Reading Reviews for Champagne Supernovas
  
6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by ScarletEye158 Step One: A Grand Entrance

25th May 2014:
Hey Sathya! Here with the review exchange :)

This was a really cute start to your story! I love fluff, and I already feel connected to it and excited to see what happens!

I also have a character named Alice Longbottom in 2 of my stories, so seeing you portray her differently than I do is really cool :) I never would have pegged Alice as liking History of Magic - usually you would think that Herbology would be the class that Alice would like so it's interesting to see how different of a person she is and how she isn't like her father in that way :) I'm excited to see how her character develops and if she opens up about herself to Freddie!

It was kind of sad how Freddie didn't realize who Alice was right away, haha. Poor girl must feel so invisible! I'm glad that he finally figured out who she was though. How ironic the only girl in the library was somebody who he kind of knew :p

I wonder if Freddie is going to go back and read the other steps in the book or if he's going to wing it and try talking to Alice by himself? It should be interesting to see if he's able to get her as a date for Valentines Day! :D

all in all, this was a really nice start to your story and I can't wait to read what happens next :)


-Amanda

Author's Response: Hello Amanda!

I'm so sorry for taking this long to respond to your wonderful review! I haven't updated this story for a while and this was the perfect motivation to get me back on track!

I think Alice Longbottom has almost become canon by now, but I'm totally checking out those two stories! I know, Alice being Neville's daughter and all would have probably liked Herbology too, but I thought this would be an interesting twist. Plus no one likes History of Magic, so I was curious to see how that would pan out.

I sort of know how Alice would feel, being in a school with so many children in my class. It's really easy to forget names when you have 150 of them to remember! Still, the two of them are practically family friends so I'm just going to peg it down to Freddie's terrible memory when it comes to names :P

You should totally come back when the next chapter's up to see if some of your great questions are answered. I'm not going to spoil it for you yet!

Thanks so much for all the words of encouragement and your opinion, as I mentioned earlier it was the perfect catalyst to get me back to writing the story!


 Report Review

Review #2, by Freda_and_Georgina Step Two: A Good Appearance

2nd April 2014:
This story is so neat! I can't wait until the next chapter! Why does it have to be a cliff hanger??

I was surprised that Binns noticed that Alice wasn't paying him any attention; my impression of Binns from the series is that he's completely oblivious to what's going on (since it's not uncommon for students to doze off.)

I've really enjoyed this story, I really hope you finish it!

Author's Response: Oh my god! I finally come back to the archive and I have two of your lovely reviews waiting for me?! Thanks so much!
Haha, sorry about the cliffhanger. I couldn't resist. I guess that Alice was generally a very attentive student, perhaps the only one in his class, so Binns generally directed his lectures to her. Hence, when she wasn't paying attention, he really felt miffed. At least that's the sort of thing that happens in my history class ;) My teacher is always oblivious to sleeping students as long as there's one or two of us who are paying attention. I'm so glad that you enjoyed this story, it will eventually be updated once I get over my procrastination :P
Thanks so much for the review!!


 Report Review

Review #3, by LightLeviosa5443 Step Two: A Good Appearance

20th February 2014:
Awe! This chapter was so cute!

I mean, aside from Freddie getting beat up. I really liked the way that you had Freddie change the way he was dressing, the way he found Alice, and then sat in Alice's class and just studied her. Even the way he smiled when he was knocked out by Edgecombe.

I think that the whole interaction between them in HoM was so cute, and the way that she got all quiet and apologized but he bantered back with Binns when they were called out was perfect.

Let me know when you update this, I'll definitely read more! It's a cute concept and I'm really enjoying the story!

Good Luck!! Thanks for entering!

xoxo Sarah

Author's Response: Hey! Sorry for taking so long to respond!

I'm glad you liked this chapter. Freddie and Alice are turning out to be so adorable in my head that I cannot help giggling to myself whenever I write a chapter about them. This leads to a lot of strange looks being thrown my way but hey, who even cares?

I'll definitely let you know when the next chapter comes out, which should hopefully be pretty soon as long as my procrastination doesn't get in the way. I'm so happy that you are enjoying the story and I hope that your response to the chapters to come will mirror it!

Thanks once again for coming up with the lovely challenge!


 Report Review

Review #4, by LightLeviosa5443 Step One: A Grand Entrance

20th February 2014:
Hi!

I'm (finally) going through all of my challenge entries! Sorry it took me so long!

This chapter was great! I think you did a really wonderful job, explaining Freddie and why he was in the library, him walking over to Alice and talking to her. Then helping her, that was fantastic. I really love the way she interacted with him too. This is really well-written.

I liked the way that you managed to cover a sort of back story for us, but you didn't take up a bunch of words or give us too much information. Just enough so we could meet Freddie, feel bad for him, and then laugh when he walked up to Alice to try his hand at flirting. I think it's so funny that he spread puking pasties, and screamed across the potions room to talk to James, and enlarged a garden gnome. All of those were tiny details that were just so perfect!

Great job! I can't wait to read chap. 2!!

xoxo Sarah

Author's Response: Aw, Sarah. Thanks for these lovely reviews and giving my second prize for this story! I still cannot believe it :)
I'm very happy that you liked the plot and the characters. This is a new venture in fluff for me, so I was really nervous about posting this chapter. I'm thrilled by the positive reception and thanks for all your encouraging words!


 Report Review

Review #5, by ohmymerlin Step One: A Grand Entrance

10th February 2014:
Hey, there! I'm here from my review thread and I'm so sorry about the delay in this! Real life can be a meany sometimes!

You said that this was your first fluff and don't worry, it definitely doesn't come across like that! You've definitely got the fluff-amount quite good already!

Fred seems like a loveable character! And him being a bit jealous of James is extremely typical of a fifteen year old boy, so kudos!

Also, Alice is just great! I love how shocked Freddie got when he realised that her favourite subject is History of Magic. I loved her quote, "Practicality means nothing in the matters of love." That's brilliant!

Also, I think this is my favourite sentence ever: That lady could be so interruptive without even uttering a word.

So far there doesn't seem to be any plot holes, which is something you asked for so I don't think you'll need to worry about that!

This is a really good first chapter. You've brought the plot in without making it too fast and you've explained most of the main characters' personalities but I never felt too overwhelmed with information so good job!

I don't really have much to say about this chapter except that you've written it really well and believable and I'm intrigued as to what's going to happen with lil Freddie and Alice :p

Feel free to request again!

- Kayla :)

Author's Response: Please don't feel bad about taking a long time to review for I have taken even longer to respond! I agree, life is the biggest meanie there is. I feel so embarrassed right now because I usually am so prompt with responding, but anyway thanks for this utterly wonderful and helpful review!

Freddie is supposed to come across as a typical teenager with absolutely no clue about anything involving love. I'm so glad that you like him already! Alice is probably a character I can relate to a lot. It's sort of like I've put a piece of myself into her. I'm very happy that you think of her as a great character. That quote of hers is something that I'm especially proud of :)

Haha, you liked the quote about Madam Pince! Thanks a lot. I think that sentence roughly sums up Freddie thoughts towards the librarian!

I'm absolutely relieved at the thought of no plot holes. Now I just have to watch out for them in the chapters to come. Thanks for this incredibly motivational review!


 Report Review

Review #6, by adluvshp Step One: A Grand Entrance

5th February 2014:
Hi! Here for your requested review from the forums!

I actually really liked this opening chapter to your story! It definitely sets a fun mood and I like Freddie already. I did feel a little sorry for him that James gets all the attention and Freddie is usually the sidekick though, poor lad. I enjoyed how he found the book and immediately started to test step one - desperate times call for desperate measures haha. I also like Alice's character so far. In fact, I am already rooting for Alice & Freddie, they seem very adorable.

I think this is definitely a great way to start off your story and I am curious to see how it progresses. Sometimes, it's nice to get a break from all the heavy stuff and enjoy the fluffiness as Valentine's Day draws nearer xD

This is just the first chapter so it's difficult for me to say about plot holes yet, but the pace seems okay so far, and this is definitely an interesting plot. Nothing is confusing so far.

I noticed a few grammar errors here and there. Two I picked up on are:

"The practically worshipped him..." - I think "the" should be "they" here!

And

"The finally girl relented, unable to.." - this is a bit awkwardly worded. Perhaps you meant "The girl finally relented".

Apart from that, didn't see any obvious errors =)

So far, this is a good piece of writing and I am looking forward to more so feel free to re-request when the next chapter is posted.

Cheers,
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hello! Sorry for taking this long to reply to such a lovely review! I'm glad that the story served as a nice fluffy break for you, I'm rather new to the genre so I'm happy you liked it! I will get down to fixing those errors (gah, why do I have to be so bad at spelling and grammar?) and thanks so much for pointing those out. It makes my job so much easier :)

Whew! Thank Merlin for no confusion and plot hole so far, I was pretty worried about that. Thanks once again for this amazing review and I will definitely re-request once the next chapter is up!


 Report Review
If this is your story and you wish to respond to reviews, please login