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Review #1, by LightLeviosa5443 Farewells

18th March 2014:
Hi! I'm here for the BvB review battle!

I keep seeing you post about this new story because I've been interested in reading it, so I figured review battle was the perfect opportunity to get my butt in gear!

I really enjoyed this chapter and the fun feel you gave this story. It was really cute seeing how Lucy interacted with everyone in her family and the goodbyes. I also love that you chose Lucy. She's definitely a cousin that deserves to get some more face time. And bravo on throwing Louis in there, too. He definitely needs some more love!!

I felt so bad for Lucy when I realized that her parents didn't show up. It was heartbreaking, and I can see how that would sort of taint her night, even though everyone else is so supportive and loving. I also really really enjoyed the way that you made Lucy so close to Molly.

I think that part was super duper cute and believable. You were dropping some hints about other ships in there and I had a "oh, yeah?" moment. Haha, I can't wait to see where you go with this story!!

Great job!

xoxo Sarah

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Review #2, by Lululuna Farewells

1st February 2014:
Hello! :)

Yay, I love how you're writing about dragons! That's a really cool way to tie into the Awareness challenge, and I'm so curious to see how this goes and what Lucy's first impressions of dragons are like. I can't even imagine how awesome that would be, although I suppose it would be dangerous as well, as Lucy has pointed out.

It's really sad how her parents aren't supportive of her choice, and while I understand how they might be worried and/or disappointed it seemed very low of them not to see her off. But I love how supportive Molly and her friends and cousins are.

I love how Lucy's dream has been to ride on a dragon, and now it might come true. The descriptions at the beginning of her imagining how it might be were just really wonderful. I liked how you explained how dragons are in danger as well, and how people think they're dangerous but also want to use them and hunt them - a little like poaching in the real world, I suppose.

I thought of one thing - is Lucy Apparating straight to Romania, or is the picture of the building a place where there is a Portkey waiting for her? If she's Apparating straight to Romania, then couldn't she quite easily pop back and forth to visit? :)

Lucy just seems really wonderful and brave. I love how certain she is of her dream, and how she's clearly worked very hard to get there and will keep working hard. She seems like a great character, and I'm so excited to find out more about dragon politics and meet some dragons! :D

This was a great start! :)

Author's Response: Hi!

Thanks for the wonderful review! You always leave some of the best! Thanks so so much!

-Janelle


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Review #3, by Maelody Farewells

31st January 2014:
Wow.

That was good.

Real good.

I think I've instantly fallen in love with this story! You've followed the theme of your topic and explained it just perfectly in the first chapter alone! It was beautiful, heart-wrenchingly sad, humorous, and sweet all at the same time! I love how she explains just what it is that makes her want to go, and that even though her parents are upset with her, she's still going.

Every character, though brief, had amazing personalities and they were very easy to like! I really hope to get to see them soon because I too will already miss them.

This story gave me goosebumps from the one-liner at the beginning to the very end. A smile never left my face, even though a bit of it made me really sad. :( you've already started this challenge excellently and I cannot WAIT to see more of it! Great job!

~Mae

Author's Response: Mae!

Thanks so so much for this wonderful review! It made me so happy! I'm relieved that you liked it, and that I did a good job following the theme of my topic--that was a bit of a challenge, I must say. But I finally came up with the solution, and I am thrilled to find that you like it!

Thanks!

-Janelle


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Review #4, by Rumpelstiltskin Farewells

30th January 2014:
I'm here for our swap :).

I am beyond in love with one-line openers. Seriously, it's like an infatuation. I think it impacts a story so much, setting a tone or mood in one little, powerful sentence. You've done a fantastic job with that little one-liner!

The rest of the introduction was pretty awesome as well. First of all, dragons! Oh, I love dragons (just another childhood obsession of mine-- naturally I've collected Dragonology books), so I can empathize with the character. Secondly, I love how you transitioned from a child-like view of dragons (dreaming of flying on their backs, being free, etc.) to the adult-version of the dragon interest (wanting to help them, train them, etc.). It's just like Hermione to enforce a law to protect something (even dragons). Hermione is good people ;).

:D The last-minute run-about-the-house-to-make-sure-I-have-everything episode was humorous, topped with a mini-freakout. That made me laugh...don't forget to say goodbye! Then, of course, those good-byes were heart-wrenching and beautiful!

Rule number one of working with dragons: do not, under any circumstances, go to work intoxicated ;). Ha.

Anyway, this was a fantastic start! And, hooray, dragons! I'll definitely be interested in reading the next chapter :D.

-Rumpel

Author's Response: Rumpel!

Thanks for such an AMAZING review! It means so much! I'm relieved you enjoyed this story! I'm looking for a beta...;D

I'm so relieved I wrote her well, as well as the whole dragon idea. That's one of my main concerns!

Humor is going to be a big part of this story, so those two particular things were just like a preview!

Thanks so so so much!

-Janelle


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Review #5, by Iellwen Farewells

30th January 2014:
Review swap!!


First off, indeed a great idea. Taming dragons is an awesome job! :D What a great adventure Lucy is going to go through!!

Secondly, I love how you introduce your character - and the way you do not define Lucy's gender. At. All. (Or did I actually miss some obvious pointers?)
I tend to think Lucy's a girl because of the name and the jewelry, but after, like, 3 reads, I started my own conspiracy theory about your story. I love it!^^


I noticed 'as I ask my question.'; it's a bit redundant, I think "as I ask" would be enough? :)
But that would be the only bug that caught my eyes along the read^^


I'm really looking forward to the next chapter and Romania - and dragons!! ^^

Cheers!

Author's Response: Hey!

thanks so so much! I honestly didn't realize I didn't define Lucy's gender. Whoops? Haha. But if it isn't an issue I see no reason not to change it.

I'll change that sentence.

And yes I can't wait either! You'll get to meet Lucy and HER sarcastic, snarky self!

Thanks!

-Janelle


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