christie.

Hmm, this is intriguing. I think there's a lot more going on here than the whole situation between Orla and the murder victim.

That comment about "poor Esther" is intriguing. I wonder why it is Esther who concerns her. I guess the siblings are close.

I'm now getting somewhat suspicious of Esther. Least likely person and all that.

Author's Response: Wow! Thank you- I was worried he sounded a bit too modern, but wow.

Oh, there is definitely is a lot more going on :3

You'll get to meet Esther in the next chapter and you'll get to see what that's all about.

Oooh, my first guess! How exciting :D

x Ely

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Review #2, by MargaretLane The Library

31st July 2014:
*laughs* It was the DATE that initially attracted me to this story. 1922 being the year my country received its independence, sort of anyway. And then I say a murder mystery. *grins* Another Agatha Christie fan here. So I have to read this.

And on the day this story takes place, Civil War is brewing just across the Irish sea. That is literally the week it really begins.

There is a real Agatha Christie flavour to this story already, what with the wealthy young men playing sports in the grounds of the manor. And of course the mention of the library.

Really interested to see where you are going with this.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you did!

That really means a lot to me- the Agatha Christie thing, I tried really hard to make it seem Agatha-y, so thank you.

x Ely

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Review #3, by Rumpelstiltskin The Library

12th April 2014:
Hey there! I'm here with a challenge review :).

Plot/plot arch: The introduction was lovely, as it established a detailed scene of what would become the murder scene. It also introduced the pure-blood family, the Shafiq family, and established a possible murder motive. There were three people in the alcove: a man and a woman -- appearing to be possible lovers -- and a third person, who is the murderer. That's a lot to do in slightly over 10 lines, so great job with that! Ah, then we move on to some Black family ancestors -- that's always fun. After some brief and effective character introductions, so that we know what's going on and who everyone is, we discover that Orla's been attacked. It also seems as though Hoyt has been the one murdered in that library alcove. Oh, what fun! I can't wait to see what happens next!

Characterization: Arcturus -- the oldest brother, meaning he is the heir to the Black nobility. From what I can gather, he seems like a properly-raised pureblood and a decent person. Regulus -- as the younger brother, he seems a bit more freely expressive. I believe it was from Arcturus' perspective that we learn that the younger sibling is 'too charming for his own good' (I may be paraphrasing). I do love the brotherly love between the two! Lycoris -- oh, the poor sister, being over-protected by her brothers. These three siblings appear to have a very tight relationship, which I love.

Detail: You did an amazing job at providing enough information about the characters and the situation so that I understood what was going on where and with whom, but you've also left out just enough so that I'm absolutely puzzled by the murder. Who did it? Which is exactly what I am supposed to be asking at this point. Fantastic job.

Style: You've definitely given this the murder-mystery feel! I also think you've captured the dialogue and language of the time period for an upper-class family (or two families, in this case).

Notes/other: At any rate, this was a fantastic start. There's so much potential and I can't wait to see where you're going to take this!


Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review!

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Review #4, by Cannons The Library

2nd March 2014:
Hi, I'm reviewing this for 'Blackout Bingo'

At first I got a bit confused as to why Regulus would be alive in 1922 but I soon checked that out and now I understand!

I always like a good mystery which is why I clicked on this. I like the choice of name for Shafiq it sounds very grand and defiantly someone the Blacks would associate themselves with.

Your description was really good, especially in the first paragraph it was a brilliant introduction to the story, really grabbing the reader in.

I love the competition between the two brothers, it seems so natural.

Good luck in the challenge


Author's Response: I completely forgot to clarify that in my Authors Note, so thank you for pointing that out!

I'm really glad you liked it. It really means a lot to me, and thank you for the lovely review.

x Ely

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