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Review #1, by milominderbinder Telling the Family

2nd February 2014:
Hi hon! Maia from the Modern Romance challenge here :D

Wow, I really liked this! This was such a nice take on an original and modern relationship. Of the entries I've read so far, a lot of them have addressed gender, and one was about unconventional parenting, so an age gap was a really fascinating thing to address. It's true that there can be a lot of stigma about an older girl than guy in a relationship, but I honestly think I've never read anything about it.

Another thing that stuck out about this was that by making Lorcan younger, you actually stuck better to canon than most people do - or, at least, to what JK has named as her personal 'canon', when she said that Luna would have waited longer than her friends to have kids. I think a lot of people tend to ignore that for convenience, just making Lorcan and Lysander the same sort of age as most of the Weasley kids, because it's easier to pair them up then, and get some variety of friendships that isn't just between the cousins. But it was very interesting and it worked really well that you did decide to make them younger, and I liked it a lot.

Lily and Lorcan seemed really sweet together as well. I would have loved to see more of their relationship, but in a way, the short snippet was perfect, because it just showed this tiny cute glimpse into their relationship.

Luna was great. I love how she knew about it already, and how she was the one Lorcan turned to when he was so nervous. I always pictured Luna being really close to her kids and a very loving and hands-on parent, so you really played to my headcanon there and it was really nice to read.

Overall I loved this! It was short but really sweet, with great characterisation, and addressed a very real and underwritten issue in an interesting way. Thanks so much for entering my challenge!


Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad you liked it. I have to admit that it isn't my best, but it's been a while since I wrote any for HPFF. I really loved your contest idea though, and once I read it this just came to me. Thanks again.

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Review #2, by kenpo Telling the Family

28th January 2014:
Hey, I saw your post on the forums and thought I'd check this out.

I really liked this! I thought it was short, but sweet. That would be my only complaint; I wish that there was more!

I really like the idea of all the families getting together and being included. His nervousness is justified - it'd be hard enough to make any sort of announcement to that family, let alone one that might not be taken well (although I think they'd all be fine with it!).

The small amount of interaction we got between Lorcan and Lily was darling. It seems like they make a lovely couple. And then I loved Luna's interaction with her son. "My little worrier", how cute.

Like I've said, overall, I thought this was a cute little one-shot! Good luck with the challenge and welcome back to writing!

Author's Response: Yeah, I think they will be fine with it, but Lorcan is just nervous cause,well, of the family it is and because he's younger than her. I'm glad you liked it, especially the 'little worrier' part, I was hoping someone would catch it. Thank you for the review!

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Review #3, by Akussa Telling the Family

28th January 2014:
Hello!! And you call yourself rusty? I'm working hard on my next story after a over a year without writting and it's nowhere near as fluid and nice as yours!

I absolutely loved this small piece into Lorcan's world. He is clearly very much in love with Lily and, no matter if there is an age difference or a race difference or gender... it's always, always difficult to let the people you know about your relationship because of the fear of being rejected. You showed that so well and we could feel his fear.

Luna is just so amazingly well characterised. With this one sentence, she managed to calm everything down; it was just beautifully done.

I loved this little story a lot; it touched me deeply. I couldn't notice any spelling or grammar errors either.

Oh and Lorcan truly is Luna's son with his vivid imagination; it made me chuckle :) Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you like it. I have been writing some, but it hasn't been this type of story and well, I really think I've let my quality slip a bit. But you're review made me feel great, so thank you so much!

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Review #4, by toomanycurls Telling the Family

28th January 2014:

This is a completely sweet story! I love the fit of nervousness and the build up to Lorcan and Lily announcing that they're together. I wouldn't consider their relationship to be bizarre but I tend not to think people have strange relationships (unless they're unhappy in which case the entire relationship seems weird). I like that you left the actual announcement out of the story. It gave me something to imagine after the story ended.


Author's Response: I know a lot of people who think it's weird when the guy is younger than the girl, but that is a wonderful view to have. And thank you, I actually debated on if I should put it in there or not.

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