Reading Reviews for Small Bump
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Review #1, by LG655 Chapter One

1st February 2014:
Oh. My. Goodness.
That was so touching. I even shed a couple tears. I knew it was coming, but it still gets me every time.
I liked how you had Ron talk to the "small bump". That was cute. I also liked how you incorporated some of the lyrics into his speech. I noticed. ;)
Are you up for constructive criticism? I think, maybe you should've added a bit more description, to Ron's speech, or to when Hermione woke up?
But, other than that, I loved it! (:


Author's Response: Hi!

Ah, I'm so glad you liked it!

Yes! I was thinking the exact same thing! I've been wondering whether or not I should add more to the story, more to the details of his dreams and more details about the child and his feelings.
I should add more to Hermione... hmm. I'll add more and post it this month!

Thank you so much for your review!

- Lostmyheart

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Review #2, by LightLeviosa5443 Chapter One

22nd January 2014:
Oh my goodness!

This story was so beautiful and powerful and I really loved what you did with the song. When I first saw that you had gotten that one I was a little intrigued as to what you would do with it, as it is rather sad. I really liked that you made it from Ron's perspective, and that you had him talking mentally to the "small bump".

You did a fantastic job of integrating the song. Really, truly, I loved it! You're great competition, good luck :)

xoxo LL

Author's Response: Hi!

Aw thank you! I'm so glad to hear that you liked it. Means so much to me.
I actually wrote a different story but decided to re-write the whole thing because I didn't feel the story matched the song. So I decided to listen to the song non-stop while writing and this story happened :)

Yes it is a sad song, but I absolutely love the upbeat rhythm of it, so I tried to keep Ron as positive as possible.

I can't wait to read you version of Kiss Me - also an incredible song!

Thank you so much for reviewing! It made my day!
- A

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Review #3, by Fonzzx Chapter One

22nd January 2014:

Author's Response: Uhm...That's what the song was about.

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