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Review #1, by TrickyTarantulas Loop

7th June 2014:
Wonderful. I'm too tired to say much else, but that was beautiful and I enjoyed how you managed to make it deep and meaningful while keeping it simple. Kudos to you and your lack of life because it made my Friday night that much better. Keep on writing!

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Review #2, by balinagina Loop

8th March 2014:
I never really gave one shots a chance because the few I came across haven't been good. I wasn't in the mood to get into a long story tonight so I gave this a go and I'm so happy I did. It's brilliant, satisfied my dramoine reads :D I loved it, this is one of my favorites.

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed the story!

- CandiFloss


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Review #3, by LittleLionGirl Loop

2nd March 2014:
Hello CandiFloss. I am here reviewing for Slytherin in the forum black-out challenge. Holy one shot bat-girl! That was really good- but it was so long. I think it would have improved if you broke it up into maybe three chapters- that way you could expand a bit on each rather than a long story made into segments. I especially liked the end because that is how I picture Hermione and Draco acting if they were together. The story over all was really well done! Hope you had as much fun writing it as I had reading it!
XOXOXOX,
LLG

Author's Response: Aw, thanks! It WAS really long, wasn't it? That wasn't my original intention, but the story took on a mind of its own and became a monster :P. I personally don't enjoy three-shots with installments that I have to wait for, so I just decided to screw it and post it all at once. Sorry if that bothered you :/.
Thanks for reviewing! If you don't mind, could you PM me and explain how this forum black-out challenge works? I'm new to this site and I'd love to get involved in this sort of thing!
Thanks :)

- CandiFloss


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Review #4, by quirkycharm Loop

21st February 2014:
I absolutely loved this! It was beautiful and subtle and heart rending and sigh... I just loved it.

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! Your review made my day :)

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Review #5, by LaLaLuna Loop

19th February 2014:
I'll be honest, Dramione isn't usually my cup of tea. It has to be a really, really good story to convince me to abandon canon. (which is why I usually read NextGen)But this was a really, really good Dramione. I loved it. The present tense was a bit jarring at times, but overall I thought it represented the jarring and raw urgency that Hermione faced in her life. Draco... oh my gosh I ADORED Draco. He was so raw and pained and a deep, deep character. I love your portrayal of him. I love the fact that he was a jerk to Hermione at the beginning, loved the fact that you didn't make him abandon his snarkiness too soon, and I LOVE LOVE LOVE his reason for defecting. He was just so... raw when he was telling that story. I really don't know how else to describe it. The Unbreakable Vow, I thought, was really good way of having him prove his loyalty, especially to Ron (who was so canon in his distrust of Draco - love!) Also, the dialogue was so realistic. The interactions between Harry and Hermione at the beginning particularly reminded me of the Deathly Hallows symbol scene in DH, and the dialogue in the flashback was so realistic. I loved it.
I find it rather funny that your voice changes slightly from Scorose to Dramione. (I find it even funnier that I notice. You think spending your Friday nights writing fanfiction is bad - I spend my Friday nights analyzing the changing voice of fanfiction writers on the internet.) It may be the change from past to present tense or the change from NextGen to Post-Hogwarts, or the different ship, but your voice sounds much more like Hermione here than Rose.
Then, of course, there's the stuff I tell you every time, and I keep telling you because it's so true of each of your stories and chapters. The description. I loved the description with a passion that rivals Snape's for Lily. Seriously. You could write me NOVELS just describing people and places and emotions and the like and I would devour it. And the paragraph breaks you use really make the piece, especially the lines you single out, so much more poignant. This part in particular really stood out to me:
She laughs and the sound is dissonant to her. Gently, she takes the cup away from him and the smile lingers on her face as she looks into his eyes. His face is haggard, just like hers, but somehow still beautiful. The dim golden light emanating from the candles highlights his features: his pale, tousled hair, his mouth settled into a drowsy pout, his silver eyes that glitter in the inky darkness.

She's hit with an abrupt realization that pierces her heart like a lightning bolt.

Merlin's beard.

She's fallen in love with Draco Malfoy.
It was just so emotional and descriptive and... I loved it. Gorgeous.
So, yes. The only thing wrong with this story is that Rose and Scorpius can't be born, which means no Scorose. :( The pacing was brilliant, the description vivid, and the characterization done beautifully. I think I'm going to have to steal Draco from Hermione now...
Love,
LaLa

Author's Response: 'asldkfjiaosdhjgfi'
In case you couldn't tell, that was my jaw dropping onto the keyboard in response to your review.
HOLY CRAP, JUST WHEN I THOUGHT YOU COULDN'T GET ANY MORE AMAZING!
Honestly, when I logged in today, I wasn't in the best mood ever; I've had a pretty rough week (my boyfriend and I broke up), and I didn't even want to look at any of the love stories I'd written before. But then I read this and, I say this with 100% sincerity, you made my day. Thank you sososo much for that.
I was actually kind of worried about this story ... like you said, Dramione is a tricky pairing to pull off. I love D&H together, but it's really rare to read a story where their relationship develops realistically. I actually don't think my story succeeded completely with this, but thank you so much for telling me that you thought it was good enough for you to enjoy the pairing.
The present-tense was odd at times for me, as well. I actually wrote half the story in past tense like normal before I realized that, with the pacing and the ambiance, present-tense just seemed more effective. Sorry if it seemed jarring occasionally :/.
GAH AND THE REST OF YOUR REVIEW. I LITERALLY HAVE NO WORDS. Thank you, so, so much. I always loved Draco as a character (and was always a little resentful that JKR didn't develop him as much as I wanted her to), so I love the fact that you liked his character :).
Again, I can't thank you enough for your review. You're amazing, your feedback is lovely, and even if I feel like I don't deserve all your praise, it's nevertheless bloody brilliant to read.
THANK YOU. THANK YOU SO MUCH. PLEASE, STAY THIS AWESOME. ALWAYS.

- CandiFloss


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Review #6, by Chazzie Loop

18th February 2014:
Awww :) it was so cute, despite being really sad at some points. Your dialogue was excellent, and realistic. And I love Draco, so brownie points!

Author's Response: GAH thank you so much! Dialogue is usually tricky for me, so I'm super excited that you thought it was done well! And no way... I love Draco too :P.
Thanks for reviewing! You're awesome!

- CandiFloss


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