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Review #1, by LoopyLiesey Lonely Moonlit Sonnet

21st April 2014:
Ahhh, Wolfstar Remus in the lost years. One of most heartbreaking things in this angsty heartwrenching ship. This is nicely written. I could feel poor Remus' pain, and the memories were a nice touch. I really enjoyed it, though I might have a few tears in my eyes now, as this character and this ship is wont to do. Very well done.

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Review #2, by LovlyRita Lonely Moonlit Sonnet

24th February 2014:
Hi Mike! I've come to leave you a review on your story! Well, I liked this, it was really a nice story that you wrote in such a short amount of time. I love that you chose to write about Remus and Sirius because they are probably my favorite slash pairing, so I enjoyed seeing that.

His pain was so sad here, you could really see Remus struggling, trying to really grapple with what had happened and it was completely believable that he would be struggling with something like this, of course he would. I liked the visuals that you used, of him staring at the floorboards and such. I think it was such a devastatingly sad story, which you had warned me that it would be.

And truly, you feel how absolutely alone Remus is as he goes into his transformation and doesn't want to be alone, would give anything for those times gone past when he could change and have his friends beside him. It's really heartbreaking and you did a good job portraying that.

But quickly I want to talk about you as a writer and how much you have improved since the last time I read your work which was, admittedly, a while ago. It has matured so much. Your descriptions are SO much more vivid than they used to be. When you said at the beginning that the weather was "Drowsy" I just LOVED that, it was a perfect description. You've really done a magnificent job of explaining his feelings and thoughts, and your ideas are laid out so well. It is SUCH an improvement. And more than that, I think you understand interpersonal relationships better than you used to, which of course just comes with growing up and making more friends and stuff, but you really have improved so. SO much in the last few years. Sincerely, this is a great piece of work and I am excited to see the things that you do when you're not under the time constraints of a day and can really play with your words. Well done Mike!! :)

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