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Review #1, by DracoFerret11 Scars

11th July 2014:
Hello there! This is DarkRose from the forums here to review for you for the House Cup 2014! :D So, let's go over things:

Plot: This was sweet story! I liked how you set up their friendship. The brief explanation was enough for this story, though I still wish I'd had more information. The one problem I had with the plot was that it seemed to suddenly change about halfway through. Rather than Hermione comforting Draco or him comforting her, suddenly they were leaping all over each other, and the mood completely changed. It didn't make much sense, and I can't say I really liked that.

Characterization: I could believe that Hermione would go to comfort her friend when he was upset. That made sense. And Draco's self-loathing also made sense. The ending, however, just came out of left field for me. I could believe a kiss between them, but then they were all over each other and Draco was seducing her and...it just really didn't sit right with me. The things leading up to it didn't justify that scene.

Descriptions: I didn't really feel like I got enough details in this chapter to really experience the story. I wasn't able to see, hear, smell, feel, etc. the surroundings or characters or any of that. Those details would have helped me, though, so perhaps adding them in could help.

Emotions: I liked Hermione and Draco's emotions in this story. I think his self-loathing made sense, and her support was very sweet. Their sudden romance was the only part that didn't make much sense.

For the most part, I liked the story. It moved too quickly, in my opinion, but I liked the premise. Good job!

--Emily (House Cup 2014 Review)

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Review #2, by HeyMrsPotter Scars

7th July 2014:
Hello!

This is a really sweet story full of my favourite pairing! I liked the conversation between Hermione and Draco in the bathroom, and I definitely think that post-war Draco would seek redemption. Him getting upset over his Dark Mark is something I can really imagine happening so it made for a really realistic interaction between the pair. I like that you write about them becoming friends, and I totally agree that they would challenge each other both emotionally and intellectually.

Their kiss was really well written and full of passion, I would have liked if this had been a little longer though. I think Hermione gave in really quickly at the end, going from stopping the kiss to telling him to kiss her again. Maybe a longer conversation inbetween that would help :)

Dee -House Cup 2014 review, Educational Decree number 2.

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Review #3, by i love Emma Watson Scars

3rd February 2014:
this was a cute storie an i love it a lot it was fantastic

Author's Response: Thank you!!

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