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2 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Jayna The Hogwarts Express

26th March 2015:
Hi! First, I like how this is written from two PoV's. It's always interesting to see the two sides to the story. I also liked how you managed to weave in some of the events from the book. However, there are a few places where, in my opinion, Luna seems out of character. For example,

"Finally! Back to Hogwarts! I didn't use to like going back, but I have friends now - Harry, Ron, Hermione, Neville, Ginny... especially Ginny - and they all seem to think of me as a friend as well. "

I didn't think Luna ever didn't like school because she had few friends. To me she always seemed like she didn't care what people thought. Again, this is just my perspective.

-Jayna

Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback! I try to keep them in character, but I hadn't thought about the friend thing like that, so I'll try in future. Obviously with fanfictions it can be hard to keep the characters the same, especially with a pairing like this, but I like to try, and that should be helpful. Thanks!

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Review #2, by Bellatrixlestrange34(MSP) The Great Feast

23rd August 2014:
Awesome story so far ^-^

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm gonna try to have chapter 3 finished soon :)

P.S I'm reading your Mario fanfic XD


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