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Review #1, by TheHeirOfSlytherin I'll Love You Long After You're Gone, Gone, Gone

20th May 2014:
Hey!

Sam here for the Slytherin review exchange. :D

I was filled with such hope in the beginning of this story - not a lot because of the title and the song, but I wanted to hope. The girl Blaise wanted was finally looking at him and things were looking good and it was nice.

The way he feels for her, the want to look after her and protect her, was so sweet. It made me so happy for them.

Then the end comes and he can't look at the pictures and there's a little girl who looks and acts so much like Charlotte that it must kill Blaise a little. But he's such an awesome daddy. I only have one question: how is she gone? Which is a question you probably expect. It's not like I'm confused or anything about you omitting it, it's more like, "Why was she taken away when they were so happy?" *cue tears*

Finally, a Blaise story! I love Blaise! I'm so glad you wrote about Blaise!

I loved reading this. Hopefully, I'll be back soon. :)

Sam.

Author's Response: Hello Sam!

I am sorry there was not much room for hope with the title and song chosen. I really had no other way around it- the song has so much hope and love in it but I had to take it away for the makings of a decent tale. I really hope I did make you cry! (I have a bad habit of doing that...) I actually have written about Blaise quite a bit, I just never post the stories. Thanks for reviewing Sam!

XOXOXO,
LLG


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Review #2, by Rumpelstiltskin I'll Love You Long After You're Gone, Gone, Gone

25th January 2014:
Hello! Here for our swap!

Ah Blaise, one of my favorite characters from the Hogwarts Era (at least on the fanfiction level). I took the liberty of listening to the song while I read (and it was a lovely song, by the way). I think you set the mood for the story properly to fit the song.

Blaise is super endearing in this-- I love that. Oh, and then little Bella stole my heart! The ending was almost heartbreaking! Oh :(. This was really fantastic, so awesome job!

-Rumpel

Author's Response: Hello Rumple! Blaise has always been one of my favorite HPFF characters too. I love the song and it was stuck in my head for days. I am glad they stole your heart only to crush it- mwahaha! But really thank you :)

XOXOXOXOX,
LLG


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Review #3, by Aphoride I'll Love You Long After You're Gone, Gone, Gone

25th January 2014:
Hey there - stopping by for our review swap! I thought I'd review this since I saw it had only gone up recently and it sounded so interesting! :)

I love the idea behind this. That it all surrounds Blaise and Charlotte, and eventually their child and the song kinda leads you through their relationship - from not really knowing each other, to liking each other, to falling in love and then after her death. It's such a complex journey to take, but you deal with it so well!

Technical things, though, which I have to mention: you really want to check the archive guidelines for song fics. You need to reference the artist/owners of the song and say it's not yours and I think there's a restriction on how many lines of text which isn't yours you can use - I think maybe three? - but it's been a while since I've written one! If you're unsure, check with a validator ;) Don't want you to get in trouble!

That being said, I love how you've followed their relationship from the beginning to the end with snapshots of their lives together, you know? It really brings them to life and highlights the important things they faced and how they dealt with them, while their relationship developed along the way. It really gives both of them a depth they wouldn't have had otherwise.

I loved the sections you picked to show us, as well. Like, some of them weren't necessarily the most important event in their lives, but they showed us something about them, you know, and their personalities and trials and things. You showed us the things which developed them, which was so lovely and really clever! :)

I'm pretty surprised this is your first song fic, tbh! The song really works with the story - they really merge together and compliment each other - and it flows so well.

Your writing is lovely. You could maybe add some more description, but I love how you focus on the feelings and actions, rather than describing every little thing, and the way you write your characters is so believeable. They seem so real - and kudos to you for writing Gabriella so well! Writing young children is always so hard, because it's so hard to get their age and vocabulary and things right, but you really, really nailed it! :)

So, I really love the concept of this, your writing is lovely, your characters are really, really good, you've done so well with difficult topics... this is a really good, bittersweet one-shot! I really liked it! :)

Aph xx

Author's Response: When I saw the validator thing I had to instantly stop and check. This is the rule: "Non-songfics may contain no more than 3-4 lines of lyrics per chapter. Please keep in mind that we do not allow karaoke-style fics on this site. Characters may not sing more than 3-4 lines of lyrics per chapter, regardless of whether or not the story is labeled as a songfic." And I did say the song and title in my summary so I wouldn't forget to credit Phil Philips.

Thank you! Everyone has been saying I wrote the child well which is a relief... I don't like to make people sound younger than they are so I try to be very careful... When I go back through and add some more scenes I'll throw in some more description. I just wanted to take advantage of the 0 hour queue :)I always try and make characters a first priority. It would break my heart to have someone say "Oh your scenery is lovely but your characters are flat..."

I am glad you liked the one-shot overall! :)

XOXOXOX,
LLG


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Review #4, by Red_headed_juliet I'll Love You Long After You're Gone, Gone, Gone

24th January 2014:
Awh... I like this song, and I still didn't see the end coming. I was thinking "what's wrong with the pictures? Come on, your hair can't be that bad!?" But then... yeah. Awh. +[ Poor baby.

This was well done. I liked the little one shots, though it would've been nice to see them married before she died. I'm a sucker for a tragedy though, so I really did enjoy this. +]

As far as CC, there are a few typos. Not anything big really. A few words swapped, "a girl with a book in her nose". Lol. +D but nothing too major. All in all, you managed to get me emotionally invested quickly with little exposition. Good job!

Author's Response: Hello! I am glad you liked it. I was going to add more but I couldn't get the words to come out. I really put "a girl with a book in her nose"?!? Oh my Godric. I don't know how my friend missed that but noticed my was to be by... I am glad I got you invested. I really like the meat and potatoes of a story. As important as exposition might be sometimes, I usually feel like it is just cabbage...

I am glad you noticed she died. My friend cried and then I got a gushy review that thought it was sweet- and I wanted to say "Um she died..." But I think that would have been a little blunt. Thanks Red_headed_juliet :)

XOXOXOXOX,
LLG


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Review #5, by toomanycurls I'll Love You Long After You're Gone, Gone, Gone

24th January 2014:
Oh I thought this was just lovely! I had the song going on Youtube so I got a good sense of flow and sound when I read this.

You did a wonderful job incorporating the lyrics and feel of the song into your story. My heart melted into tiny bits while I read this. Blaise offering to share her suffering was just to die for and their fight in the next section was full of feels. The ending section wtih them married and a family of three was just perfect. Seeing Blaise as a dad (and a really good one at that) was a lovely touch. You wrote their child very well. I really like how he compared Gabrielle to Charlotte in their mannerisms. I laughed at the phrase "for the love of Godric" - great wizard-ism!!

So, I don't have a ton of experience with songfics but I think you did this just wonderfully. Your story keeps the same feels of the song and was just a delight to read.

-Rose

Author's Response: Hello Rose :) thank you for swapping with me! I am glad you had a chance to hear the song- it has been going in my head for weeks now and I needed to push that energy elsewhere. I kind of wanted to make the story more of a tear jerker- and I have one more small bit I'll add once I get the wording just right...

I always say "for the love of Godric", "Slytherin's sake" and "Mother of Merlin" it is great to see Potter-Fans reactions! Thanks again Rose!
XOXOXOX,
LLG


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